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Reviewer: Calahonda Signed [Report This]
Date: November 23 2016 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 1

Back in the laundry room , Yagaritte whispered something in Edovan's ear. Something that got him over the edge. Are we about to find out what or wasn't that relevant?



Author's Response:

you will find out..but its a secret for now <3

Reviewer: Calahonda Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22 2016 1:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

My brother has a gnome in his garden (as quite some Dutch people have). Since your last chapter I feel very strange when I visit the place and can't help wondering what might have happened to the poor thing (the gnome, not my brother :-). 



Author's Response:

lol.. i guess that depends..are there are any giant Dremora ladies hanging lurking about by any chance? xDD

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 21 2016 9:04 AM Title: Chapter 1

I love how Mav struggles to control her own primal urges. Physically, she's so much stronger than Edo, but mentally, he has her wrapped around his little finger and he doesn't realize it. Makes me wonder if she's getting the restraints for herself or him.



Author's Response:

Both!  lol  I love her mental struggle..  she wants to keep him..to eat him.. to study him.. shes so conflicted!   Knowing Mav tho, she wants to figure out a way to eat her Edovan and have him too xDD  If anybody can she can!

Reviewer: Calahonda Signed [Report This]
Date: November 21 2016 8:11 AM Title: Chapter 1

Terrific chapter and very well written indeed! Especially the way you describe the scenes from both perspectives. This story is getting better and better. Edovan is really on his way to become the Rudolph Valentino of The Horny Bear. I'm curious about Yagaritte's reaction when she comes to retrieve him. And where and how will she find him? Stashed in one of Mavka's devices? And how long will it take Yagaritte before she wants to try him out? Really can't wait for the next chapter !



Author's Response:

Thanks!  He's definitely not out of the woods yet XD  Hell, hes more less still on the moving belt,  headed to the sawmill xD  Let's hope Mav has more self-control now then she did the first three times xD  Hopefully he's still around for Yagaritte to retrieve...  O.O

Reviewer: Calahonda Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 18 2016 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1

A female co-writer, that explains the depth in your female characters! And that I sympathize with Edovan because I still don't have a clue about them either!
There's no reason for the both of you to be nervous about your writing. As I mentioned before, your writing skills are above average. As far as I can judge as a non-native English reader, that is.
The comedy aspect of the story didn't escape my attention. Please do not worry about writing 'unbirthy type stuff', as you call it (hilarious phrase!). That gives the story the erotic touch it needs in my opinion. It is all a fantasy after all and that's what this site is all about. If I want reality, I switch to Discovery Channel. Or CNN....

Reviewer: Calahonda Signed [Report This]
Date: November 17 2016 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 8

Keltohey is right. This story is a gem and deserves to be appreciated a lot more. I love the fantasy-setting and your character building. Edovan as a naieve and sheer magnet to the female creatures. Especially the confusing effect he has on the by nature gentle Yagaritte, with a slight but harmless sadistic twist. I hope to see the romance between the two of them develop further. Great fantasy, and please continue to fantasize all you want. Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

Thank you!  It's very gratifying to get the positive feedback.  I share everything you all post with my partner and I think it really helps her confidence.  I'm nervous about writing in general and she's nervous about writing giantess/vore/unbirthy type stuff.. so it's always great to hear people are really getting into the story and the characters, which is good, because the story doesn't stay at the Boar forever xD  

We are kind of imagining this in alot of ways as an anime xD  So we definitely have our harem and our fanservice xD  But at the heart of it all its a true love story with an epic fantasy adventure background.. and hopefully you really enjoy the comedy as well.

Next post is Sunday so we ca nget the other forums caught up to this one!  see you then!  Tell your buddies to come read it too!  The more of us involved the more fun it will be!

Reviewer: Keltohey Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2016 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 8

I have to agree with SpookyTaco's review. I have been reading stories in this site browsing by the category, I have found mostly some poorly written, unfinished stories, but from time to time, a gem is found. This is definitely the latter, diamond even! :)

And after reading your first chapter, I was hooked. Your character building, dialog and narrative is excellent!

