Date: July 22 2017 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 2: Last Moments
off to a great start, mate. can't wait to see how the story goes on
Author's Response:
Thank you very much!
Date: July 22 2017 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 2: Last Moments
Comment I will. Loved chapter 2. Nice job establishing characters. Love Gloria, she seems to know what she wants to do and no one should argue or disobey her. She will bring order to things. Loved when she slammed her fist. A sign of things to come? I am sure Sabrina will annoy izzy to no end. She will take care of her but izzy will not get everything she wants. Rachel seems hot. I don't think izzy wants to be owned by her. i am sure izzy will not like Sabrina's friends. Will Izzy get held by any teachers? Maybe a redhead named Mrs. Nelson. That would be awesome. Will she answer adults with Yes Ma'am?
Loving the story,
Diesel
Author's Response:
AAAAAAAHHHHH!!!! You just called attention to a huge mistake I made! Chapter 2 and already messing up. Typical MrS-...I mean NotSirk. Don't know what the mistake is? Well too bad I already fixed it. So you'll just have to wonder forever. Ironically this whole story in outlined to prevent this garbage from happening.
Soooooo...your comment let's see. Yeah Gloria's all business. She has her own small arc she'll go through probably or something. No Izzellah probably won't like Sabrina's bratty, grubby, little friends with their loud pop music, and their fidget spinners, and whatever dumb preteens are into. Facebook?...Do preteens Facebook? Yeah! Their dumb Facebook, and watching obnoxious Youtubers play their stupid dad dating simulators!...This response was too long. -_- Thanks for the comment.