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Reviewer: Nothingness Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2017 12:10 PM Title: Once bitten...

Hey Sterben. Hope you are doing well. :3 Sorry for the late review. I never thought life would hinder me from this site but apparently I was wrong. First off, Em and Ella: Kawaii. I almost cried myself when the adorable imp girls were about to cry lol and I must also say that they I'm relieve that they were actually so innocent and gentle towards Abby... well gentle enough not to hurt her. You and Franchise did a great job with Eve's character as well. Don't know why but she reminds me of Racheal Alucard from the BlazeBlue series which is weird cause I'm not that big on BlazeBlue. Anyways... I espically liked how she broke out off her sophisticated character when she said, "fucking imps..." Guess the precious imp girls could make anyone's head spin, not just Casey XD See what I did there??!! Dullahan jokes lol. I hope Franchise is doing well and if it's not too much trouble, can you tell him Nothingness says "hi" and hope he's doing well. As usual awesome work! Both you and him! :D

Author's Response:

No problem at all Nothingness. I've been held up with school actually so I know the feeling. I want to pump out this next chapter shortly, but it's just not ready yet. :(

I'll be able to give you all something good soon though. As for Eve striking a resembalance to her, I actually took on Vania from Granblue Fantasy as my base model for Eve when  I was designing her character. But I can see where the thought of Racheal would come from. I had thought of her as well at first when character design came up, but I opted out of it mostly due to another certain blonde with twin tails I had recently wrote about. I like to expand out on every character the most I can. :P

Thank you for the review, I really appreciate it and I'll pass on your words to F.W. I'm sure he'll appreciate them to. :D

P.S. I'm glad you enjoyed Emma and Ella to. I had a lot of fun writing them.

 

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Reviewer: KentaRyu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 23 2017 12:06 AM Title: Once bitten...

Wow,This was a really good chapter, I'm impressed. Great job guys.

Eve is a really interesting character, seeing how she took a liking by Abby and went through the trouble of having the teenager brought to her, even getting some clothes ready. I wonder what she saw in her future to convince herself that she is, let's say, "worth it" to be by her side, even after Abby's outburst. I was a bit nervous at that part, after repeating it quite some times I didn't think Eve would hurt her but she could've used some more drastical methods to keep her there. Though, a part me me thought that she should've already deduced and/or predicted that was going to happen. Same by the time she massaged Abby's back, even if she wasn't going to hurt her I was curious what she was trying to do. Using her fangs for a massage is something I don't thing I've seen before but it was a great idea and very well written too.

I also liked the parts in which Abby catched Eve out of composure, like when the teenager told her the "mistress" thing, her unintentional joke,  or by the end while dressing. The constrast between her usual calm and well-mannered personality and those bits made me like her more. Casey is still my favorite tho. Anyway, I wonder if in the future maybe Abby would be able to provoke that on her on purpose? Though it should be hard with the clairvoyance, which by the explanation I suppose it works better the closer the future is? I mean, there're so many paths Abby con choose for her future but as time advances those branches branc themselves so it might be harder to guess then. Then again, there's magic on the equation so I wouldn't know for sure.

And being still about Eve's powers, while she said that she see and hears everything that happens at the cave, it might not be so true. She didin't realize that the imps called her "mistress" in front of the tiny, and also didn't seem like she was expecting them to get some of Abby's energy so there might be a limitation to it? Or another vampiric-like powers like the ones from her familiars interfere with her own powers? I'm eager to know the limitations of what she can do.

By the end the vampire said: “Yes… Anyone in this cave will know the meaning of this, so make any you want aware if you so choose. But Abby, I caution you not to speak to any of the others about what we discussed here today. They don’t need to know what I’ve done… or, what I’ve seen.”. I wonder about the last past. Maybe is because I like her bot I thought it might've to do with Casey's confession? The dullahan said, or well, thought, that it was something she didn't event tell Kari so I don't think she would be very comfortable with Eve hearing, much less with watching the girls' intimate time that happened after that. Or maybe is a thing that happens so much that she doesn't care anymore? I also thought about the possibility of Casey and Kari not knowing about Eve, since it would be too complicated to keet Abby a secret from her and the vampire said she's among the ones that hates humans the most, but because Eve said that everyone knows what her protection mean, I guess they should also know about her. Oh, and now that I mention Casey, I hope she's not the jealous kind, since Eve seems to have some powerful intentions wiht her new friend. Or actually, I kind of hope she gets jealous. I just feel she would bee to cute pouting about it!... After cursing a lot, most likely.

The Heinrich curriculum, is nice for me to get to know more about that ranking system and I'm also really interested in knowing what species are the others at A rank. Also, thay said there was a huge steep between C and B rank but, is it the same for B and A? Eve implied that Casey could do nothing to stop her, which seems logical seeing she barely could keep up with the imps, but maybe that's just because she's a vampire and the four not-as-powerful A species could somehow be defeated by a B class? Sorry, it seems this chapter ignited more of my curiosity than usual.

As I mentioned before I enjoyed the fang massage and the whole way in which Eve handled Abby, literal and figuratively. The gesture of nuzzling the tiny against her cheek is something one could see here and there but is so cute I couldn't get tired of it! Also because she wants to "free" Abby from her preconceptions of wrong and right so that she can enjoy herself, I can get an idea about where this is going by that ending. Just, hope tha Abby doesn't get mad about it... Not much at least. Oh, and it's good to know now what happened with the imps' magic last chapter.

Anyway, excelent chapter.



Author's Response:

You always leave me such intricate reviews Kenta T^T It makes me want to cry happily. I love seeing a giant wall of text for me to read, it makes me happy to know my works truly appreciated. But, credit is due. A lot of the things your mentioning Franchise Writer wrote in such as but not limited to the Heinrich Curriculum and the fang massage as you put it. :P

You always ask so many quastions, and for the most part your intuition on whats to come is a bit scary. I don't think I should even hint at whats to come, you know to much! o_o

But as for what you mentioned Eve telling Abby, that was more a spur of the moment kind of thing. She meant it towards the future she saw and witnessed and towards all thats going to be coming her way. If the other girls knew that various Monsters were going to get near her, they'd be paranoid. So she wants to leave the others out of just her and Abby's little secret, even if only one of them knows the true details of all of whats to come. As for Eve having knowledge of everything going on in the caverns, that part is 100% true to the dot. I'll elaborate on it more later on, don't worry.

Also, expect there to be conflicts with the girls at some point once Eve makes herself known. Thats all I'll say for that...

 

you ask so many questions which I appreciate but i'm stuck not being able to answer them yet! D:

I'll try to update soon instead, how does that sound?

Alright, thank you again for a long review and your insight on what you think, It really does make a world of difference to me. I'm also looking foward to your new story, I'll try to find time in the future to watch it to!

Bye!

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: April 22 2017 9:44 AM Title: Once bitten...

Really nice chapter dude. Love the vampire. That massage was really interesting. Love to see what happens with that vampire in the future. Also hope Kari has some fun with Abby at some point.

Author's Response:

There will be a little of everything, don't you worry. :)

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