Date: September 22 2017 2:34 AM Title: Dona's titties
Great idea for a story, as the possibilities and directions are bondless. You may want to go into a bit more detail with each position, hearing her breathing, smelling her fragrance, both of their excitement and so forth.
The only criticism I would have are the slight grammatical errors and spelling mistakes. Just do a quick spellcheck and that should clean up most of them.
Keep it going!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing