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Reviewer: emshoshoshenis Signed [Report This]
Date: February 26 2022 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 2

best of the best

Reviewer: Jay Signed [Report This]
Date: April 07 2007 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'd like to congratulate you on completing your second story. It was certainly an improvement in terms of character development and descriptions.  I enjoyed the ending immensely.  However, one piece of advice is that I would have liked to see her torture him longer in leading up to his demise.  Perhaps scrunching her large toe above his tiny form, belittling him about what she was going to do to him,, making him take long breaths of her feet, and then doing it. It seemed a tad rushed at the end.

 That said, good job and I hope you continue to write stores using these themes in the future. For me,the key is having enough invested in the characters that it's a jolt to witness their cruel deaths by a relative's feet.

Reviewer: billyevil Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 05 2007 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 1

I liked the love story aspect of it all. You do nice work, thank you for the story.

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