[Report This]Date: August 11 2017 11:20 PM Title: Dominance
One of the best chapters for me. It's best when understand better their lives. Makes more sense lots of things on the sisters's behaviors and how they handle life; and their personalities. Can't help but to think about things that can happen or not. 'Will she do this?' 'Shit, Vicky may do that indeed.' Sexy, arousing and also frightening.
Makes much more enjoyable to read, seeing that you seemed to put effort into the story indeed. Your dialogues are very good, feels like natural talk. Especially the erotic parts.
Noticed you made few mistakes on the names of the sisters, like on Sylvia's show that you wrote Vicky instead of her. Wasn't much a problem because was her alone; but could get confusing if having multiples sisters together like in the party.
Sylvia: Wonder if instead of anime figures she will collect people like she is teasing constantly. Owning them, claiming as her own to her life to protect.
Vicky: Putting myself in Nate's place feels relieved. Putting myself in everyone else, excluding sisters, I'd feel terrified the more she grows. Wonder what her father did to her, sounds truly serious as it scarred her. It's loving to see Nate must be the only male in the planet she cares and probably loves.
Diana: Her slowly growing confidence, letting herself go free of fear, with how better and superior she is to others; how her cock is the largest on the planet; how she sees herself above all males now makes her so sexy. Makes me quiver to imagine how it will be when her cock start to reach the size of a person, or much bigger.
Author's Response:
I'm going to go back and try to correct any instances where names have been misused. However, with Jonathan in particular, he's far more interested in Vicki and hasn't been able to get in contact with her. So he was trying to ask about Vicki, on Sylvia's show.
I've been aiming for the Small sisters to have very distinct personalities. The way the three of them interact with each other and Nate will be central to the story in the future!