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Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 31 2017 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Revelation

  The length of this chapter seemed to be just long enough.  I had started to imagine Sam actually shrinking - even faster - and dwindling down below their knees. I think it was the 'standing on the chair' that caused me to do that, ...I had to stop, and go back and re-read it again.  Your dialogue is very realistic, It draws you right into the scene. The incest didn't seem to be much of a factor - since you, (conveniently) left those particular details out - but, even knowing that something might have taken place during the night - it didn't really have a degrading feel to it...  Erin comes off as just a 'fun-loving' sister. Yet, her child-like curiosity drives her overbearing personality.  Being physically larger than her older brother and teasing him about it, (including the fact that Julie is even bigger,) really adds steam to the fetishistic aspect of the situation.

  If Sammy were to suddenly find himself shrinking faster and he was actually forced to become their little toy, even though he was completely miserable about it, this could fall into a whole new category!  ;`)

   Sister-lunking?



Author's Response:

midnight,

Sister-lunking? I literally laughed out loud. Thanks again for the feedback, and the humor. :-D

As for length: the original version was over 4000 words. I rewrote this several times. Glad you thought the length was just right.

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