Date: August 02 2017 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
I don't think Sabrina would mind her Therapist or a Teacher or her Mother handling little izzy for a bit. I get her protectiveness but it wouldn't hurt to show izzy off. It might make izzy more receptive to Sabrina.
Author's Response:
Well take into account ther are certain power dynamics Sabrina can't overcome as a twelve year old girl. You've already seen it. She couldn't stop Ms. Applegate from briefly holding her Izzy or putting her in a cage even though she KNEW it was a bad idea. As much as she insists to the otherwise she can't stop her mom if she wants time with Izzellah either. A therapist would hold somewhat similar authority if one appears in this story. T-h-a-n-k-s. Comments are caring.
Date: August 02 2017 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Will Sabrina's therapist get to hold little izzy?
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Not in front of Sabrina. Not if they want to live.
Later
NotSirk
Date: July 28 2017 2:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
By the way thanks for the compliment on my last reply. If you add Mrs. Nelson that would be cool and well appreciated. She's a redhead and she usually wears tan pumps. I think the heels look great on her. I know that I give details and your the writer but you said if I believe and I do believe. I do appreciate it. I am enjoying your writing style.
Thanks,
Diesel
Author's Response:
What has believing ever actually done for anyone though?! ö_ö I mean now that I know things I can easily just change a name. That's the infinte power I hold as an author! HAHAHAHA! *evil laugh* But I redirect you back to my first sentence. Thanks for doubling down on the comments!
Date: July 26 2017 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
@Nodqfan
DO IT!
Author's Response:
DO IT! DO IT! GIVE INTO ANONYMOUS PEER PRESSURE!
Date: July 25 2017 6:16 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Both this story and "Erica's House" may inspire me to write my own story in this interesting universe.
Author's Response:
I can say I'd been interested in another perspective on the "Erica's House" universe. It belongs to realRS though. Who knows what that one's into? I'd give it a try....because obviously I'm giving it a try..like right now.....Thanks. For. The. Comment.....I wonder if this needs to become a "series" now?
[Report This]Date: July 25 2017 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Another strong outing. Very nice seeing Izzy coping with the loss of control of her life and possessions. Gloria being a 'tough love' type o mother makes her strong maternal figure that I don't see too often in stories. I like the fact that despite Sabrina is still being her innocent-self for the most part, even the minor things she said can be interpreted as threatening to Izzy like when Gloria told Sabrina to practice her violin playing. The care you've put into your story is on clear display.
Author's Response:
I read this comment and was like "Pfft, prepare to be surprised." There's a bit of a turn coming and you're kinda making me want to post the next chapter now, but NO! I gotta keep to the schedule! Just uhhhhh?.....Sabrina's not as innocent as you think. Is that cryptic enough? I don't know. Thanks for your continued interest in my literary farce. Next chapter Thursday.
Date: July 25 2017 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Oh my god, this is fantastic.
Love chapter 2 where Izzy deals with her change in status pre-shrink. Great dynamics.
Her friends debating their merits as owners? Fantastic.
The mother sipping coffee while giving her the talk? Such a great detail, wonderful scene.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Y'know it occurs to me that this story might be "inspired" by (straight up plagiaerising) The themes of a short story you wrote called. "Bigger Better Sister" That was not intentional. I definetly wasn't thinking about that when I started writing this but........I also have NO defense. I expect my legal papers in the mail soon. Thanks for another review. There will be more on Thursday.
Date: July 25 2017 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
I haven't read it yet but I'm so excited!
Author's Response:
Hey! I'm excited for you to read it! I reread a lot of Erica's House to write this. Especially the first few chapters. I hope I grasped the concept of the shrinking properly. I may have taken a few liberties with it, forgive me! Thanks for the comment!
Date: July 24 2017 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
What about the teachers? Maybe a redhead named Mrs. Nelson? How about izzy answering adults with Yes Ma'am?
Author's Response:
Look I can't answer all your questions...or make your dreams come true....or give spoiling story details! Maybe some of this will happen. I mean probably that "Yes Ma'am stuff because it's really only a matter of time before Izzellah get's knocked down to size. But we'll see what happens. Thsnks for the comment!
[Report This]Date: July 20 2017 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
The story is well-written and looks promising so far. Even though it looks like the relationship between Sabina and Izzellah will be the main focus, I'm actually more interested in how her the dynamic with her 'friends' will be post-shrinking, since it's been established that she only hangs around them for their social perks.
Author's Response:
Her friends will return, but maybe not for a while. Thanks for the review.
Date: July 14 2017 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
Good start!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: July 14 2017 1:34 AM Title: Chapter 1: Izzellah
You have established the characters well. Hopefully not too many at a time. Lots of names to remember. In IRS you have a lot to live up to. So far so good.
Author's Response:
Too many characters? Yeah I've made that mistake before. Maybe a better writer could get to the meat of this story sandwich without the extra but I have a habit of needing to establish things. Don't worry too much about remembering names. Not to get too spoilery but this is a story about TWO people really. Can you guess who they are? Thanks for the comment.