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Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 27 2017 9:41 PM Title: Chapter 17: spacific rim? Pt.1

Very creative! Nice job. I guess that's his real life body repairing itself in the last sentence there.

So Im wondering if he could be killed then? Emily crushed him good.

Last comment I am going to make on this, not going to derail your story. Defiad, would it have been so hard to say what you did in your second paragraph while saying you don't think its a very realistic relationship between siblings? Don't be a dick about it when leaving reviews. And you live a sheltered life, I know people who have had very fucked up upbringings and hate their siblings/parents. Dont assume every one lives in Mr Rodgers neighborhood. 

 



Author's Response:

I view this more as his mind grappling with the situation.  Just like the simulator chapter, he is evaluating his level of control and the whole thing is beginning to take its toll. 

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