Date: June 03 2017 9:00 PM Title: An Introduction
I love this story so far, and can't wait for more. Details are the best, and stories with tons of realistic description (even the gross parts) have always fascinated me. I hope this story paints a vivid picture of the odors in Casey's mouth, especially due to the fact she is a cute rebellious teen. I love the unaware aspect, and am looking forward to seeing this story continue. Great job! :)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your input! In all honesty, I didn't think this story would really get read at all. Let alone responded to. The gross parts and odors have always turned me on too and you don't really see that much in the vore community. That was part of the reason I started writing my own stories. Again, thanks! ;)
Date: June 01 2017 10:34 PM Title: An Introduction
This concept seems really thrilling, as very little amounts of story's like this exist. My only comment and or recommendation is to make sure to add larger amounts of detail. This really creates additional bulk in your story. Besides that, keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your advice! I will put that to mind now, as I am starting to write the Second Chapter. Hopefully, it will be out some time this weekend.
Date: June 01 2017 5:13 PM Title: An Introduction
the tags are so hot but this is just so short. hope there comes more. keep it going.
Author's Response:
Of course there will be more! Thank you for checking out this story!