Date: December 08 2016 5:57 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Necklace
This is awesome! Now that you've introduced the explanation of how Jeanne shrank Sara, it'd be awesome if she shrank a random woman and disposed of her (crush, vore, etc) in front of Sara to show how cruel she really is! Either way, I'm a huge fan of this story
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm not sure if I'll introduce another shrinkie to this story, but I absolutely plan to use the amulet in another story (expect that early next year, I want to focus on Sara while i develop the other characters). That story will definitely have a few deaths in it. >:)
[Report This]Date: December 06 2016 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Butt Why
added a bookmark because I havent read everything, but I totally enjoyed it so far. keep it up.
[Report This]Date: December 06 2016 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 19 - The Necklace
love it. really great story.
Date: November 24 2016 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
#killinit
[Report This]Date: November 24 2016 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
Still the best story on this site so far. I'm really enjoying the unaware aspects, and as for some more fodder for idea I would recommend something to do with unaware. You haven't explored the sexual organs of either girl that much, maybe something unaware with Krystal and that new guy she got a number for? we also haven't seen any indication that it isn't just the tqo sisters in the house. I think also a little unaware with Jeene, (i forget how to spell her name, sorry) and Sara could be cool. If you haven't figured out already, I like unaware. Unaware and the protagonist living at the end of the story are my two favorite things about stories.
Besides ideas, there's a typo in your first chapter where you call her Krystals older sister by a different name.
Author's Response: Why thank you! ^.^ I feel like I still have a ways to go to complete with some of the veterans on the site (Duggernaut, Mr. E, to name a few). As for the typo in the first chapter, HOLYCRAPHOWDIDIMISSTHAT? It's been fixed, thanks for pointing it out. I think unaware will be staying with Krystal, but I do have plans for Sara to be a sex toy for both (thinking strapped to one of Krystal's toys might be fun).
[Report This]Date: November 24 2016 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
Another excellent chapter! Really enjoying the whole story so far. I loved the footsie chapter, the image of Jeanne rubbing tiny Sara between her feet with lotion was incredibly sexy! also love the flip flop scene with Sara being tired to the strap and subject to both girls sweaty toes!
I'd love to see Sara stripped of her clothes. they sound a bit worse for wear anyway. and it would be another way for Jeanne to humiliate her. Strip her naked then Jeanne compares their bodies, giving Sara an intimate view/tour of her body as she is slid/rubbed all over. then Jeanne takes Sara to bed to live out that sensual dream. Sara is rubbed over Jeanne's nipples, shoved into her hot pussy, stuck up her ass while Jeanne uses a vibrator. when Jeanne cums she drops Sara into the pool of cum and leaves her over night.
Maybe an unaware chapter too, Jeanne knows Krystal has a vibrator/dildo as well so ties or sticks Sara to it. then Krystal uses it at night. Sara gets stuck to the cum inside Krystal's dirty panties.
Also maybe we see how Jeanne shrank Sara as she decides to shrink some humiliating clothes for her. a cheerleader uniform, adult/kinky school girl uniform, bikini, pink onsie etc?
Author's Response:
Yes, her clothes are getting pretty ragged. I don't expect them to survive many more chapters.
I do plan to have Sara interact with both sisters sexually (more than just a car ride home this time), so we'll see. ;)
Cheerleader outfit is coming, once Jeanne gets back to school (still working on writing in that direction).
[Report This]Date: November 23 2016 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
My suggestions would be:
Toenail cleaning/entrapment
Navel entrapment (the girls are active, so sit-ups?)
More unaware asshole stuff
Somethink with urine (maybe even urethra insertion)
Re:the death vs captivity thing, the lattee would be preferable by far. If you have somethink you enjoy playing with, you wouldn't get rid of it.
Author's Response: Toenail - maybe. At Sara's size it's not really practical, but then again, she IS Jeanne's slave. Navel - Oooh! That's a unique one, I definitely will see if that one fits in somewhere. Ass - That's already in the works. Think Sara tied to one of Krystal's toys. Urine - I'm not sure that will end up in this story. Most likely, I'll end up doing a more violent/nasty story that would include it, among others.
Date: November 23 2016 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
I doubt physically active sinters like them smoke so probably not. Me myself I believe this story is leading to 2 possible endings. Sara's death or captivity permanently until she dies.
