Date: September 18 2017 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Loved Mrs. Nelson. This is good.
Author's Response:
It was all for YOU diesel! It was ALL for you!!........Well not really but like I said changing a name is easy. I might change it again on a whim because I'm very likely the most animated author on this site! Don't quote me on that. I don't need that following me.
Date: September 07 2017 7:59 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Jesus this motherfucker has gotten nuts. Great story, going to some crazy heights i didn't see coming. I think you've taken a lot of elements that exist as subtext in stories like Erica's House and made explicit, while not going to that crazy unbelievable fantasy place that most tiny slave stories exist in where everyone is a sociopath.
Loved the therapy session, could have seen it go on much longer. Loved that the therapist called both Sab and Izzy on their bs, and would be very interested to know what relationship compromise she envisions them getting to.
Would be very interested to read or co-write a conversation between Izzy and Erica. Not sure if it would end in mutual admiration or war.
Author's Response:
A Mutual War of Admiration? Don't know what that is but it would make a good title to something. It's good to get a comment from you! Glad you're enjoying the story. I really like the next chapter for dumb reasons and can't wait to upload it.
I'd also be down to write or collab on a scene with the two main characters of our stories although I don't know what ot be about. The Izzellah presented right now in this story would flip Erica the bird and be on her way while Sabrina just shrugged and walked off with her because Izzy's too small to really go anywhere. I do imagine when they meet up Izzellah will dislike her. As you can see that totalitarian shit doesn't fly with her. Anyway depending on when you're reading this I've fallen asleep so I'll contact you or have already contacted you or vice versa something.
Date: September 07 2017 2:52 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
This was a good chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing this story go on! But I do have one issue, I didn't like that you didn't really go into what happens in Sabby's mouth. Is there going to be a scene later that really details what happens to both Izzy and Sabby when the former is in the mouth of the later?
Author's Response:
Hmm. Not really the criticism I was expecting but, probably not for the rest of this story. I was actually afraid of just rehashing what happened in Sabrina's chapter honestly. It's bad writing to constantly repeat yourself and I try to be wary of that. I'll remember this though and try to add more detail in such scenarios that may return in the future. Thank you for your input.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2017 1:49 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Sabrina's acting like a jerk to her sister. But Izzy doesn't have anything close to a better option. Here's to them becoming the best of friends... or maybe more than that. Sabrina just needs to settle down a little, and Izzy needs to realize that the world is full of Braxtons.
Author's Response:
The world is full of Braxtons!! Oh damn that's a lesson Izzy needs to learn! Way to call it like you see it! We'll hope for the best. Both girls are getting to a turning point. Hopefully it doesn't lead straight off a cliff. Thank you Bob Charlie! Do you know you have two first names? That's pretty cool.
Date: September 07 2017 1:29 PM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
Ugh... I find it hard to believe that Sabrina hasn't figured out how to win her sister over yet.. instead she goes straight for "punishment" and "anger"
It SERIOUSLY bugs me how she acts to her sister man.. I just can't get over that she is that callous to her even after hearing her feelings out loud. Now Izzy hasn't fully voiced how she truly feels yet i'm aware but.. it just really bugs me still how Sabrina is acting towards her.
If she legitamately tried to be nice instead of a bitch, she would be just fine...
Author's Response:
Oh crap! I've angered MadHatter!! Shit! Ummmmm.....look just trust me on this. This is going somewhere! I promise! They'll both be in different places by the end. People are stubborn and lessons are hard to learn. Don't be mad uh...MadHatter. There's still light on the horizon...and kickball. I wonder what that means? Thank you for voicing your opinion.
Date: September 07 2017 11:47 AM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
So Sabrina is finally unhinged. I just hope she doesn't hurt Izzy too badly, that things will all work out between the sisters and that Sabrina comes back to her senses.
With the way their conversation went, I do wonder what the history is between Gloria and Mrs. Nelson?
Great work once again.
Author's Response:
I hope for all those things too!....but ummm y'know what never mind. Best to keep hope alive! I learned that from plaing God of War 3!
Gloria and Eddie! Ivory and Nelson. Well I guess it would be Santiago and Nelson. That's a trade secret enjoy that. I could write a whole story on thier history as I imagine it. It wouldn't be a size story though so you'll never see it here. It would be like a bad soap opera with one man caught in the middle. Who is that man? Someone no one ever talks about anymore!
Thanks for the comment.
[Report This]Date: September 07 2017 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 11: Therapy
It is hard to get a good reading on Sab but she is an amazing tyrant.
Author's Response:
My apologies. I'm trying to show the dual nature of her character but it could just come off as a little weak. Still learning this stuff. She definitely has a real tyrant in there if she's pushed far enough. If Braxton were shrunk? Oh man! Look out! Thanks for the comment!