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Date: August 03 2017 5:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
Really enjoyed this story, however there is certainly still some things you need to work on. All the basics are there when it comes to description of everything (Daisy's mouth, stomach, etc.) but I feel like it should be fleshed out a little more in order to really get a good idea of the situation he's in. For instance, you could go into more description about certain facets of her mouth, like her teeth, or her breath, or expand on your description of her saliva by telling us what it smells like. That'll also help with making your stories longer; another way to do that is by adding little action sequences in, like perhaps how Alex tried to fight Daisy's mouth or get her attention and survive her stomach. You seem like a promising author, though, and I very much hope to see more of your work in the future! :)
Date: August 03 2017 5:57 AM Title: Chapter 2
nice story, but I prefer unwilling and when the victim begs not to be swallowed by his girlfriend or another giantess ;)
Hmmm. So are you leaving a request? If so, I may being able to work a story out like that...
Date: August 03 2017 1:50 AM Title: Chapter 1
I think you need to buy a ruler and check how big six inches is. It's about the length of a hotdog. Nobody accidentally swallows a hotdog.
That aside, its decently written, but you use exclaimation points way too often; to the point where it reads like everone's either a bad actor or its a broadway play.
I like unaware and I like vore, and this is that for the most part, so it's alright.
Thanks for pointing that out to me! That was a slight typo on my end. I meant to say 1/6th of an inch. Don't worry, I fixed it now. I also reduced the amount of exclamations in the story. Nevertheless, thanks for reviewing it! I appreciate it.
Date: August 02 2017 9:49 AM Title: Chapter 1
You say you don't like hard vore, does that mean you don't like digestion either? It's sad to see a good story end right before the best part
No. Hard vore just refers to tinies getting crushed to death by the teeth of the predator. I didn't add in digestion because it was just a short story, but if you'd prefer that kind of ending, I'd be more than happy to add it in. Also, I'm familiar with your work and love it! I especially love your Dying Naked Vomit Girl story!