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Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 05 2017 8:34 PM Title: Something Lost - Part 1

Finally some free time to post a review.

We get some answers about Eve but still far from the whole truth. I wonder what happened with doctor Bowers...

There was a lot of tension when the vampire appeared and at the scenes. I could feel he was taking the spotlight every time. Also like the was is implied he's lightly using his powers to keep control of the situation on his first visit. His prideful personality goes well with the usual concept of vampire.

I like the way Ventris was portrayed, he struck me as a very imponent and calm man, one that focuses on something and does what is needed to get to it, most likely having a concept of morals different than usual but not someone "bad". That's the part that I liked, that he doesn't seem like evil but like someone with different priorities. Albeit, quite merciless.

I'm still a bit doubtful about the reason Eve was happy when told she was dying. I can see now how she wanted attention as the vampire mentioned seems his father looks like a busy man or someone with the focus in other matters and her mother... I don't really know about her but it was implied she checks on Eve even less than her father. For a moment it made me think she wanted to relieve or escape on death from being abused in some way but it doesn't seem to be like that, not physically at least

The whole confrontation both parties had in the end was really nice. The way the vampire looked down on humans and how they counter him was also good to see, it keeps showing that discrimination goes both ways and that every side has their ways of fighting back.

The ominous message by the end of the chapter keeps me intrigued. At first, I thought that Eve would get some retaliation for killing the one that made him a vampire since that happens in some of the vampire lore with their servants, but she seems to be a full-fledged vampire and seems fine so it's not the case.

Oh, and the part in which Eve comes back to life startling the maid was also nice.

See ya~



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review even if I'm not the one who wrote this chapter. I liked the build-up as well. I wondered how F.W was going to play around with another Vampire since Eve wasn't born as one and I think he did really good! :D

I also like her parents... well, how they're written... I don't like them in general though...  :l

It was also nice to see more biased from the Hominal side as well. I wanted to write that in at some point but I was struggling. I'm glad he did. And I didn't even need to ask him to. XD

 

Either way, I can't wait to see what happens. Thanks again for the review, I love seeing your thoughts on the chapters. :)

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