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Reviewer: JDO Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2018 1:02 AM Title: Written on the Heart

I remember loving this to pieces when you first posted it. I should've reviewed back then. The comedic tones didn't shift too abruptly into the heavier stuff, which can be really jarring. You had the audience figure out along with the narrators and we all got that sort of "Oh.... oh :(" realization together. 

 

It turned silly fetishy stuff into something rather heartfelt. Brilliant.



Author's Response:

I was in a weird mood when I wrote this. I just had the basic concept, a kind of shark-skin paper that slowly scraped tiny people down. When I started writing, I had to imagine the various competitive teams, why they were there. I was surprised as the story evolved and I started crying hard while I was still writing the ending. I was a sloppy mess. This was a very unusual story for me. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: GiantessLover122 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 30 2017 4:15 PM Title: Written on the Heart

The perfect mix of comedy and emotion! I love it!



Author's Response:

Thank you very kindly, I'm glad you appreciated it in the sprit in which it was intended! I never know if what I see/feel in my head is going to accurately transmit to others.

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