[Report This]Date: August 12 2017 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
This is a great story. I've always loved the idea of an older sister becoming the play thing of her younger sister. The role reversal is great.
The ice cream scene was fantastic. Especially when Sabrina started to lick Izzy's butt crack! I wish it had continued to conclusion! I really hope there is more like that to come! Please!
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying the story. Thanks for commenting. They're might be a few more fun scenes.
Date: August 10 2017 11:54 AM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
Hello! I've actually been a fan of this story since it started, but I never got around to review it! I'm sorry it took so long, but please know that I have LOVED this story!
I really like the dymanic between Sabby and Izzy. In particular I like how Sabby both cares about Izzy, but also loves to use her for her own pleasure and enjoys controlling her. I hope to see this continue. Also, that scene with the ice cream and Sabby's mouth...GREAT! PLEASE have lots more of stuff like that! :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for working up the courage to comment! I appreciate as much as an anonymous author can (which is a considerable yet appropriate amount. Like more than a high five but less than a free lunch.) Although do feel free to skulk in the shadows reading as you see fit with no obligation to make your opinions known. That's YOUR right IamtheWalrus!
Sabrina really likes the dynamic too! Izzellah could take it or leave it (mostly leave it.) There might be a few more fun situations, but not too fun! Peace!
[Report This]Date: August 02 2017 9:34 PM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
Great stuff, looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Great comment, looking forward to more.
Date: August 02 2017 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
Sabrina's taking charge. Not necessarily a bad thing. Or is it?
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
I forgot to respond to this comment! A bad thing? Who knows?
Date: August 02 2017 12:46 PM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
i can't wait to read about the training
Author's Response:
Izzellah would disagree with you on that. SHAME! But what you shouldn't be ashamed about is commenting. Thanksies!
Date: August 02 2017 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 5: Sabrina
Man, you're really sparking an itch to get writing again. Big fan of this story.
Love your casual use of terms like "augmented" and "small comfort".
I was thinking about doing a story that inverts our "big sister has to deal with begin dominated by little sister". I'm thinking of a relationship where an older sibling shrinks, and to deal with the big scary world tries to adopt the cute pet role to a reluctant sibling/friend. How would it be if someone like Izzy were the one trying to push the master/pet relationship?
Author's Response:
Hmmmmmmmmmm.....good question. That's actually so unlike Izzellah as I imagine her it's tough?
Okay here's what I'd do. I start by playing up the irresponsibility angle. I'll just use my characters as examples. Sabrina would see the shrink as no big deal, Izzy can take care of herself. Moving her around is annoying, she has friends she wants to hang out with. Izzellah gets abandoned accidentally and has a horrible experience. Maybe nearly dies by an animal or gets used by a human. You decide how dark it gets. She survives and reunites with Sabrina. Now the campaign begins.Izellah starts tagging along in secret. Starts doing small favors for Sabrina. Sabrina's friends like her now. She's a great accessory to have. Her intelligence (Izzy's main advantage) proves useful not just in school but in life. She starts getting invited to parties, her grades go up, she talks mom into A NEW CAAAAR! Whatever.
Sabrina being the uniquely possessive girl I've deemed her eventually forms a connection. Sure theres plenty of skepticism at first, maybe even flatout rejection. Izzellah could never relate to her sister and mistakes are made.....but Sabrina's starting to like her daily foot massage, or tiny hands working hard on a full body rubdown, someone to talk to, to ACTUALLY talk to. Big moment. Sabrina gets in too deep, maybe a boy gets grabby. Izzellah actually saves her! Position secured. Sprinkle some teaching moments in there because Sabrina has absolutely no idea how to care for a tiny and your ready to start.
I don't know if this works or is what you wanted. Feel free to change, add, or ignore all of it. Except for the part about Small Comforts being garbage! That's never not true!! Thanks for the comments. I'll pick em up later.