Reviews For The Souvenir
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Reviewer: emshoshoshe Signed [Report This]
Date: November 28 2021 7:38 PM Title: Prologue


very good


Reviewer: Frosty1979 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 1:51 AM Title: Prologue

I really like the Asian woman dominates white guy setting. Maybe she could emphasize more that she sees white guys as way beneath her? Also hope she will stay "dirty" and make him worship more than just her feet in the future.;)

You may check some of the spelling though. There were a couple of very noticeable mistakes; e.g. "here" instead of "hear".

Reviewer: Medrinisoc Signed [Report This]
Date: May 11 2017 1:52 PM Title: Prologue

I love this story, especially the aspect of a cute Asian girl kidnapping and forcing you to submit to her will. I love the details, especially the repulsive realism, and am looking forward to more sensory descriptions. I can't wait for the next chapter. :)

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Reviewer: LilBeni Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 11 2017 2:38 AM Title: Prologue

Good stuff! Could you make it more Racial, and Political (emphasizing "Capitalist versus Communist"), please, plus adding 'Big Couple' elements? THANKS.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 09 2017 7:25 PM Title: Prologue

Looking good from here.

Reviewer: noneaccount Anonymous [Report This]
Date: May 09 2017 2:54 PM Title: Prologue

Not bad, so far. 

Chapters are a bit short and jumpy, but it works out on getting to the point. 

Looking forward to more.

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