[Report This]Date: December 31 2018 1:13 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Finally got time to read it ;_; It's been a while, hope you had a nice Christmas!
Ebon methods are still too rough but you can tell from the start that she wasn't fighting all out, really makes me wonder what Eve did to make Ebon behave. Now, hope Kari doesn't blame herself too badly after this...
The conversation with Ebon reassures the idea that she really cares for the others, and all she's doing is out of care and kindness, I suppose. And her story has to be quite tragic to have a hatred that intense. Also, picturing her moving around all that gold and hoping is enough to "buy" Abby, I find that very cute for some reason. Hopefully, they can talk out their worries.
So now Ivy is in here too. I got an idea of how this might go and if I'm correct it could be quite entertaining! Looking forward to reading the next one.
Have a happy new year!
Author's Response:
KENTA!
Long time no see! S-Sorry...
I'm glad you still like my story :D
I'm glad you're able to see through Ebon's rougher side. It's hard to find a good way to describe what I want with her. It doesn't nearly come as naturally as it does with some of the other girl's. But, I think thats whats so fun about her too.
Also, you think you know what Ivy's going to do? fufufu~
We shall see!
See you later~!
I hope you like the next chapter I just posted! Enjoy!
Date: December 22 2018 10:53 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Just made an account to say this is one of if not the best story I've read on this site. I've been following it for a long time and am always looking forward to it. You have some talent to write something this endearing. I'd even say this could pass for an actual novel if you reworked the more erotic parts. All in all keep up the good work as I'll be looking forward to your next chapter no matter the wait.
Author's Response:
I really can't say much besides thank you. You're comment, and your action really made me feel better about my writing. :)
I hope I can keep pleasing you with what I have planned till the end. Thank you.
[Report This]Date: December 21 2018 6:52 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
The ammount of time in takes to realese a new chapter never really bothered me. Ill keep reading them and loving them so long as you keep releasing them. keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thank you Foxinbox, I'm glad you're happy with my work. :)
I'll keep trying to make this story as great as I hope it is.
[Report This]Date: August 06 2018 2:05 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Nice to finally see Kari's background! Though for a second I really thought that Abby was going to be stuck at her size.
Although, promising that she would never abandon them when she is two inches tall and a dragon girl is trying to kill her continuously, is probably going to make it difficult to accomplish.
And the question from every review! When are you going to update next chapter? After a month, two? XD
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed Lucia. I honestly don't want to say. It could be a week, a month, I don't know. I've been having trouble writing. So I guess, it's kind of in the air at the moment.
[Report This]Date: April 04 2018 7:40 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Wait, wait, wait, you are telling me, that the assumption I just made, is correct, or a bit of it is!? Then, I must say that Kari is a fucking genious to plan all of that in her own.
Was her plan try to kidnap her without any magic, and then force her heal Najia? Or when Abby started screaming, she didnt know what to do, started panicking, and shrunk her in attemp to actually get her, and make her pass out? Or shrinking her was in her mind all along?
OH WAIT, Is this why she is scared of Eve? She is scared that she will hurt her when she finds out?! Though I think she is just scared about how, err, sadistic she was when the met for the first time?
Has Kari been watching Abby like some kind of stalker or a teenager with a crush, before they actually met?
Aghhhh this is so frustrating, I didnt think that theory was actually going to be true! Now I'm even more confused... :'D
Author's Response:
I won't say. You'll just have to read the next chapter when I tell everyone~ :3
Date: March 26 2018 8:47 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Oh, no, no, of course I like Yu, I even said I find her adorable. Didn't mean to say she had the intention of deceiving Clarette or doing any wrong to her, I know Yu's acts were out of pure love. Just wanted to point out that she was deceiving her in the end, and that most "humans" might have focused on that. Unlike Abby who had a different point of view.
Also, of course Abby having changes in her judgment in the normal thing in that situation, just pointing out how she's been going from one side to the other, nothing wrong with that.
And yes, I do agree that Clarette wasn't really a strong-willed person so her future without Yu didn't seem too shiny either.
Hope there were no misunderstandings in what I said D:
Author's Response: I didn’t think I sounded accusatory, sorry about that. :( You’re fine Kenta! I didn’t take offense to what you said. I’m glad you still like Yu though. :3
[Report This]Date: March 21 2018 7:08 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
So... Wow, I have to say, just wow. I read this entire story up until this point in a single day because I really didn't want to put it down, very very good job. I honestly almost forgot it wasn't an actual writing submission instead of something posted on this website, so spectacular job in that. I actually was so floored by the quality I'm going to give it a more "actual" review instead of what I'd normally give to stores on this website, because this legit deserves it.
