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Reviewer: Tiny Steve Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12 2017 7:37 PM Title: First Day

We are expectant.

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 27 2017 3:48 AM Title: First Day

My only complaint with your stories is that they end. Then again, a major complaint folks have with mine is I often don't end them. :)

A refreshing perspective in this story, even though it was typical high school setting. The female protags were gentle and believable. AND you still managed to included X rated content while maintaining the realism. Incredible work!

It would be difficult to continue the story as the 'climax' had already been reached. But I would love to read a longer story by you.

The only part I didn't like was the abduction. It was a tad unrealistic/cliche, so I skipped most of it. However it set up some of the best parts of the story, so if only for that reason, I'm glad it was included (and not too drawn out). Overall, this has to be one of the best if not the best single-chapter story I've read on this site!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing another of my stories!

I have stuck to the short story format so far. Part of that is because most of my stories start out as vore scenarios and once the vore is over I lose interest, and part of it is because writing is a very slow and painstaking process for me and so the idea of pouring tens of thousands of words into one project is daunting. Going forward I hope to write more stories (both in this universe and in my fantasy one) that build on each other, with longer-running plotlines and characters. Don't expect anything novel length like some of the stories on here, though.

I knew the abduction and the character of Ms Corning were pretty cheesy going in, but I needed some sort of conflict to help bring out the personalities and beliefs of the characters and that was the best thing I could come up with that was at least somewhat plausible in a school environment. I'm glad it didn't ruin the rest of the story for you.

Reviewer: AnnoyingLittleMan Signed [Report This]
Date: June 23 2017 10:56 PM Title: First Day

Holy crap, this was probably one of the best gentle stories I've read. Loved it and hope to see a lot more! We need more gentle stuff lol

Reviewer: Saftkeur Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 03 2017 12:45 AM Title: First Day

Just great! I've had my eye on this story ever since I saw it go by on the main page, but I put off on reading it until now; worth the wait, and I wish I'd gone to it earlier. I love the gentleness of it all, while still finding room for other indulgences (mouth play and vore of the non-fatal variety are two favorites of mine, but sometimes feel like rarities).

I have to say, I especially appreciated that Jake had some depth to him, too. The confidence and even stubbornness despite his size is a nice element, not scared of these giants that surround him but not completely stupid and naive either. It's a good little touch that makes him more compelling than the average tiny character who's mostly meant to be the reader's self-insert. And on that note, telling the story from the two girls' perspectives was another nice touch, when it would have been so easy to do it all from Jake's perspective instead; easy, but likely a little shallow in comparison.

All in all an enjoyable read, thank you for sharing!



Author's Response:

Glad to hear you enjoyed it.

When I wrote Jake I tried to write him as someone who had lots of experience with giants already, and so not only would he be unafraid, but he would have a mature outlook on his own situation as a tiny. I felt that sticking strictly to the perspectives of the girls was necessary because ultimately the story is about them and their prejudices and insecurities. Jake's actions and attitudes are critical, of course, but he's not the one undergoing a change - he's already comfortable with himself and his situation. This arrangement (experienced tiny with inexperienced giantess(es)) is the opposite of a lot of stories on here, and I felt it was worth exploring. That said, though, I have some ideas for a story or two that could show how Jake became so hardy and unflappable.

Reviewer: Umm this is my penname Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 29 2017 6:54 PM Title: First Day

This has seriously been my favorite story on this site. I've struggled to find perfect story on here and so far this is it. I'd love to see this continued. Maybe chapters focusing on individual days with one of the girls at a time to build a character relationship between Jake and each girl. I mean, not to tell you how to write, I just love the characters so far and would love to see more.

Author's Response:

I'd never expect anyone to call my writing perfect, but it's definitely nice to hear, so thank you.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2017 5:13 PM Title: First Day

Would be great in the future to have other stories told from the Tony's point of view.

Might also be nice to see some M/m stuff in this universe as well. Doesn't have to be sexual, just would be cool to see some male giants in the story as well.

