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Reviewer: Maximus Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2017 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 5 so close, yet so far away.

Oh its on now! Good job. 

If you can stand just one more formatting comment, the story flows better when there is a new paragraph for each person speaking. 

I love the story though. Kylie I think will just have fun with him, I think Emily will really want to dish out punishment, maybe worse. 



Author's Response:

I appreciate the kind words.  Thank you.  I'm gonna try to implement that format and see how it works.  I did notice it in other stories a little bit.  I have a couple more chapters already written but after that I'm going to try it. 

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