So first off, let me just say it, this story had legitemently one of the best character development of anything I've seen on this website, and honestly better than most things I've seen online regardless of their aim, which for a "giantess" focused story is exceptional, bravo. The time and focus you've taken on each character and the world building you have done is exceptional, and is the main reason this story has stuck out to me as much as it has. A lot of the time I was reading chapters and the fact that Abby was shrunken seemed like more a necessary plot point than anything else, which is impressive as normally that part of the story is kinda forced.
Another thing this story did extremely well is it didn't just force the giantess interaction down your throat, and take every single situation it could have to be fetish heavy and distract the story itself. It took itself seriously, and what elements there were of that fit into the overall world you had built. Sure, it seemed semi-forced when it first showed up, but accepting the world build as it was, it wasn't an unnecessary action which worked a lot better than most things this site features.
One thing I think the story kinda limits itself in oddly is the monster girls nature itself. Its kinda... odd, but I think early on the differences between the girls and "normal" humans was highlighted more, and they seemed more otherworldly, but until recently with Yu, it seemed like they were kinda... almost humanized too much in a way. I don't know exactly how to say it, but like with Casey, the fact that she is a dullahan was only really important in her backstory and early on, he "nature" as a monster girl really sort of got lost in a way later in the story. I kinda get that its because Abby is viewing them more like just regular "people" instead of monsters, which is part of the development in the story, but viewpoints aside they are actually different. Its not a bad thing, something I just noticed as I read the story. The quality picked up through the story it seemed, but in some ways the girls themselves were more humanized as time went on as well.
Overall though, easily my most enjoyed read on this website, and look forward for more updates in the future, really enjoying the direction of the story and can't wait to see how it develops in the future! Great job :)
Author's Response:
I'm floored... This review honestly raised my spirits more then I can express to you right now. Especially considering the day I've had today. Thank you, honestly, thank you for taking the time to write all of this. It's insightful, fair, and points out area's that I can contemplate more. I'm glad you like my story Babajo, but in all honesty, a lot of the credit has to be shared with Franchise Writer. Quite a few of the things you're mentioning he's helped me with, one that comes to mind right away being that just because the story is Giantess oriented doesn't mean it has to be only about Giantess'.
I just wanted to say that it isn't all me. xD, But I'm really happy you've been as engrossed as you are up until this point. One thing I would like to clarify if it helps is that the humanization of the characters is meant by design. This story is meant to be read through the eyes of Abby and as time goes on I wanted to express how her views on their natures and personalities seem less foreign, and more natural because she understands them more now, hence her curiosity and urgency she exhibits to try and help the girls whenever she can. She has a want to help me, a need even. And I wanted to focus that subtly as the story went on. I do however see what you're getting at. I tried to keep the personalities of the girl's traits specific to their nature's as well. Amy's Crow like tendencies, Poppy's love of drinking and spender, and even the Twin's licentious personalities, bordering on playful and downright obscene at times.
I suppose I could try to make them more noticeable, but I'm trying to reel it back little by little because, as I've said, this story is shown through Abby's eyes and it's her way of grasping these girls on how she views them. Starting with Kari being some kind of diabolic witch cursing her, to a ferocious Neko trying to eat her, and then on to A bloodthirsty Dragon like the ones she heard stories about. One thing I want to point out though is with Casey, she doesn't have just one nature but two. The one you see her more often is the gruffer one with her head on. When it's off, I try to orient it as a much different personality bordering on a different person entirely. This, however, is less noticeable considering how Casey now views Abby compared to the first time she took off her head in front of her. Perhaps, I'll have to do more focus on the two though as I'm trying to do with the others. I tried to do that with each of the girls, but Casey specifically was a challenge because her role in the story changed about 12 or so chapters in. Hopefully, that clarifies it a little. I'll try to adjust the girls a bit more so they don't seem simply Human. That was never my intention for any of them. Well, all but one of them I should say, but, no spoilers~.
I'll definitely look into their natures more though. I guess somewhere along the lines, personalities, and natures mixed too far...
Either way, I hope you stay with me until the end. We're not there yet and I don't plan on stopping till the final curtain falls. Even if this is just a story on a site like this, it means a lot more to me then just some smut fic. And that's the purpose of my stories. I want them to have meaning to the people who read them giving them the respect they deserve.