Not a whole lot has been said about how she was shrunk yet so maybe have Jeanne enlighten her perhaps? It's apparent Jeanne is definitely the spiteful type since she is literally going to kill a girl over cheerleading so I don't see any happy endings unless Krystal intervenes somehow. The detail you use when you describe Sara and Joanne's aware interactions are top notchalf. It's why I keep checking back every day lol.
I'm not great with ideas and you have covered my favorites really so far so I can only wait and see what else you come up with man. I hope you don't run dry yet!
Author's Response: That's the dilemma I'm facing right now: death or eternal captivity. I'm leaning more towards captivity, as Jeanne keeping her alive as a pet/sex toy would be more humiliating than outright killing her (not that she won't try again). As for the origins of Sara's shrinking, I actually had an entire chapter written to answer that, but I decided to scrap it. Jeanne was going to be an intern at a lab, which would give her access to the equipment needed to shrink Sara. But I couldn't make it work and keep it realistic (besides shrinking tech of course). Working in the aerospace industry myself, I can't imagine someone at her skill level being able to successfully sneak off with such a dangerous prototype device to use it. The thing would be too heavily protected, which also ruled out being Sara to the lab (tricking her into a field trip or something). In the end, that chapter was gutted, and the remnants became chapter 12.
Date: November 23 2016 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 18 - Beach Day (Part II)
Great story. I love how cruel Jeanne is with Sara. Could I suggest that Jeanne smokes and ties her little bug to the tip as she smokes a cigarette?
Author's Response:
I honestly didn't plan to have either sister smoke (and MadHatter has a point woth tjem being physically active). I would probably have to introduce another character into the scene in order to bring this element into the story. I have toyed with the idea of a third character (Jeanne's lover perhaps, with an equally cruel personality), so it might work in that context.I might need more than 1-2 chapters to bring that to fruition though. O.O
Date: November 23 2016 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Beach Day (Part I)
Tremendous story! And I think I'm gonna love the next chapter!!
Author's Response: If it's mouth and/or boobs you're hoping for, then you probably will!
Date: November 22 2016 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
Continually great stuff. Superb!
Author's Response: Thank you!
[Report This]Date: November 17 2016 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
Really loving the recent chapters, man. Human vibrator and hints at vore... Yowzaaaa. You've got a tremendous talent for writing here. Well done!
Date: November 16 2016 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Footsies and Food
God, this chapter is a masterpiece.
Date: November 16 2016 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
I've been waiting for someone to write this kind of story with all the things I fantasize about. I am a fan of every chapter you wrote especially the part where she's tied to a gstring. That's so hot! Unawarebis great! oh if you could write a chapter where she's literally used as the string part, that would be awesome! Thank you for sharing us this gem. More chapters to come!. Cheers!
Author's Response:
Glad you enjoy it so far! There is definitely more unaware coming.
"literally as the string..." Hmm..... I think I like this idea. Might add it to my evil plan. If not with Sara, then maybe woth someone else (a cartain witch perhaps?).
[Report This]Date: November 16 2016 5:00 AM Title: Chapter 14 - The Evening Commute
I love unaware ass inseriton and humiliation parts the most. Enjoyed reading a lot so far.
[Report This]Date: November 15 2016 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Stuck in the Middle
really like this story, but chapters are a bit too short. maybe combine two each or three into one instead of adding short ones.
Author's Response:
Appreciate the feedback. I was aiming for a chapter length of 1500-2500 words, to keep it more segregated (note each chapter has only 1-2 themes), but I can work on making them a bit longer.
Date: November 14 2016 12:10 PM Title: Chapter 13 - The Sulfur Mine
No apologies. That was perfect!!! Perfect nasty submission.
[Report This]Date: November 14 2016 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
That. Was. Amazing.
[Report This]Date: November 13 2016 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
Can we get some more unaware feet content? Please :)
Author's Response: Feet will return, and unaware will return (the latter in about 3 chapters when Krystal gets home). Not sure unaware feet will happen, but I'll see what I can do.
Date: November 13 2016 12:30 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Feet on the Ground
Superb! Having her be trapped in there all day is amazing. Can't wait for more!