Date: June 06 2023 7:57 AM Title: Chapter 1
Hi, are you ever planning to return to this story or write a similar one, by any chance? I would love to see more humiliation, domination and torture of Jason, especially from his sisters, or possibly their friends. A first half of this story is my all time favorite. It would also be crazy to imagine his mother and father will join this torture, even if only from a professional interest. There is a lot more potential on how to prolong his misery.
Author's Response:
I'm still alive, so there's hope I guess. Tbh, I've pretty much forgotten everything I had going here and don't feel like rereading it. I have a plan but no desire right now.
Date: October 22 2018 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
My last review was well timed, 😂 I hope you find that spark again and continue to make more chapters! But, thank you for what you have done so far.
Author's Response:
Nothing to do with timing actually. I've been sitting on 90% of that chapter for months. The sibling fight was all I completed to finish the chapter. I only finished and posted it because you randomly showed interest in it. I can be moved that way. I hope to wrap the whole thing up in the next 4 or 5 chapters.
Date: October 21 2018 1:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just a quick question 😁 Can we expect any more chapters? I LOVE this story!
Author's Response:
Ask and you shall receive I guess. That is the last I have written for now. I still have the grand scheme in mind, but not the spark to write it right now.
[Report This]Date: February 28 2018 11:37 AM Title: Chapter 1
Another great chapter!
This is my favourite story on this site and I love every edition you make to it.
Do you know how often chapters will come out? You don't have to answer if your don't want to.
But anyway, thank you for continuing to make amazing stories and keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for following. I would answer you definitively if I could but I really don't have any schedule. When I'm motivated, they happen maybe every other day. When I'm not, we get what we just had. Time will tell.
[Report This]Date: December 08 2017 12:20 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is one of those stories that starts out pretty ordinary, but the suddenly takes you on an adventure you never saw coming.
I was gonna say something about Mya being really mean, but fortunately it was just a dream, or so I hope.
Its a very good story, and thank you for writing it despite lazy reviewers like me!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to leave some feedback. I still don't really know what I'm doing with Mya yet, but Jason is safe for the time being anyway.
Date: November 23 2017 12:54 PM Title: Chapter 1
Loving the story so far but honestly the 'bait' in the trap for the latest chapter doesn't make any sense.
So Emily is supposed to assume that Clyde, knowing of Jasons new size invited Jason to brave the streets, cars and random pedestrians just to talk to him behind the back of a store?
Author's Response:
Nah, here's what's going on. Emily has Jason's phone, because Rachel told her about it.
She went through it and that led her to Clyde, but she doesn't actually know for sure if Jason is with him or not.
So to set up the trap, Clyde texted Jason's phone acting like he doesn't know anything is going on, and Emily just came over and beat him up.
So now Emily thinks she is tricking Clyde into an ambush by pretending to be Jason.
If that makes sense lol
Date: October 27 2017 9:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
There is no need to get so heated on a fiction story on a fetish website guys, so don't go off the rails here with passion. We all have our kinks and opinions, you just gotta respect them here, it's why we come here to begin with. Understanding.
As for my opinion, I can agree where he is coming from when it comes to.. overly agressive family members not feeling great to me. It just feels unlikely that family has THAT much to hate about another family member. Especially at their age. Just seems crazy really, but that's the world of fiction I suppose. And as I said before in a previous story by Mrsirk, I couldn't agree much with the way the family handled eachother at all. It always felt too extreme..
As for the actual story review, this is an odd little bit of fun in this last chapter lol, I need to actually watch Pacific Rim I think though to understand what is going on maybe XD
As for the main story, the level if anger the sister is putting out is still pretty crazy even for a super enhanced kid to endure. it's definitely pretty nuts to expect him to fully recover from that... but that's once again up to the author right? I find the story interesting and I won't stop reading it as I have actually started to enjoy offering constructive critism on things. I've found quite a few gems on this site of authors who have a lot of talent for writing and I really appreciate those ones who put it out there for others to read on a site like this.
All I ask of any author really is to take any criticism with a grain of salt and not lose motivation. I already did that with a story I tried cause I was too much of a wuss to put it up. I may change my mind though so who knows!