Thanks again for the wonderful review, it's given me some inspiration to continue writing more today. And it made my emotions a lot better then they were. :3
[Report This]Date: August 01 2017 5:32 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
This time I found the chapter at a good time and could read it earlier than usual :D
I guess Abby know has a better idea of why Eve was dealing with Poppy the way she was. Congrats to her for not losing it, should've taken a lot of will power. The way the teenager and the oni interact was quite fun, I really hope to see more of these two. Poppy's reaction when Abby ended up naked was great. And it seems Abby is getting to enjoy more her new size, interesting.
Poppy's past... The change in the oni's behaviour, how she interrupted herself to drink, it built a really fitting mood for her tragic memories. About the past itself, I suppose we will never get to know what happened there exactly. I would like to think is all a misunderstanding but I guess that would be too much wishful thinking, that betrayal and to a girl that young... Poppy's tears and the way she asked Abby for answers hit me a bit hard.
Abby's mind keeps exapanding as she get more info of the world she lives in. It'll be interesting to see the final result all this lead her to and what she'll choose to do with her life later on. Also, I hope she won't blame herself too much for what other humans did...
Abby trying to hug Poppy is way too cute.
Aaaand Ebon out of nowhere. That I didn't expect, and it seems she wasn't ready to see Abby either. Why are Onis just B class again? I suppose Ebon is a lot weakened after her fight with Eve but the "Not even she hit me as hard part" makes me think that maybe Poppy could have dealt with Ebon that time. Though, Eve did mention in that fight that the dragon was weaker than before, I suppose it might be because of that.
And now that we've seen more of Poppy... I really like her! A lot more than I expected! Always looking for fun stuff and ways of entertainment is something I agree a lot with. Her personality is also really pleasant, she's just awesome and funny! The serenity she showed while telling her past and then crying in the end got a couple of tears out of me and makes me hope for a better future for her. She was badass while fighting with Ebon! The loyalty she shows towards her new friend is also admirable. Lastly, the fact that she's covering Abby in salty fluids might or might not be and extra bonus for me. About that last bit, I also found really fun the way Abby kept falling and slipping.
I guess the next chapter will be the "drinking party"?
See ya.
Author's Response:
Wow, you are early. XD Didn't think you'd see this for a few days. Glad to see your review though. There always the best to read!
You can definitely tell that Abby can relate to Eve when it comes to dealing with Poppy. I struggled with her personality a lot because I didn't want to mimic another certain Monster girl later on. But, I'll keep her to myself for now. When it comes to Poppy's past, and most of the other girls don't expect to really delve into it until the end. There will be more that goes into them all at a certain point, but I can't say why I'm doing it this way for now.
I knew Ebon would catch people off guard. I have plans for her, big plans. So expect the Dragon to be lurking around any corner. She can come up at any time. >:P
As far as strength goes, that of an Oni's is by far stronger then a Dragons, especially one as young as Ebon, but there are other reasons for the classifications you need to consider. Just because they're in one rank doesn't mean they're any less strong than another. Certain things can factor in... such as not being able to recover from a fight with a Vampire days before. Hint, hint.
But I'll also be going into that later so you'll just have to wait.
I'm glad you enjoyed Poppy, I did too. :D
Expect drinks and other fluids to come~
Thank you for the review Kenta. :3
Date: July 21 2017 1:55 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Awesome! So we finally get to see Poppy! I'm not surprise she's an alcoholic. - _- Oni's are famous for their liquor afterall.
Author's Response:
Couldn't have one in here without it. But, expect the unexpected is all I'll say. :)
[Report This]Date: June 26 2017 9:55 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Pretty much the only story I check on for updates every day since there doesn't seem to be much else in the way of solid gentle content these days. Other than occasional grammar blips here and there I haven't much to say critically. Please keep up the good work, looling forward to next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your words Kirby, they soothe my soul. :3
I can agree, there isn't enough gentleness with GTS now adays and I'm glad to be bringing it forward. :D
Thank you so much for the review. It really does make my day.
Date: June 24 2017 1:39 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
I've told you before I look forward to any updates from you since precious little demons finished. I like your writing style and direction. You also put lots of effort into detail which is a huge plus for myself. You don't need a lot of reviews though to feel validated though in my opinion. I think read count is a big part as Well!
Keep it up man!
