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Reviewer: Inwiththebooks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 14 2017 12:57 PM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

Multisize is a rather underused bit if you ask me so its nice to see it here. As for character wise I know the hardest part of these types pf stories is keeping to the original personalities. Thus far I'd say you've done a good job of that, a bit of rigidness here or there but otherwise nothing that takes me out. Gives me a few ideas of things to write actually so my thanks haha.



Author's Response:

I'm happy to hear your praise, thank you very much.  Without sufficent planning and awareness it can be a hassle to keep track of who is what size, but it is rewarding so long as it works.  That I'm also able to keep all the character true to their source material is also nice to hear, if I were to stray too far from their established personalities it would defeat the purpose of using them.

But the best praise of all is that I have inspired you to write yourself.  I wouldn't even be writing my own stories if not for the works of users like Duggernaut, Silent-One, newschool2626 and many others.  Again, thank you, happy reading and good luck with whatever you write!

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 12 2017 2:24 AM Title: Deific Delicacies

I see karma is still strong on this one, nice. The pet card is indeed terrifing with that kind of that effect, Aqua most likely won't be out of trouble for a while, and won't be out of something else if she can't correct the misunderstanding somehow =P I wonder if Megumin thought back about the giant toad's mouth when she suggested Aqua's preference...

And it's nice of Eris to keep the good sportmanship even when she's affected by the cards.

I'll be waiting for more, good job. It's was a really enjoyable first round.



Author's Response:

It really is nice to see karma in action, isn't it?  Trust me, Aqua can't take it easy just yet and with Wiz unaware that poor wording will result in Aqua unable to resist basically anything, she's in for a long game.  As with Eris, she may be basically chaos incarnate but she's gotten bored of doing whatever she wants without regard at least for rules she sets, also she a bit or a pervert so getting up close and personal with her players is always a treat.

I', glad you like the first round and after a short intermission I hope the second will be just as, if not more, enjoyable!

Reviewer: Inwiththebooks Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 11 2017 9:34 AM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

As one that greatly enjoys Konosuba, decent fanfiction, and games of chance this story has very much tickled my fancy. I've got to say I agree with your response on the previous, never enough Aqua bullying. Ever. I'll be following this one for a bit I think.

 

Cheers



Author's Response:

Thank you very much!  I'm thrilled to hear I was able to hit so many points with you.  Oh, Aqua still has two more rounds to get through, and let's just say she is in for a rough time :)  I look forward to hearing from you again in the future.

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 05 2017 2:40 AM Title: You Reap What You Sow

That's some big karma right there. I'm quite a fan of those scenarios, entrapment and humiliation, with that little bit about Wiz's sweat, so it was a nice combo for me. Also, the way Wiz handled Aqua at the end was cute, even if the tiny is in a shock now.

And that part with Darkness, maybe there'll be a chance for her to be in a equally degrading or maybe worse situation in the future.

Really nice.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  Yeah, don't get me wrong, I love our resident, stupid, invisible-panties wearing water goddess as much as the next fan but I love seeing her get taken down a peg too >:)  And this is only the begining.  Everyone will find themselves in enjoyable situations throughout the game, so stay tuned!

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2017 9:55 PM Title: Beyond Even a God

So a transition chapter, certainly it doesn't feel as powerful as the other but is still nice.

Aqua seem to have been saved for now because of Wiz but I kind of doubt that's enough for her to learn her lesson. Darkness being at that size open a window for a lot of possibiliets and I'm interested in what Megumin is going to ask for. And nice detail with Chris there.

Also, there's something I'm not sure I get. "Pet for the Game" is the only magic card left for the rest of the story?

 



Author's Response:

I'm glad this chapter sat well with you, and hope you will be satisfied with the rest of the story as well.  Now that I think about it, I don't think I even mentioned it in the story proper, but there are going to be three rounds in total for this story.

And remeber, Aqua's cards got the 'JOKER' pair that still, so the rest of her cards still need to be reintroduced to the deck.

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2017 12:50 PM Title: Everybody gets One

Great to see even more interaction on this one. Poor Wiz she's having it rough now and the next time there's and interaction with her, it might be worse, for her at least. Aqua and Chris seem to be enjoying themselves, the later one in more ways than she would've expect it seems. And I'm sure Darkness must've been happy of being even smaller this time and of course the foot crush. I'm happy you added at the description things like the smell, I'm a fan of that. And as for Megumin, at least she's having it better than Wiz, she might be able to take revenge at some point. Also I'm a bit happy to hear that even if she were to end up as a pet, Eris might not be as rough with her as with other pets.

