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Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 14 2018 2:44 AM Title: Paving a way for their future,

Hey, it's been a while! Finally, I got some things sorted out with my schedule and have more time to review now. I Felt bad for not being able to comment the previous chapter before the current one...

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Knowing the methods that Najia used for getting info is a nice extra, one could already guess that she was more of a pacifist but she seems to totally stick to it now. I wonder for what reason she chose to go down that path. Or maybe is just some differences between her birth country and the current one?

Eve went through a difficult choice, I'm glad in the end she went for what she believed to be right and got to stay but Najia side. Is also great that the Kitsune got to know at least a few Eve's feelings towards her before she got to her current comatose state, it would've been rather sad otherwise.

I don't know what to think about Eve's parents naming sense. Either they're rather wicked or that's just their way to deal with their loss and/or honor Eve's "memory". It was also a nice detail that the vampiress could recognize Caitriona faster than her biological mother. And I'm happy that the maid got to see her heiress is still alive. I don't know how she'll feel about Eve since their final encounter before the incident wasn't exactly the best but, if anyone needs to know that she's still "alive", I'm glad it was her.

And also, is nice nothing worse happened to Brook ;_;

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There's a big change for Eve in this one. Seeing her all giggly was great, even somehow alluring, maybe because of the gap with her more stern behavior? Anyway, it gave the feeling that she got a big weight out of her back after telling Abby about her past.

The letters were a really cute detail, in a lot of senses! It was also clever to leave them to explain some of Eve's feelings and the transition she went through in her mindset about Abby. Wonder when will be a good time to send it.

And, there goes the chance for a harem ending I guess? I'm unsure now about who will mate with Abby. Rather, I'm unsure about who I want to mate with Abby, all of them are so cute ;_; Anyway, Eve took the rejection quite good for now. It was too sudden for Abby indeed. But is good that she isn't giving out!

For the final, it really was a demonstration of that alluringness I mentioned before. I'm sure this rocked around Abby's mindset in a lot of ways, especially knowing those are her actual feelings. She'll have some thinking to do after all of this. Also, Eve sure knows how to take advantage, being the first one to prioritize completely Abby's pleasure.

Excellent job overall you two, I will be looking forward to the next one as always. Will try to comment faster for that one.

See ya~



Author's Response:

Don't feel bad D:

Was hoping you were alright.

I'm glad you still enjoy the story and the chapters coming out. :)

I was worried about how my last chapter would pan out but I'm getting positive feedback so that's a plus. Also, I won't say anything in regards to Abby's relationships. You'll just have to patiently wait and find out. :P

Thank you for the review Kenta, I missed you! :3

Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: January 07 2018 5:56 PM Title: Paving a way for their future,

I think I get Eve more now. That was one flashback. I'm also glad that she somewhat accepted Abby not wanting to be her mate. Good for Abby! I think she made the right call not going into something as serious as become Eve's mate without putting thought to it first. 

 

Hope Franchise gets better, having a cold sucks. Trust me, I know -_-



Author's Response:

I wanted an impact like this for awhile but I didn't quite know how to utilize it until now. I'm glad the rejection was liked as much as it was... albeit, a sad one at that. But don't you worry. I have more on the whole Mate part to come into play later in. 

Also, I'm with you. I hate getting sick! T~T

I'll pass on your wishes!

Reviewer: Lucia1312 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 07 2018 10:14 AM Title: Paving a way for their future,

So, I re-readed the story and I have a theory of what happened to Kari.

Kari, or her mother, or maybe both, were abused by her father, this would explain why she doesnt like to being feed by... That ways, being caused by a trauma of whatever happened, and it would explain what Ebon said when atacking them "You know this better than most. If only your mother had been as smart to know this too…"

Am I right? Or even close to it?

Also... When is the next chapter comming?? (I always ask this question, hope its not getting tedious)



Author's Response:

Hmm... to smart for you're own good... well, I guess I'll need to think of a new backstory now... thanks...

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xD

 

Kidding lol.

Your analysis is pretty good but I won't say if you're close or not. I love the attention to detail you picked up. I sprinkle a little in every chapter hoping people will catch what I toss out. I'm glad you looked into Kari's. But she'll be ways away still.  Either way, I'm glad you made your speculation, it means my story is doing its job! :D

 

Also, it's not tedious lol, the next chapter will be up in a few days or a week again most likely. My editor Senpai's still sick so I need to wait for a little for his part to come. ;-;

But I'm already started on whats happening for now so please be patient. :)

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 06 2018 11:24 PM Title: Paving a way for their future,

I loved this chapter and the return to Abby and Eve together. Now that Abby knows Eve’s story, there’s a lot more understanding between the two of them. I’m also glad that Abby didn’t immediately accept being her mate. It gives a bit more gravity to the decision.

The one thing that felt off to me was that it seem like Eve was being more precise with her gang than should be possible given their suze difference. At Anny’s size, it seems like it would be impossible for Eve’s fang to pierce the skin of Abby’s check with piercing the entire cheek and going into the mouth.

But putting that aside, I loved it. I loved how Eve was able to do exactly what she needed to to nring Abby to orgasm. And I loved her teasing. Not giving her release until she said she wanted it was a fun little intimate thing to help on the road to Abby’s acceptance. But the most fun thing was how Eve was describing what Abby’s life would be like once she’s given responsibility to provide essense for all the girls in the cave. It’s going to be very erotic lol.

I look forward to seeing more physical sand emotional intimacy between Abby and Eve in the future. Hoping for some action with Abby getting to interact with Eve’s private parts. Anyway, keep up the good work! Looking forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughts foreignkanto :D I’m glad you’ve given me some input on how it played out, it really does help. :3 As for Eve piercing Abby’s cheek, I meant it more as she broke her skin a bit like a slight scratch, not an actual wound. I’m sorry if that didn’t rely properly. I’ve never tried a scene like this before until now. I’m hoping it was still a great scene to read none the less. As for Abby getting a bit *closer* to Eve, don’t worry, I have something in mind already. ;3

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