Author's Response:
I know, I know... It still feels good though to come online and see that someone has messaged you and says what they think. The feeling is unimaginable and makes you feel good knowing that your time hasn't been wasted. :(
I guess I just get worried when I don't see many simply because I don't want to lose peoples intrests with something or another. >.<
Thank you for saying this again. I'll probably still fret in the future if something like this happens but i'll also go back and read yours to calm myself as well. :)
Date: June 15 2017 2:15 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Every girl you've mention, including Abby, have been adorable but when you introduced Goomie, I couldn't take her cutest. IT'S OVER 9000! I literally was enamored with this sweet little slime girl that I simply could not explain it... but I'll try. The way she said "hooman." The way she tried to thank Brook. I almost whimpered when this precious baby whimpered! Just stop... Your killing me with these cute girls! Again, Eveline just keeps on getting more mysterious. Like Abby said or thought I guess, Kari and Casey made her out as a girl who is utterly dangerous yet Brook seems to adore her which of course is understandable from how kind Eveline is to her even going as far as to keep her secret of Goomie. I'm also glad Eveline and Brook are good friends cause, well... I'd rather be Eveline's friend than enemy ._. Again, awesome work, you and Franchise.
Author's Response:
Thanks Nothingness, I appreciate the input. I was worried about Goomie's appearence but it's good to know she was liked. The only way I have to determine if I'm going in a good direction is through reviews so thank you for your opinion on how it is now. :)
Also, no promises on the girls getting any less cute~
Date: May 12 2017 4:45 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
I still don't review much as I should but as I've said before. I have authors on here I constantly check for updates and you have been one for a long time since PLD was going on :D
Hope your back soon for next part!
Author's Response:
Thank you MadHatter, it may not seem like reviews mean too much, one would be like any other, but it really does eleviate my fears thinking people don't enjoy my work to its fullest. Thank you for your reviews, there always appreciated and make my day. :)
Date: April 12 2017 7:32 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
I actually envy your ability to update these AMAZING chapters so quickly. I use to be like that with my story but sadly I'm suffering from a lot of writers block lately -_- Anyways, another great chapter as always! Given by the species the twins are, (I saw the pics. Oh gosh...) Abby will probably understand the true meaning of pleasure ;)
Author's Response:
Don't give up! I had lots of that when I was writing for PLD. It will come and go, don't worry! As for the species, a lot of people think their succubus but you'll be surprised to find out there not what they appear to be. Thank you for the review Nothingness. :)
Date: April 09 2017 11:43 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Thank you for making my heart ache yet again with your stories. When Casey revealed her tragic it pasted, it reminded me of that scene from Tokyo Ghoul when... No. Thou shall not spoil. Thou shall not spoil. Thou shall not spoil. Anyways, poor Casey. Poor Casey's Mom! And poor Abby. The fact that you brought that up made things all the more realistic but that's the fucked up part: Reality can be cruel. At least Casey and Abby were able to comfort one another. I guess species doesn't matter when you could share in each others pain.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you can see where comfort in other's tragedies can coexist. It was a hard chapter to write but the tone has been set now for whats to come. Thank you for not spoiling Tokyo Ghoul, but i've already seen it xD
Thank you for the review as well. I really appreciate it Nothingness. :D
Date: April 01 2017 12:21 PM Title: Doctor, doctor...
I think this chapter is a big showing of why I enjoy your stories. Character interactions and such. I enjoy character development and interactions and good descriptions very much and it was no different with PLD. Hope to see the next chapter soon!
Author's Response:
I'm glad their to your liking. I love developing my characters as well because I see them as that, My characters. Their my children :D
Leaving any as blank slates doesn't sit well with me. I want to show everyone just what they can do and why they work the way they do. :P
Thank you for the review MadHatter.
Date: March 29 2017 8:25 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Geez, what a foul-mouthed Dullahan Casey is. You nailed her accent perfectly, too. She seems to had a very bad experience with humans and I'm curious to know what it was.
Author's Response:
Oh thank god, xD
I was scared I butchered her accent. This is the first time i've ever written one. I had to study for it for a full day before attempting it. lol
Things will be revealed shortly, just you wait. ;)
Date: March 28 2017 10:18 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Also, why not use the FF/f size role tag? I'm sure it will draw more attention to your story.
Date: March 28 2017 10:12 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
Congrats on posting your second story, man. Pretty good stuff here. Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thanks Nothingness :D
As for why I never used FF/f mostly because at any given time there isn't more then 1 girl. I might adjust it later depending what happen's though. Thank you for messaging me. :)
Date: March 24 2017 12:07 AM Title: Doctor, doctor...
I may not be a a vocal as most but I have a lot of authors on this site I look for updates from and you'll always be one of em after PLD. Don't lose motivation! The views will come! I know I will lol
Author's Response:
Thank you for your words MAdHatter, they calm my nerves a lot. :)
Thank you for sticking with me through PLD and I hope to see you to the end of Pay it Foward as well.