[Report This]Date: February 03 2020 8:32 PM Title: Size Matters
I meant to write a review of this a long time ago, so I apologize for forgetting, but it still needed to be commended so here I am. This story has so much about it that I love it's amazing. The characters are so real and relateable. the dialogue between them all is better written and more natural sounding that some TV shows and movies that I've seen. The scene with Ingrid finally taking down Marcelle was like the release of a long pent up breath, a long time coming and satisfying to the extreme. Now that you're setting the stage for Gail and Tanner to maybe become a thing, I'm kind of into where it's going. They're really nice together and their conversations are fun to read about, how they philosophise size difference and stuff. That alone is an enormous compliment to your writing. When you can just write a conversation and I'm entertained by it, and the thought process behind it.
I know you just had a conversation with Gail thinking about other people being small but I'd love to read something about Gail talking about what it would be like if she were a giant in a world of tiny people. Maybe have the mood turn all sexual again and it may lead to something between her and Tanner?
That's just a suggestion. I don't ever want to tell you how to write your own story, because I can't ever do someone else's work better than they can. Go with whatever you want to do, and it'll come out as the best version of your work. I just wanted you to know how much I've enjoyed it. Please keep doing what you're doing, and I look forward to the next chapter, and whatever comes next for Tanner, Ingrid, Blake, and Gail.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for that. Looking back to when I posted the first chapter in 2017 there's so much I can think back on and would probably write A LOT differently in hindsight. Marcelle while I enjoyed writing her, I did want to send off to the sunset after receiving her comeuppance. Gail and Tanner's dynamic has also been very fun to write since they can bounce off each other with similar grievances.
[Report This]Date: November 14 2019 3:51 AM Title: Size Matters
I like to read in between doing other stuff, but I had to put everything on hold when I saw an update from this story. There are some good, very good stories in the site, but, I must say that your story is not just great. It has beauty. I get really scared sometimes because of the long hiatus between the updates, thinking you might just have given up on writing, but, when I see the depth you’ve managed to give your characters, I understand you have put a lot of thought in them. Either that or you are very talented. Not one member of the main cast is one dimensional.
I know it seems I am just a flatterer, but I mean every word. Thank you for writing and not abandoning this site.
About the chapter, I still ship Tanner with Ingrid as unlikely as it maybe at this point, although I will admit Gail is a very interesting character. She did with Tanner exactly what she said would do with her parents if they were small in ch. 20 (if I am not mistaken). She ended the conversation when and how she wanted because things didn’t go her way a.k.a Tanner being honest telling he had feelings for Ingrid. This foreshadows (and Tanner knows it) a lot of hardships will always come for him on an emotional level, for he will never be on equal grounds with anyone in anything aside from the intellectual and emotional dimension.
Tanner knows his reality, he is frail and powerless most of the time, but, most of all, he knows he can’t change the facts. So in this chapter he tries to instead change his own relation with himself, with his size and the sexuality that comes with it. This shows how mature he became (and how mature this story is).
Ivory on the other hand is very complex. She is right about the dangers surrounding her son and wanting to protect him from a world too big for him. But us, as the audience, instinctively feel this is wrong in some level and form . An interesting way of developing her (Ivory) arc would be for herself and her house to become a danger, a harm, for her son. Obviously I am expecting some showdown between Ingrid and Ivory, which will once again lead to many emotional revelations and growth.
I recently learned how to give five stars and your story more than deserves five stars. Thank you again and I can’t wait for the next chapters :D
Author's Response:
Thanks a ton, as I mentioned in a previous review sometimes it's hard for me to read praise like that when I look at previous chapters and begin thinking of what I'd do differently. Usually not major changes, but nitpicky things like a change in dialogue, character interaction, or catching typos and formatting inconsistencies. On a more optimistic note I am very satisfied with the overall progression of the story and how it's evolved from where it first started when I only had a very broad outline of the beginning, some of the middle, how I wanted the story to end, and some general characteristics of the main trio. With that framework in mind sometimes the difficult lies in narrowing down what I want to focus on especially when I can see something playing out in a few different scenarios.
Tanner trying to find his place in the world and come to grips with everything that comes with his size both good and bad, as you noted has been one of my favorite elements to explore. As for Ivory despite being hyper-protective of him and having a lot of justification for being so may not be best influence for Tanner.
Author's Response:
Thanks a ton, as I mentioned in a previous review sometimes it's hard for me to read praise like that when I look at previous chapters and begin thinking of what I'd do differently. Usually not major changes, but nitpicky things like a change in dialogue, character interaction, or catching typos and formatting inconsistencies. On a more optimistic note I am very satisfied with the overall progression of the story and how it's evolved from where it first started when I only had a very broad outline of the beginning, some of the middle, how I wanted the story to end, and some general characteristics of the main trio. With that framework in mind sometimes the difficult lies in narrowing down what I want to focus on especially when I can see something playing out in a few different scenarios.
Tanner trying to find his place in the world and come to grips with everything that comes with his size both good and bad, as you noted has been one of my favorite elements to explore. As for Ivory despite being hyper-protective of him and having a lot of justification for being so may not be best influence for Tanner.