Good luck with the story!
Author's Response:
Lol I would definitely recommend seeing Pacific rim. It isn't exactly like this but it's still entertaining. I'm pumped for the sequel so I made this.
Also I don't really want to battle people in the review section. I'm done defending it now. The way I see it, people probably wouldn't say anything at all if the character wasn't interesting enough to care about so that is a good thing in my book.
This is my first attempt at a story anywhere, so people don't have a style reference on me, but I assure you that you are in good story telling hands here. . . . I think anyway.
Date: October 27 2017 3:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm not critizing the story because it doesn't "cater to my fetish", I'm fine with stories that have cruel/slightly sadistic characters in them when it makes sense. Get off your high horse, it isn't rude to critize a god damn story. Assuming makes an ass out of you and me.
You want me to praise this story? Fine. The details of what Jason does and the environment around him is very vivid and a delight to read, the descriptions of what happens to him can easily be seen in the mind's eye. Stevie is showing us the story, not telling us the story, which is a plus. The writing of the other characters is...well not good though.
I won't stop myself from reviewing a story because some arrogant arse has a self righteous opinion. Yes, there are almost too many gentle stories, but realism is important if you want most people to take the story seriously or even to stay interested. Real siblings would NOT do this to each other, and if they would...well they need to be put into an asylum. I apologize, Stevie; this is just my opinion on the story. Please, don't be discouraged by my review though, my intent isn't to shit on a story, its to give you a reason to think of what to improve.
Author's Response:
I'm not discouraged. Personally I just think that you have an odd place where you choose to draw your line of disbelief. You're reading a story of giants, shrinking, and super powers and how the siblings act is what bothers you. I have things in the works that seem to be far beyond the credit you're giving the story.(as arrogant as that sounds, I know). Everything you've read so far has significance and will come into play. Just let me tell the story lol.
All I ask is for you to think about what you're more or less asking for. Jason has accident. Jason gets Emily's attention. Emily promptly helps him. Parents come home. Dad reverses process. Everyone lives happily ever after. The whole story in one chapter and 22 words.
Date: October 26 2017 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
I actually just sat down and read all the available chapters today and found this one to be rather enjoyable to read. I'm not the largest fan of the feet aspect really, but just about anything else is fair game lol.
I do have to ask, do the sisters just hate the brother because he's smarter then them or they consider him a nerd only? I mentioned this before in another authors story, that it just feels odd for family to be so hateful to one another that they take stuff as far as this in even a fiction sometimes. I know families don't always see eye to eye, and some are far worse then others, but just being hateful to a brother because he doesn't share the same interests as them and they consider him a pain? That seems harsh.
At least the little sister seems to have a SMALL concience.. wonder if it will grow at all.
Author's Response:
That's a decent question. I'd say Kylie ( the younger sister) is just more in the moment. Her first thought was to get help but the conversation broke down. She is mean to him, but only usually after provocation or peer pressure. She still views him as her brother though and that is why she feels bad. She is sort of torn between siblings.
Emily and her brother have a rougher relationship even when it was full size. She had resent for the fact that their dad gives him the most attention. It's more of a power play because she was always bigger than him anyway. There is still love maybe deep down, but the chance to mess with him, added to his durability and attitude give you what you have I guess.
Mix that with the realm of fiction. Makes for ok re-readability I think.
[Report This]Date: October 11 2017 5:34 PM Title: Chapter 1
Mmmmm, why is this so good :)
Date: October 02 2017 10:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
Sorry to be rude, but the story is extrmeely hard to read now that you've thrown formatting to the wind. In the first chapter, it was well formatted and spaced out, now its just a gigantic paragraph that morphs together and is extremely unpleasant to read. (Not to say the story isn't good, but that it kinda hurts my eyes to read it like that.)
Author's Response:
I feel you. I'm trying to figure out the system. Once I get the hang of the uploads I will try to fit it Better.
[Report This]Date: October 01 2017 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
Im liking the set up, tons of potential here. I love durable tinys in the hands of dominant women, so much fun to be had *weg*