Date: November 20 2017 9:41 AM Title: Kidnapped
I want to know what happens, if you choose not to write an ending then could you please just summerize it.
Date: November 20 2017 1:55 AM Title: Kidnapped
Yea at least go through the majority of fetishes before you end the story. I'm an ass man myself. You have a talent for POV
Date: January 02 2017 5:47 AM Title: Kidnapped
it was cool.
I can not wait for the next chapter
Please more.
Author's Response:
Glad you are enjoying ^_^
[Report This]Date: December 30 2016 11:26 PM Title: Kidnapped
I been reading this story ever since you posted this and all I can say is that I like this story. The interaction between the characters are so unpredictable and mysterious, it keeps me coming back for more. Overall, keep up the good work :)
Author's Response:
thank you very much :)
Date: December 30 2016 4:20 PM Title: Kidnapped
Also forgot to mention the camera. Is she sending it to someone, a picture of Percy? Hmm.
Speaking of other people. I'm still crossing my fingers if this girl's mom shows up and gets kinky with Percy.
My mind truly is fantasizing right now. Haha!
Date: December 29 2016 5:18 PM Title: Kidnapped
Well the giantess doesn't really talk. It keeps Percy and I guessing. Plus I hate all of the useless dialogue people put in their stories and videos. Less can be more.
The giantess had mystery to her. It gives her a certain charm. It's like she doesn't consider Perry worthy of conversation. It's a nice touch. The mystery makes her more ominous, more foreboding and I like her silence a lot. It works.
The insertion tag has me wondering. Will Percy be a simple dildo? That would be incredibly demeaning and compliment the idea that she doesn't consider him worthy of conversation. Like "he's just my sex you now". Just a few thoughts, since you asked.
Author's Response:
hmm interesting, this type of giantess was exactly what i was going for, however i fear that due to the style of writing ive decided to approach rather than using "i, my. etc" that some of this effect may be lost when her identity begins to reveal herself. Non the less this is who she is for what has happened to her.
Date: December 29 2016 1:25 PM Title: Kidnapped
A mysterious start. It makes me want to read more. What was Percy doing outside before the end of school? Shouldn't he have been in class or at least visiting the school library. You did say he has good grades, so he sounds like the studious type.
Here:
thrashing about at the girls massive fingers
Should be;
girl's massive fingers
Author's Response:
Thank you! I've made the change :)
Date: December 28 2016 4:11 PM Title: Kidnapped
I like the dart rather than a ray, but the shrinking scene itself lacks good scale, but the quaking is a good detail. The trees are described as colossal but there's no mention of the doorknob being above him just farther away so I don't know what size he is during the capture scene. I think the first chapter should include a description of what the girl is wearing even if it's just a schoolgirl unifom they come in different colors. The missing persons report and cellphone are both great details, though the second chapter has alot more detail, inluding the brand of the bag and it's movements. Exciting so far.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the review! i had previously wrote the first chapter with a lot more detail on the shrinking, i had objects that had been dropped by Percy that ended up surrounding him at his new size. however for whatever reason, when i posted the chapter it failed. so i lost all the text. currently i write on a different platform in order to fix this problem, but got a tad frustrated and lazy with the first chapter as a result! Hoping i improve in future chapters :)
[Report This]Date: December 28 2016 12:01 AM Title: Kidnapped
Welcome to giantess world.
First stories are always the hardest because this one story is basically your first impression to everyone. Although, everyone knows to give you some slack since it's your first story.
Like everyone else, I love the start. It's mysterious. We don't know much about the characters and the girl hasn't said a word yet.
I like how you included the insertion tag. It's arguably my favorite. Makes me intererested to follow the story.
We leave off with this girl taking this boy to her home. Is there a chance that her mom might have some fun with him? I know it's a stretch since it's your first story and it should follow your fantasy, but I would be glad if I knew if her mom was involved too.
Now, this girl seemed to put some pin in the back of this boy's knee. She did that effortlessly which makes me think that this girl has caught more guys in the past.
I love this first chapter, and I can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Hey thank you very much for the lengthy feedback, i appreciate it a lot. I am generally writing from my own perspective, so writing in a different person for the first time is proving to be challenging. I'm also quite fond of this tag, so i hope to be able to satisfy your enjoyment! To your questions, for now im going to leave you in the dark!
Date: December 27 2016 3:44 PM Title: Kidnapped
Great start, can't wait for next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you! the next chapter was written a lot different than i expected, i hope you enjoy it none the less.
Date: December 27 2016 9:48 AM Title: Kidnapped
starts interesting
Please more
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it :D
[Report This]Date: December 27 2016 9:17 AM Title: Kidnapped
Excellent start. Keep it going.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for the feedback :)!