Date: November 17 2016 4:53 AM Title: Chapter 8
Keltohey is right. This story is a gem and deserves to be appreciated a lot more. I love the fantasy-setting and your character building. Edovan as a naieve and sheer magnet to the female creatures. Especially the confusing effect he has on the by nature gentle Yagaritte, with a slight but harmless sadistic twist. I hope to see the romance between the two of them develop further. Great fantasy, and please continue to fantasize all you want. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you! It's very gratifying to get the positive feedback. I share everything you all post with my partner and I think it really helps her confidence. I'm nervous about writing in general and she's nervous about writing giantess/vore/unbirthy type stuff.. so it's always great to hear people are really getting into the story and the characters, which is good, because the story doesn't stay at the Boar forever xD
We are kind of imagining this in alot of ways as an anime xD So we definitely have our harem and our fanservice xD But at the heart of it all its a true love story with an epic fantasy adventure background.. and hopefully you really enjoy the comedy as well.
Next post is Sunday so we ca nget the other forums caught up to this one! see you then! Tell your buddies to come read it too! The more of us involved the more fun it will be!
Date: November 15 2016 9:03 AM Title: Chapter 8
I have to agree with SpookyTaco's review. I have been reading stories in this site browsing by the category, I have found mostly some poorly written, unfinished stories, but from time to time, a gem is found. This is definitely the latter, diamond even! :)
And after reading your first chapter, I was hooked. Your character building, dialog and narrative is excellent!
I don't have words to praise enough (not a native english speaker), but this story should have a lot more attention that it currently has.
Can't wait for the continuation, the plot thickens as they say! I just hope Mavka don't consume his soul, but she can have his body and probably will :D
Author's Response:
Awesome! Thank you so much! We are really glad you are enjoying it! This plot is going to get very think indeed xDD And as for Mavka, she USUALLY get's what she wants. Assuming Yagaritte isn't around to stop her xDD Which come to think of it she isn't right now. Uh oh Edo. This story might get super short all of a sudden o.O
[Report This]Date: November 13 2016 5:41 PM Title: Chapter 8
I can't wait for the next chapter! Of course, Mav is one of my favorite characters. How will she react when Edo delivers the gold coins? She's probably never had anyone do something like that for her...giving her money while expecting nothing in return. Perhaps she'll look at him differently. Perhaps she'll feel a new emotion, love instead of pure lust. And if so, what will that mean for Edo and Yagaritte’s relationship? A love triangle? And will Yagaritte be upset that Edo misinterpreted her words of 'doing the right thing'? Well, she couldn't get too upset. Returning the money to Mav is a selfless action after all.
BTW, your skill in writing sentences, dialog, and narrative is excellent. I think the title and summary could use some work to help attract reader attention. But regardless, if a reader makes it through the first chapter of this story, they'll be hooked. It's that good.
Author's Response:
It's getting complicated xD But that's how love is! I'm sure she will be very "appreciative" , just hopefully not TOO much. Be a shame to lose our hero xDDD
We would LOVE to hear from you regaridng he better title and summaries.. Feel free to contact me through this site!
Thanks again for all your support! love hearing your thoughts after every chapter!