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Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05 2020 11:35 AM Title: Chapter 1

Such a terrific first chapter.

Reviewer: Little_eclipse Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2018 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 1

I absolutely loved this story and the degrading and losing humanity was just so awfully good. I’d love to see this story continue or a similar one. If you do I’d love to see more similar to the sock fur idea, that made me squeal in disgust and delight. Something about that was just amazing and I’ve reread that part tons of times. I only wish you described the smells more or in a new story switched it out with dirty panties or something like that. Keep up the good work

Author's Response:

Losing ones humanity is difinately a central theme of this story.  There will be future parts to this tale down the road. I'm sure the fur idea will be revisited its something i always wanted to use in a story. 

Reviewer: giantess jessica Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 15 2017 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 1

hello. Loved your story but may i make a request because i accendently deleted my story after making it and im sure someone brave and skilled like you could rewrite and feel free to add extra for a sweet gal like me.

Reviewer: Pdawg2431 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 09 2017 5:28 AM Title: Chapter 1

I've been critical of certain chapters in this story as I'm sure you're aware, but on the whole you've managed to prove me wrong and produce superb stuff. 

I'm afraid with one chapter to go that you've left an impossible task this time. The whole lesbian thing came out of nowhere, but it's the use of Twerp as a sexual object which is what's wrong with the chapter. 

At no point has it ever seemed like Peyton viewed doing this kind of thing as a possibility. She has talked to much about how Nancy is now her pet and that she will treàt her as she treats her other pets. I'm gonna take a guess and say that she doesn't fuck the animals. 

Plus I think you sometimes forget just how small you have Twerp in this story. At 1inch tall, she would be no use in this scenario. 

Ultimately, I just think that this kind of chapter is beneath you and your genuine talent for storytelling. 

What could've been ,for me, one of the best stories on this site, looks like it's gone on too long. 

As before tho, I'm hoping you will prove me wrong, I just can't see you pulling it off. 

No offense meant with any of these criticisms btw. I happily admit I couldn't write a story of this standard. 



Author's Response: I appreciate your constructive criticism. I think Peyton’s motivations are different then what your viewing them to be. As she didnt use twerp for any form of gratification. It’s not something i intended to be a secret so i don’t mind sharing. It’s discussed a bit in the next chapter but the intent was revenge. She never intended to use twerp to derive any kind of sexual pleasure. In her mind in order to move on she needed to hurt her. Peyton feels twerp took something in a her family from her so by forcing the sexual act on twerp she is forcing the pain her mother and her felt upon her. It’s supposed to be a unreasonable immature response to something. An adult would probably view and handle things differently however they have more expiernce. Which is something she doesn’t have. Shes not 40 with a mortgage. However rereading I get where your coming from. Ithe scene is addressed in the next chapter. As for the relationship there were signs but they aren’t obvious. Like Sabrina’s jealousy with Peyton dating Bradley. The moment they shared on the sofa after Peyton got back from dealing with pig to name a few. But I purposely made it not really obvious so it would be somewhat of a surprise to most readers. I do use twerps size liberally in this story. I purposefully never say specifically so I can work her into different situations. Hopefully I can prove you wrong but I appreciate your thoughts and opinions. It had made me look at the chapter differently. I would probably use more foreshadowing if I had to do it all over again or posted it with the last chapter. I will be curious what your final thoughts are after the next chapter. Thanks for keeping me thinking.

Reviewer: zbh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2017 8:44 PM Title: Chapter 1

Damn that was a great chapter! Any chance of a image showing the new Twerp after gaining her Cotten "fur"?

Author's Response: I can maybe arrange something. Stay tuned for the next chapter. I will see if I can include as a bonus.

Reviewer: Pdawg2431 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2017 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

Thanks for he reply. I'll take what you said on board and stick with it. It wasn't really meant as a complaint against you, it was more hat I see so many stories go down that route. Thankfully, it sounds like yours won't. 😀



Author's Response: I didnt take it as a complaint. Just valuable feedback and I appreciate you taking the time to respond and share your opinions.

Reviewer: Pdawg2431 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2017 6:28 AM Title: Chapter 1

I've loved this but I've gotta be honest, I think you just lost my interest in this story. Having Peyton knowing how to shrink other people has changed the narrative. I enjoyed the thought that she just happened to come across her step mother after a freak shrinking accident, not that there are suddenly pills that shrink other people for no reason. 