You're making this have a comical mood together with the erotica, which is a great thing. Kudos for that. Also, I'm a bit curious and eager to see which character you would introduce when a unaware pair gets played.

Anyway, keep it up.



Author's Response:

I am overjoyed to hear so much praise.  As like with the show, the character interactions are suppose to be the main draw with their reactions to the events.

I hope to be able to continue making enjoyable chapters in the near future

Reviewer: Haloichigo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 19 2017 10:33 PM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

I love Konosuba, so i was naturally interested in this story. I wasn't expecting much from it, but I am glad that i was wrong, because these two chapters have been incredibly enjoyable. The characters seem true to there anime/manga counter parts which is great for such a colorful cast like this. I prefer feet and vore, but I still did enjoy the but crush. I also enjoy futanari, but thought that Wiz having such a huge dick was a bit too silly, other than that i enjoyed what you have shared with us.



Author's Response:

I alway love to hear that I am able to keep the characters true to their source material, so thank you very much for the seal of approval.  Feet and Vore will be showing up in the coming chapters, and while it isn't mentioned in any of the cards descriptions now that I think about it, any card that alters or adds something to the target is decided by the user, thus I thought Aqua would want to inconvenience Wiz as much as possible but still that is my fault for not clarifying.

Reviewer: Niggle Signed [Report This]
Date: March 18 2017 2:41 PM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

Really good story so far and I'm definitely looking forward to see what else gets drawn, but after looking at your list of card effects a question popped into my head and wouldn't leave me alone.

 

Does the permanence card only effect ongoing things or could it be used on someone who for instance had been previously been targeted by a crush card (foot,breast,butt any of those) to make them be constantly crushed? (By the one who was originally chosen as the recipient ofc)

 

Silly question but like I said it was just something that I suddenly thought of, as depending on how the next few chapters go and the characters that may play this game in future stories it's something I can see the more sadistic girls doing.

 

Any who keep up the brilliant writing and I am eagerly looking forward to the next chapter (also I'm wondering if Aqua is going to end up getting crushed/consumed by the massive girlcock she's given Wiz).



Author's Response:

Thank you very much.  In answer to your question, yes the permanency card does only work with ongoing cards like the Grow and Shrink cards or basically anything at lasts longer than 'a few seconds' as the cards descriptions detail.

Honestly I posted the list of cards and effects so anyone could know what to expect coming into this series but I also understand that I may have left some of the entries vague unintentionally because I understand how I intend to use them so if you have any more questions please feel free to ask.

As for Aqua, well I'm trying to keep with the theme of the show, so...

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 18 2017 12:39 PM Title: Let the Fun Begin

Nice one!

I liked the chapter, the butt crush card was one of the ones I was most eager to see, same with the other butt-related cards and some more.

The way you wrote the girls was very in character with them, the same way they would've acted on the anime. Aqua messing with Wiz might come to bite her in the butt later. Darkness meking Chris embarrassed by talking about her being heavy, she grinding while sitting on her and Darkness' reaction in the end was great to read. Also, the way you delayed the description of the buttcrushing and making Darkness say it after the act was clever.

The only criticism I could point is maybe the lack of an answer from Megumin after Eris saying she wants her as a pet. Though that may be nitpicking.

Anyway, looking forward to the next chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you very much!  I also really like the butt related cards and I was actually really worried I might have strayed from the ggirls personalities, so I'm relieved to hear that isn't the case.  As far as Aqua messing with Wiz, let's just say her luck will be much like in the anime and I'm happy I was able to make the first real interaction between two characters characters interesting.

As far as Megumin's reaction, I went for a less is more and subdued her behavior because she isn't entirely sure what Eris would do to her but I probably should have put a little more to it.

Again thank you and I hope you'll like the next chapter as much as the this one.

Reviewer: The Micro Giant Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 18 2017 11:40 AM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

I'm really enjoying this so far! Konosuba's one of my favorite shows and I look forward to what debacherous acts the girls get up to!

 

I'm also hoping to see some extreme shrinking based on that nano tag! I did love seeing Darkness get buttcrushed by Chris and can't wait for more size change



Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm really glad you enjoyed it.  There is a ton of shrinking and size manipulation coming so I hope the coming chapters are just as enjoyable.

Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 15 2017 12:42 PM Title: Shall We Play a Game?

Great, I love those tags, Reiko-samaa's videos and specially KonoSuba so I'm really looking forward to this one! For now it's a good start.



Author's Response:

Thanks!  I'm because KonoSuba has such dynamic and characters I just hope I can keep everyone's mannerisms in tact.  Especially Aqua.

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