[Report This]Date: February 11 2018 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 9: Bonds
Really loving how the Sihil Teagan relationship is developing. Its very different to see this type of character development occur without any dialog due to the language barrier. As an aspiring writer who's always had the biggest issue with dialog I might need to borrow this trope for my own story! I think you have done a great job describing Teagan as a sexy destructive giantess while making her feel like a real person due to the scenario you set up with the differnt races. I continue to root for her feelings to flourish for Sihil as well as for her to crush and defeat Firkon once and for all.
Author's Response:
Thanks! As someone who also struggled with dialogue, I can certainly say that actions are far more powerful than words, and a language barrier can certainly make that aspect of a story shine. If it helps you write, go for it!
Date: February 09 2018 10:58 PM Title: Chapter 9: Bonds
We are starting to see more of Teagan's struggle with the Tomkins. If Sihil didn't act, she would be done in by the tower siege and now Teagan might have to fight for her life against this beast the Tomkins mentioned. To make matters worse, Firkon still wants her dead. You really put a lot of tension in just one chapter. Good job!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Although the beast sadly doesn't play too large of a role right now, rest assured that it isn't done with Teagan yet. As for Firkon, while his efforts are noble, the result of him fighting Teagan is generally a draw at best. Perhaps we'll see him gain an ally a bit more competent, who knows?