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Reviewer: MacroGod Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 08 2019 11:57 PM Title: 8. Running with Dianne

things are about to get hot...

Reviewer: Rivenscry Signed [Report This]
Date: July 21 2017 11:03 AM Title: 8. Running with Dianne

Great story so far, I'm enjoying the dual-perspective done right. It's a nice change for once.

 

RE: Chapter 8's question, speaking as a girl: dick please!



Author's Response:

Thank you! I'm excited to hear that both genders are enjoying my story. It's good to get a girls review as well. Some readers want dildo and some dick... So I'll just do both :)

Reviewer: stargate1990 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 6:37 PM Title: 8. Running with Dianne

Great story!  I would prefer dildo, not that I'm against giants.  Also you mislabeled your story.  You have it FF/f, should be FF/m.  Almost missed out because of it.



Author's Response:

Thanks you for noticing the mistake! I honestly didn't even know what that meant until you mentioned it. Brain fart lol

Reviewer: Slacker28 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 4:53 PM Title: 8. Running with Dianne

Looking forward to the next chapters I wonder if he will end up inside his sister again.



Author's Response:

There's a good possibility!

Reviewer: zephilia Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 20 2017 4:26 PM Title: 8. Running with Dianne

Great story so far. The story is well written and you can really get a feel for the characters. I noticed a few spelling mistakes like from chapter 7 near the end you have "I coughed and nearly through". That is the wrong use of through. You should have used threw instead. For example I threw the ball. This would be used in the same way. ALso in the second to last paragraph you have "Dianne Finished tying her shoes and then started her run". The "F" in finished should be lowercase. If you are okay with this type of critisim I can continue, if not I will stop. As for your question I would like to see a dildo scene but as long as the chapter is well written I could handle some M/m action. It hust sometimes when either of these themes are used in a story they seemed rush and dont go into detail. I hope you continue to write and do not give up hope. Kepp up the great work.



Author's Response:

Thank you for the reply and feedback! I honestly write all my chapters just on my phone using notepad hahaha so there are bound to be at least a couple spelling or grammar mistakes in each chapter! I'm glad you caught them and I appreciate you letting me know. I agree and I'll try my best to not rush it!

P.S. "Keep* up the great work" ;)

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