Reviewer: Pixis Signed [Report This]
Date: April 27 2017 7:53 PM Title: First Day

Very well done gentle story. I definitely enjoyed the world building and the interaction. I'm intrigued to know more about this setting. The fetish inspired ending felt earned after the setup of the characters. The only part I was unsure of was the vore scene. It was very sexy but wouldn't Vivian be more freaked out when she realized what Camille had done? And wouldn't Jake have been scared and traumatized rather than being into it?



Author's Response:

I was playing it pretty fast and loose during that vore scene, I hope it wasn't too jarring. In hindsight it might've been better to have Vivian act out a bit more, and have Jake act more surprised after landing in Camille's belly (instead of just starting to pleasure her right away). That would make the scene longer, though, and dragging out the amount of time Jake actually spends inside Camille stretches disbelief in a different area.

As an aside, I've noticed you have quite a bit of interest in vore (just not when it involves cruelty) and I was wondering if you were familiar with the work of 'Jacksomm Trifker' on Eka's Portal. If not, you should check his stuff out. He's an amazing writer and he has a whole setting based around non-fatal/full-tour vore. Not all of it is giantess stuff, but I think you'd really like the stories that are.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 27 2017 1:54 PM Title: First Day

Whoa! Just---plain---WHOA!

Author's Response:

Always a nice reaction for a writer to see.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 27 2017 1:32 PM Title: First Day

"Was that so terrible?"

To paraphrase the immortal words of the late, great Louis Armstrong: "If you gots to ask de question, Camille, you ain't ever gonna know de answer!"

Reviewer: someguyaround Signed [Report This]
Date: April 26 2017 10:40 PM Title: First Day

The characters interactions and development all felt real enough and the motivations were believable.  I particularly liked that little dudes hopes of equalizing through robotic suits, as I've always personally thought that would be an ideal option in these types of stories set in these types of worlds.  The lewdness at the end was well earned and built up to, and everything before it was enjoyable enough to read to get to that point.  I'm also a huge sucker for gentle stories and ones where the tiny is treated as an equal, and I liked the dialogue that went on a bit regarding that point.  Overall I very much enjoyed reading this and would read more written by you or set in this universe.



Author's Response:

The robotic suit idea is something I've seen around, but never seen explored in depth. I thought it would make a good motivation for Jake to brave a normal-sized high school, and it could be used in future stories within the setting. I think the reason other people avoid it is because it kind of defeats the purpose of having tiny people in the first place, but I think if you're clever there's still plenty of ways to write interaction around the ubiquitous use of suits.

That sort of moralizing or "morality play" that comprises a lot of the early dialogue is one of my favorite things to see in a gentle story, so I'm glad you liked how I handled it.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2017 8:36 PM Title: First Day

Very well done.

Would love to see more stories set in this world.

Author's Response:

Thank you.

There's a vore story already written (that I haven't gotten around to uploading yet) that's set in this universe in pre-enclave days, so you'll get a bit of an idea of how bad things could be for tinies (if you're into that).

In terms of gentle stuff, I hope to write a story soon set about 20ish years into the future. Camille has become a therapist who specializes in human/tiny relations, and she has to help cure a tiny girl of her fear of giants. I'd also like to write a story about the first time Karen and Jake met.

Reviewer: shadowrust Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2017 8:18 PM Title: First Day

The world building was good. The writing was good. I always feel we don't have enough good gentle stuff. I liked it.

Reviewer: midnightwriter85 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2017 7:03 PM Title: First Day

I found this to be very realistic.  I actually found myself visualizing what was taking place. And, that doesn't happen very often... It's an extremely long chapter, and to hold my attention for that long - well, let's just say - Bravo!  I really don't enjoy vore, but this was very well done.  The girls weren't dominant, or careless and they both actually took their time and relaxed before hand, - which, really made this feel real!

  Your writing is top quality and your skill is simply amazing!  I really got into this!  

  Great world building, as well. Loved it.



Author's Response:

I always have a good visualization of what the characters are doing when I write, but it's impossible for me to tell if my writing actually conveys what I'm thinking, so it's nice to hear that it was so vivid for you. If the main goal of giantess fiction is to bring an impossible fantasy to life then immersion is arguably the most important factor in any story.

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