Date: September 07 2017 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 8
I know I haven't commented yet, but just wanted to say I love your story. I really like Twerp/Nancy whichever she prefers. The fact that she still has mothering insticts after what she's endured from these girls says so much about her character. Honestly she's too good for Peyton. Looking forward to how things develop for her. I think she can find happiness. Peyton's cruel but not maliciously so I think. Otherwise why not let Simba shred Twerp? Huh? Answer that Peyton?! You can't can you! Get outta here!
Author's Response: I'm thrilled that you are enjoying it. I would definitely say Peyton isn't malicious. I ageee with you she cares more than she lets on. She is mean, and can be cruel. But she isn't heartless enough to have malice in her. I think twerp/ navy can find a form of happiness.
Date: September 04 2017 11:58 AM Title: Chapter 7
Okay let me start this offf by saying I LOVE SABRINA like holy shit!!! That was just amazing!! The fact that she made her chew off her foot skin cause she couldn't lift the rock was incredible!! Dude you're doing an amazing fucking job! (Excuse my language lol) but I just can't wait for more!!! 10/10! Excellent work! Keep up the great work!!! Cheers!
I really like sabrina too. She's mean and kinda a bully. But shes fun to write. She has more scenes later too. Hopefully you enjoy the next chapter. If i remember correctly thats the chapter where shit gets real...or it may be the one after.
Date: September 01 2017 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 6
OMG! I can't wait to see what Sabrina has in store for twerp! I love how she finally accepted he fact that she has no say in whatever Payton wants to do! How many chapters would u say are left? And would you ever do an alternative version where the step-mom is big and the other 3 are small with her? Haha just an idea! Cheers!
Author's Response: I probably wouldn't do an alternate version of this story. As I have other stories I'd like to finish. Plus other stories I'd want to write. I just finished chapter 11 today. Not sure how many chapters overall there will be. The next chapter is all Sabrina . I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Date: August 27 2017 1:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
Awesome! The way you write bro is so incredible! I just love it! The way Pey gets her friends involved is a breath of fresh air! You keep this up I'm gonna start paying you for stories!! Lol keep up the great work! Cheers!
Author's Response: I'm glad you are enjoying it. Definitely more chapters to come. Probably today or tomorrow
Date: August 27 2017 3:59 AM Title: Chapter 5
Love Sabrina. Great chapter. Loved how she found a candy bar and still couldn't eat it. Then Sabrina gives her a chance and then takes it away. Awesome.
The gum scene was great. She's so worthless.
I still think a great ending would be that she escapes, finds a teacher and bangs her fists on the side of her higheeled shoe. The teacher looks down and says what do we have here, before her hand reaches down and envelopes her. Just as she thinks that she has freedom it's taken away as the teacher takes her home and puts her in a hamster cage.
Just a thought,
Author's Response: Sabrina is one of my favorite characters. The ending isn't written yet so that is a possibility. A story is always fluid till it's done.
Date: August 26 2017 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 1
As always, great stuff. It'd be cool to see the shoe soles idea come back. For more. I was excited for her being forced to lick clean some gym shoes. It might be cool if Peyton or one of her friends deliberately crushes a tiny amount of food into the treads of their shoe as food for the tiny woman.
Author's Response: That scene will be carried out at some point in the story.
Date: August 23 2017 3:53 PM Title: Chapter 4
Wow! What a chapter and what a story man! Bravo! So far this is turning out to be one of my ALL TIME favorites on this site. You keep up the amazing work! You have a fan in me! Ha, get that reference? Lol cheers!
Author's Response: So glad you are enjoying it. I may finish editing the next chapter this weekend or I may start chapter 10 we will see which way things go. But a chance at a early posting.
Date: August 22 2017 2:06 PM Title: Chapter 4
Cool chapter. Love the freedom given and taken away. Peyton is logical and controlling. I hope Averys dad shrinks. Maybe to an inch and as he looks for help she sees him and squashes him under her shoe.
Will an adult or teacher find Nancy? Maybe hate her also and put her in the class cage that use to hold hamsters?
Author's Response: I don't know about a adult teacher. I hadn't thought about that or outlined anyone in that way. Avery does go home in the current chapter I just wrote which is chapter 9 I believe. So please look forward to it.
Date: August 16 2017 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 1
Chapter 3 was great. The power difference is fabulous. Just raising her voice or the grip of her hand is awesome.
Author's Response: I really enjoy the power difference aspects of this story. They are interesting to write while keeping her a 3 dimensional charcter