Date: April 18 2017 10:03 AM Title: Chapter 1
I do really love this so far, seems to be just the right mix of genres for me. I want to see this continued, definitely, but please try and slow down your pace of storytelling a little. I wouldn't want the interesting parts to be rushed through ;)
Will give this full stars when you manage to do that and add a few more line breaks! Feel encouraged, this story seems promising!
Thank you so much for this kind critisim. I surely plan to use this to improve future chapters :)