I don't have words to praise enough (not a native english speaker), but this story should have a lot more attention that it currently has.

Can't wait for the continuation, the plot thickens as they say! I just hope Mavka don't consume his soul, but she can have his body and probably will :D

 



Author's Response:

Awesome!  Thank you so much!  We are really glad you are enjoying it!  This plot is going to get very think indeed xDD  And as for Mavka, she USUALLY get's what she wants.  Assuming Yagaritte isn't around to stop her xDD  Which come to think of it she isn't right now.  Uh oh Edo.  This story might get super short all of a sudden   o.O

Reviewer: Xijang Signed [Report This]
Date: November 13 2016 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great interaction between characters! I look foreward to seeing how this story plays out. 



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Glad to have you along!

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 13 2016 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 8

I can't wait for the next chapter! Of course, Mav is one of my favorite characters. How will she react when Edo delivers the gold coins? She's probably never had anyone do something like that for her...giving her money while expecting nothing in return. Perhaps she'll look at him differently. Perhaps she'll feel a new emotion, love instead of pure lust. And if so, what will that mean for Edo and Yagaritte’s relationship? A love triangle? And will Yagaritte be upset that Edo misinterpreted her words of 'doing the right thing'? Well, she couldn't get too upset. Returning the money to Mav is a selfless action after all.

BTW, your skill in writing sentences, dialog, and narrative is excellent. I think the title and summary could use some work to help attract reader attention. But regardless, if a reader makes it through the first chapter of this story, they'll be hooked. It's that good.



Author's Response:

It's getting complicated xD  But that's how love is!  I'm sure she will be very "appreciative" , just hopefully not TOO much.  Be a shame to lose our hero xDDD  

 

We would LOVE to hear from you regaridng he better title and summaries.. Feel free to contact me through this site!

 

Thanks again for all your support!  love hearing your thoughts after every chapter!

 

Reviewer: Hank the Boggle Champion Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 13 2016 11:53 AM Title: Chapter 1

Love the dynamic relationship between Yagaritte and Edo. Hopefully Mav won't eat him up. Your writing is a testament to what good penmanship can create. As always, it is always a joy to read your work.

Author's Response:

Thanks!  I'm always a little torn on that front...  but if she did it would be EPIC xDDD  Hopefully he can escape to see another day, though or thats a much shorter story than we intended xDD

 

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 05 2016 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 7

Woo! Yagaritte forgave Edo! And looks like he had quite a bit of fun with her and Mav. I wonder what she whispered to him just before his climax. Perhaps it was a spell?

Reviewer: Hank the Boggle Champion Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 31 2016 9:54 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow what a great chapter! It will be interesting to see this dynamic evolve! Hopefully Yagaritte will be his first time.

Author's Response:

So glad you liked it!   Edovan definintely wants to hold out for her..but there are 32 other women at the Boar who may have other ideas xD  Stay true Edo  Stay true!

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 30 2016 11:06 AM Title: Chapter 6

I think I like Mavka now more than Yagaritte! I enjoyed how the mouse scared Mavka and she turned to Edo for protection. Nice reversal in dynamics. Plus she now sees him as something more than a toy. It would be interesting to delve further into their relationship, highlighting the conflict between her 'hunger' to consume him and her interest in him as a person. Which would win? Surely she wouldn't let her passions kill him...or would she be unable to control it? Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response:

very keen insights!  Let the shipping wars begin!!

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 26 2016 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 5

Nice chapter! Poor Edo's logical brain just can't seem to win. Of course, his lizard brain's having a great time. The twins should be interesting. They haven't attempted to seduce Edo yet. Since they play by the rules and have access to magicka, I'm betting they win the contest somehow. But my true hope is that Yagaritte re-enters the picture and either stops the competition or claims victory. I really missed not having her in this chapter. Looking forward to the next one!



