[Report This]Date: March 22 2017 2:38 PM Title: Dinner time...
I kind of feel bad for not being able to comment on the 2nd chapter before the 3rd was up. I should've tried to make some time to read, since I had it's tab open for the longest time in my phone, just didn't expect the next chapter to be up so fast.
About the pictures, yep they're nice, it makes me keep up my expectation for when the others characters appears. Also, it didn't seems like you got lazy with the description of the characters because of the pictures so that's great. Also, monster girls are great. Are those all the characters you're planning to add or there might be even more? Since it seems like a really big cast already.
Moving to the story, Abby is having it real bad but at least she's safe... ish... For now. That's all going to make her trauma even worse at this rate, if it didn't already, so hopefully she can catch a rest after Nya had her fun. There's also a glimmer of hope brought by Nya's kind actions, maybe that will be the first step in Abby overcoming her trauma.
I think the description of her trains of thoughts while all of this happened was great. Not only the physical damage, the humilliation well indeed hit her hard when she gets time to think straight. And not only her train of thoughts, I'm really liking this story as a whole. At first I was going to write that I liked the part in which Kari helds Abby just after she wakes up, but then I noticed I also liket what comed after that and the conversation before that, and all of Nya, so yeah, I think this is having a really good start.
About the characters, Casey, I suppose, and Kari seems nice, I likes the way they argued with each other. Kari seems to be a clumsy which with all that happened in the first two chapters and the other girl seem to have better head on her shoulders... Or hand... I love dullahans by the way. Ebon might be the hardest for Abby to deal with if she ever has to because of her view about humans but let's see how this goes. Nya seems kind a playful, I don't think there's much to say about her other than she's potentially the first one to become Abby's ally for now. And about the main character herself, she seems kind but not really a saint, she has knowledge so she might be able to make use of it now. I'm really interested to see how she develops in this situation.
By the way, I might also give Franchise Writer a message.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for reviewing Kenta! I missed your review from chapter 2 and got worried ;-;
I'm glad you liked the pictures and each of the characters there, while still in development are planned in the story already. As for others coming in. i'm not sure. I had all of the characters you saw there but two originally added but at the last moment i added two more. This story was kind of a request but the plot and characters were all by design so i can add or subtract whoever i need to. Hopefuly though they all see the light of day. I have plans for each of then with Abby and i look foward to using them all.
As for Abby being hit hard, thats an understatement XD I plan to reveal to everyone more on the little brunette with time, similar to what i did with Claire. You won't know it all at first but as pieces are revealed you'll learn why she is the way she is.
Don't think it's limited to just her either though. The girls will each have their own spotlight with time. I'm sure you know how i work :P
I hope to see you stick with me for this story to, you always leave me such intresting reviews to read afterwards. xP
P.S.
Feel free to message him! He really is a nice guy lol