Loving the story man. Keep it up!

Author's Response:

Thank you... again? xD

The argument between Casey and Eve was hilarious! I could see their personalities clashing. What shocked me was when Eve broke her sophisticated dialect when she said, " Don't piss me off, kid." To Casey. Cant wait to see Abby interact with the other girls in the cave! Awesome job again you two! P.S. I copy/pasted this review in case it gets deleted by accident again. ;)

Hey, really nice chapter, some new info but a lot more new doubts and expectation.

Eve again shows hew feelings for Abby, being mad with her at the start of the chapter and with Casey later on. Should've been really painful for her the whole incident with Ebon, specially not making it in time. Also, more focus on her being dead than before. I was thinking that maybe that's the way vampires appear? Rather than reproducing among them, transforming recently dead hominals or something like that. I'm eager to know about her past though it doesn't seem to be coming any time soon.

The whole discussion with Casey was fun, you two did a great job with that. I guess that shows that the dullahan has her own ways in which she excels. The whole "lovelorn" part should've hurt though

And well, even after what she did I still feel pretty bad for Ebon. The mention of her bringing back herbs each time, even if she didn't know if they helped, hurt me a bit. Her reasons for what she tried to do to Abby is something I'm really interested in.

Damn, Kari seems special. Kind of har to believe her problem after seeing the other girls being so open about getting energy. Also, I wonder how a shadow feels... Anyway, Casey holding Abby (L).

The whole feral thing sounds really dangerous. As Abby said, if they were to go on rampage it would be quite hard to protect the shrunken teenager from the, and Ebon. I did thought for a bit about her being used to feed the other but was unsure if taking so much energy from her would be fine or have any bad implications for her. But if Eve had the same idea then it should be fine I guess. Sounds a bit hard to think the she could be able to give energy to all of the girls but I suppose is more of an issue of efficency? Abby having a special "fuel" that she can't use but works wonders on the other girls, while stuff like food works better on hers. By the way, she wasn't mentioned but I suppose they're also hunting food for her? Though it shouldn't be much effort to feed someone the size of a doll. Also, I didn't think as far as befriending the other girls. I suppose they would fight for against Ebon for their source of nourishment but I wonder if they can make Abby see like more than that to them. Hopefully...

Eve brings more foreshadowing with the reasons that Najia's recovery is direr now and there being someone that hates humans more than Ebon. I guess that should be the hardest one around to deal with. I'm really curious to know who could it be.

And well, with that kiss I guess Eve is taking the lead in the race for Abby. I find Casery specially adorable but also like ve a lot. Wathever the result is between the three of them I hope they end up on a good note. I guess polygamy ain't an option with those two hominals involved? lol.

I'm really looking forward to see how this goes. This seems to be the start of the introduction of some other girls and getting to know them more and I'm really hyped about it.

See ya.

Just wanted to let you know I liked this chapter, and the whole story in general. Abby is in for quite the ride, if she's going to be providing energy for the whole group. I wonder if they'll just gather everyone together and tell them about Abby that way, or if they'll introduce them to her individually, like has been happening. Anyway, I like where the story is going. Keep up the good work, both you and Franchise Writer!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your input. It really might not seem like it matters but it does to me. It makes me happy to know you like it and it's going as planned. :D Thank you for taking the time to say this Foreignkanto. I promise you the rides far from over, for both you, and for Abby :p

Every girl you've mention, including Abby, have been adorable but when you introduced Goomie, I couldn't take her cutest. IT'S OVER 9000! I literally was enamored with this sweet little slime girl that I simply could not explain it... but I'll try. The way she said "hooman." The way she tried to thank Brook. I almost whimpered when this precious baby whimpered! Just stop... Your killing me with these cute girls! Again, Eveline just keeps on getting more mysterious. Like Abby said or thought I guess, Kari and Casey made her out as a girl who is utterly dangerous yet Brook seems to adore her which of course is understandable from how kind Eveline is to her even going as far as to keep her secret of Goomie. I'm also glad Eveline and Brook are good friends cause, well... I'd rather be Eveline's friend than enemy ._. Again, awesome work, you and Franchise. 

Is good to have a calm chapter after last one's actions. I think is more clear now what Eve's intentions are, she seriously feels something for Abby and won't let anyone get on the way. The way she took care of the pain for Abby should be more than enough proof, gladly it seems that won't have big consequences it seems. Also, I find it really cute when she's taken by surprise and end ups blushing.

