Date: March 13 2017 5:45 AM Title: Back Story
Good story but the weight is off. If you were 1 inch tall, 0.4 pounds would be as if he or she was made of the densest metal. For example an 8 pound baby would be 0.000028 pounds or 0.000448oz.
I'd have to land the blame on myself not being accustomed to pounds as a unit of measurement. In the UK we use Stone, Grams and Killograms over Pounds. I knew something like this would happen as I put a note on the first chapter saying that I may get a few things wrong when it comes to translating phrases, slang or anything of the sort for an American audience. Anyway, thanks for telling me. I'll try to be more careful and read further into stuff like that for upcoming chapters.
Date: March 12 2017 9:17 PM Title: Morning Glory?
Misterious... It's like she's almost certainly 'hiding something' from him. The english teacher is probably watching out for Blake... does she already know about Rylee? She's definitely worried about Blake finding out about her... but, finding out what...
Great chapter! :`)
Thanks, Jay! Your question will be answered very shortly... ;-)
Date: March 12 2017 7:22 PM Title: Morning Glory?
Heh! "Weird" doesn't begin to describe that interchange.
Yep! I realise that this chapter is way too vague to make anything of at the moment.
But hopefully it's intriguing enough to want to find out ;)
Date: January 22 2017 8:57 PM Title: Back Story
Finally the kind of story I've been looking for, for so long keep it up
Thank you :) Glad you like it. As for "Keep it up", the next chapter will be a while as I'm aiming for the 3000+ word mark and I'm quite busy atm. So stay tuned ;)
Date: January 14 2017 6:13 PM Title: The Clash
Oh? I had to re-read what you replied a couple times, ...'my name's not Blake?'
Then, after I washed my dishes and was drying them, 'OH YEAH!' - MARSYMAN!
...I was 'so' into reading that last chapter, I just called you, Blake, LOL!
I did think it was a bit odd at first XD It's fine though dw
Your reply genuinely put a smile on my face as, I too, have random eureka moments whilst doing completely mundane things ;) It's funny now but it's a bit awkward scrambling for a pen and paper whilst piloting a plane...
jk, thet dont let me fly planes anymore
Have a good one!
(I know I have a terrible sense of humour pls forgive meh :3)
Date: January 14 2017 1:52 PM Title: The Clash
Cute chapter. I like that the little guy rescued her, rather than the other way around. Rylee seems a bit clumsy, which is endearing but potentially dangerous for Blake I would imagine.
One of the earyly drafts had her saving him, but I thought the switch would be more telling of her character and their dependency. Thanks for reading! :)
Date: January 14 2017 10:02 AM Title: The Clash
Nice introduction. Rylee kinda 'exploded' onto the scene there, ...and thunder rolled...
I like the constant fear, lingering in the background. The stupid bullies and the 'Zombie-like' followers that are always around -too afraid to stand up for themselves's, but never going against them - seems like no matter where you go, it's always the same.
Oh well, anyway, ...Blake has finally made a friend. Rylee I hope, and she seems like someone who will be quite 'special' to our little protagonist.
...can't wait for the next chapter! ;`)
Ayyyy Midnight! Can I call you Midnight? Idk, abbreviating names is always easier for me. It feels weird, like it should be read out in a robotic voice, if I type 'Ayyyy midnightwriter85' you know what I mean? Just say if it's not ok.
Anyway, cheers for the ongoing thoughts! They really give me motivation to continue this and not procrastinate :P
Date: December 23 2016 5:38 AM Title: Forgive and Forget
Blake and Pheobe seem perfect for each other (this is fiction and no real people are involved, no chance of harm, children with genetic defects, etc), plus, there is such a thing as consensual incest between adults, believe it or not, its just not really mentioned due to stigma ( who can really blame them for not talking about it? imagine being judged everywhere you go by people who don't understand and don't care to try).
As a hopeless romantic, I support all consensual relationships between legal aged adults. If people no the risks, and act responsibly, I don't believe the law should be involved.
(BTW, before anyone says anything, I have no siblings and am not attracted to anyone in my family, I just support consensual love, there IS a difference between supporting something and taking part in it... )
Date: December 22 2016 5:21 PM Title: Forgive and Forget
Blake seems very mature for his age. Realizing so quickly, that he needed to pull in his horns, and not to succumb to his pridefulness. It takes most people a lifetime to be able to do that!
Can't wait to meet 'Rylee', I have a feeling that she'll be quite 'Unique'. If Blake's lucky, maybe she'll fill in for his sister and give the Lil' dude a break... ;`)
Thanks for the reviews. And, yeah. Blake just took a step back and saw that fighting with, sadly his only friend, was petty. Something most people wish they could do.
Also, Rylee will probably appear in either the 5th or 6th chapter. It's funny though. I originally intended for her to appear in the 3rd chapter and for the 2nd to be the only Phoebe focused one. I guess I liked Phoebe's character a lot more then I expected and I came up with quite a few ideas to give her and Blake a bit more depth once I started writing.
Anyway, thank you for reading and I'm glad you're enjoying it ;)