Author's Response:

Glad you liked it!  We are saving the best for last..hahaha And you will definitely see Yagaritte again before the end of act 1 xD  Thanks again for giving us your feedback!

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 22 2016 9:08 AM Title: Chapter 4

Yet another fantastic chapter! I want to know more about Svie and the 'loud female voice' that stopped her from proceeding. Is she Yagaritte's sister? I'm a bit curious how Edovan avoided female attention all his life. They're quite attracted to him. Then again, this is a brothel. I hope Yagaritte doesn't get jealous. I'm glad she's getting closer to forgiving him. He did wrong her, but in much the same way a big-eyed puppy chews up a new pair of shoes. The puppy is at fault, but you can't stay mad at it forever!



Author's Response:

Svie will be back around <3  She's one of the Feature girls of the Boar, and you will meet Loud female voice  on the next chapter xD

Edovan has many secrets..even he doesn't know all of them, but rest assured everything is happening to him for a reason.  More clues on that in next chapter as well!

And you are totally right about Yagaritte.  Its not so much a question of if she will forgive him as WHEN will she let him off the hook and TELL him he's forgiven.  She does love to tease him!

So happy you are getting into this as much as we are! Thanks for your support!

 

 

Reviewer: Hank the Boggle Champion Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 21 2016 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 1

Love, love , love this story! Keep up the good writing!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the kind words!  We have the arc planned all the way to the end of the first book, though of course we haven't set in stone exactly how we are going to get there xD  But there's so much written already that I still have left to post! But I'll be sure to pass the word to her that you are enjoying it!

Reviewer: combine45 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 21 2016 12:00 PM Title: Chapter 3

Wow, This story pushes all the right buttons for a gentle type romance for me. Enorad is so perfectly innocent and vulnerable I couldn't help feeling sorry for him when Yagaritte asked if he had hold for a room or food. She is also right up my alley as a rough and sultry and yet kind hearted strong woman. I cant wait to see her push more of his buttons teasing him and us the readers. I will eagerly anticipate each chapter for the plot and your descriptive steamy scenes of the women.



Author's Response:

We love that you are responding to that because at its core we are trying to write a love story between to very different people xD We love the sexy times, but eventually they will have to leave the Boar behind and ehad out to adventure, and hopefully by then you will care enough about the characters to want to know what happens to them <3

Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 21 2016 9:00 AM Title: Chapter 3

You're a gifted writer. I admire those who can write authentic stories set in history. I suppose this is more Tolkienesque Fantasy than history, but still, very impressive. Reminds me of Terra by lancealot501.

I'm really not sure how Edovan is going to explain his way out of this one. He's going to have to do something big to make it up to Yagaritte. He's a good elf, but he causes SO much trouble for himself. My hope is that he finds a way to participate in her adventure today, and she finds a way to forgive the overly curious little bastard. Either way, looking forward to the next chapter!!



Author's Response:

There's going to be some punishment involved xD Hard labor of a sort. But you know Edovan. He's going to try his hardest xD

 

Can't tell you how gratifying it is that people are gettig into the story and the characters the same as we are. We feel in love with all of them ( even B) so we hope you will too!

Reviewer: Scarlett Signed [Report This]
Date: October 20 2016 10:47 PM Title: Chapter 3

Aww. Things certainly spiraled out of control there. :( Edovan shouldn't be snooping about in other people's stuff like that! Especially when said stuff is locked up. Actually it seemed unnaturally reckless to do what he did. Like the sort of thing one would do in a place where they felt complete safety and privacy. He was in an acquaintance's room naked. Certainly the wrong time and place for that! Bad Edo!

Author's Response:

lol Yeah he's incredibly intelligent, but lacks a lot of common sense.  He's young though and the girls at the Boar are going to have PLENTY to teach him. Plus Yagaritte if she gets over her mad xD  She's LOADED with common sense!

Reviewer: johnsmith10992 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 20 2016 8:48 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow, I'm hooked. Some of the best writing on this site!

Author's Response:

Just glad you are enjoying it!

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