But Brook is the start of the chapter. I really like her smug attitude, seems like an interesting adition to the story. Her powers are fascinating, I wonder to what extend she got control over the water and what else she can use it for. At least being able to transform her body into water is not something I remember seeing before, is nice to have some novelty. By the way, I think her entrance was cool.

I wasn't expecting her to tell about her past already, really sad what she had to go through. At least Najia was there and arrived before things turned to worst... I wonder why Eve didn't tell her about Abby taking care of her, though maybe she was simply in a hurry to get the energy she needed and didn't deem it necessary. Anyway, it seem Abby got herself another fan there.

Oh right, It was also quite fun to see Abby getting carried away by the younger girl. Is relaxing to have her back as new now that her injuries are a thing of the past.

I'll be looking forward to the next one.

See ya.

Wow! what a story so far.First time reviewing on this story and i got to say I love it. Im invested in the characters just like i was in PLD. So far between all the relationships in this story im most intrested in Eve's and Abby's. Does Eve just want Abby as a source for energy or does she have stronger feelings for our shrunken heroine?All this action going on and we still have more girls lurking around in this cave. 

I thank you and the wonderful F.W for such a great story!

I still don't review much as I should but as I've said before. I have authors on here I constantly check for updates and you have been one for a long time since PLD was going on :D 

Hope your back soon for next part!

Hi hi

Abby seems to be taking her changes better than expected, she ain't 100% into it but at least she isn't freaking out. The little bits in which Casey notices some closeness with Abby and how she kept pondering about her liking them now were adorable! And of course, the kiss! >.< Though the idea of them separating at dome point indeed saddens me a bit but that doesn't seem close for now so I don't think there's any need to worry. Casey of course doesn't know that...

Abby got a bit of a hint of how to get into "Kari's route" so I'm waiting to see what she does with that. I'm also happy that Nya's misunderstanding was cleared up, at least the kitty doesn't seem to mind much.

I think I got more clear the extend of Eve's powers but I'm not completely sure about seeing exactly 100% of everything, for the reasons I mentioned before, maybe there's still some more to it? There seems to be a lot more surrounding her. The other girls do have some powerful reasons to doubt her, if she even fought Najia, so it'll be up to Abby what to do about her approach to the vampire. Also I wonder if Abby's calling was enough or Casey with have to handle things for now. They don't have that many options from here on. And the chande she did to Abby is something else to thing about, rather than just "releasing" her libido it seem to go further, maybe as removing limiters on her attitude? Like self consciousness os something similar.

I'm not really sure about the change you mentioned... If I've to guess, is it the way things are developing? Usually Abby's encounters with the others had been 1-on-1 at least for the most part but here goes more for a group encounter, specailly in this chapter. If it is that I think it has shown little by little since the start of the story. Is something I noticed before, this one seems feels more of a group story than PLD. In here it isn't weird to be more than two important characters at the scene and I like that, I like the way they interact with each other and you can get either the fondness they got from one another or the friction between them. I'm not saying a "group" story is better than a "close encounter" one, they're just different, they get handled in different way, but I really like the way this one is going. Then again it could be you were talking abput something else and I totally missed the point ;_;

Just and extra thought, that monster ranking from before, does it include eastern species? Or maybe is just the ones found at Ireland.

Also, “Of all the girls that Najia looks after, there’s only three who could actually hold a candle to Eve if it came to a fight, and that’s just a theory.", Ebon, the one "they don't talk about" and... Did Abby just overlooked something? I wonder if it's one of the other A ranked species, or maybe the one Ebon is taking care of...

Anyway, as always, I'm eager to see more of this, but take your time to have it done in a way you're pleased with.

See ya.

I like the way Abby reacted when Kari told her Casey went to see Ebon to get her back which was a great way to show us both how potentionally dangerous Ebon is and how much Abby is starting to like the girls more, even being ecstatic to see Nya again. You left us with a awkward and funny cliffhanger there too which also made Nya all the more lovable lol. I find it actually nice that Abby is starting embracing the pleasure she's getting from the girls. Poppy is also going to be introduced next chapter I'm guessing (No need to tell though lol) so that's another monster girl for us. I'm curious about her dialogue too, she's really cute! :3 Btw I owe you a rating but this is the best I can do: 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

Author's Response:

Hmm, intresting guess, you'll have to wait and see ;)