The enjoyment in the story for me, was seeing Nancy get tortured and treated like a bug. I was living my fantasy out vicariously through her. Now it seems the story is about Peyton shrinking whoever she wants and as such, that changes the story. 

You're a great writer but I think it's the wrong turn to take. Just my opinion and not a diss, I still look forward to your next story. 



Author's Response: Thanks for the input. Based off what you have said I don't think that you have much to worry bout. She doesn't go on some kind of shrinking spree and Nancy is the focus of this story. I'd suggest giving the next couple chapters a try. Regardless thanks for your honesty and reading what you have.

Reviewer: Syndrea Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 28 2017 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 1

Thank you for writing this amazing story. 10/10



Author's Response: Your welcome thanks for reading. I'm glad people are enjoying this tale.

Reviewer: tokubetsu Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2017 6:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

As always, great stuff. It'd be cool to see the shoe soles idea come back. For more. I was excited for her being forced to lick clean some gym shoes. It might be cool if Peyton or one of her friends deliberately crushes a tiny amount of food into the treads of their shoe as food for the tiny woman. 



Author's Response: That scene will be carried out at some point in the story.

Reviewer: patriot76 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2017 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

Always a pleasure to read your work



Author's Response: Thanks glad you are enjoying it. Thanks for reading

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2017 1:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Chapter 3 was great. The power difference is fabulous. Just raising her voice or the grip of her hand is awesome.

Author's Response: I really enjoy the power difference aspects of this story. They are interesting to write while keeping her a 3 dimensional charcter

Reviewer: Jacksmith Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2017 6:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

Neat to see you writing again, man. Keep it up.



Author's Response: I feel rusty haven't written anything in quite awhile.

Reviewer: v00d002001 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 09 2017 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 1

Loving this story so far. The in-skate scene was wonderful! Hope too see more giantess foot action in the future! Also loved the spit drinking. So humiliating!



Author's Response:

There will be more. Glad you enjoyed that scene and the story. 

Reviewer: TheDARGX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 09 2017 4:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

O-U-T-S-T-A-N-D-I-N-G

HOLY CRAP!!!! Dude this is easily becoming one of my favorites. Keep up the great work, you have an amazing skill in this style of writing I could imagine the horror Peyton is putting her mother through just incredible! 10/10 keep it up man! Cheers!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much. Hopefully you will continue to enjoy. I've been working hard to illustrate the horror of it all.  The next few chapters after this one will hopefully convey some of the humanity of the characters as well. 

Reviewer: KefkaR Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2017 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 1

The master is back. Simple as that. This is probably my favorite story in a long while, and it's good that AsukaFan2001 is back at the helm. I might even forgive him for never finishing NJAD.  :)



Author's Response:

Another familiar face. I had actually forgotten about that story so i went back and read it. It has some potential. If i continue it at some point would need a few edits. someday maybe..never say never.  Glad you are enjoying this one though. 

Reviewer: tokubetsu Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2017 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 1

Absolutely fantastic. The mixture of being ignored, being overwhelmed by minor things, being forced to subsist on spit etc, being truly helpless, and all at the whims of a younger girl... Brilliant. Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thats basically what i was going for in a nutshell. Thrilled you are enjoying it. More posted today!

Reviewer: TheDARGX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 03 2017 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is an AMAZING start! I hope you continue this! The feeling of this story makes it one of the best StepMother/StepDaughter stories on this site, but unlike get others I hope u continue this one bro! I'm a big fan of your writing! Cheers!

Author's Response: I definitely plan to continue this. I already have 30 to 40 pages written. So a lot more has happened then what's posted here. Thanks for being a fan and taking the time to review and leave feedback.

Reviewer: sok06 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 03 2017 2:00 AM Title: Chapter 1

love it so far. 



Author's Response: Thanks for sharing your thoughts. More to come

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 03 2017 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 1

I'm giddy to see this continue, well not a great word for it but I'm just always happy to see this one.



Author's Response: Hey Adam, nice to see your still around and kicking. Definitely more to come.

Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02 2017 10:54 PM Title: Chapter 1

Cool story. You did a great job with describing the part right after she shrunk. The booming sounds of her feet, the shaking of the floor.
Any thoughts on doing one with a lazy son who shrinks and is found by his now gigantic step mother?
Later,
Diesel

Author's Response: As for the lazy son being found by stepmother. Perhaps at some point. I'm focusing on this one at the moment. I don't want to spread myself to thin or not complete this tale. I really wanted to convey the size and scale so I'm glad it translated well to the readers.

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