You must login (register) to review.
Reviewer: D W Signed [Report This]
Date: September 22 2017 2:34 AM Title: Dona's titties

Great idea for a story, as the possibilities and directions are bondless.  You may want to go into a bit more detail with each position, hearing her breathing, smelling her fragrance, both of their excitement and so forth.

The only criticism I would have are the slight grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.  Just do a quick spellcheck and that should clean up most of them.

Keep it going!



Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing

You must login (register) to review.