Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: February 04 2017 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 16

Very strong stuff again. If I address all the good details, interaction and development, this review would be super long.

Eli and the family seem to be on a path filled with errors and mistakes but is lucky that many people know about him and he is somewhat famous even. So he has to learn how to best handle the subtle government brainwashing of his younger sister and mother and try to keep his sense of self. For them it is also a learning experience and they will find out eventually what is best.

I think Ally suffers the most because she can imagine best of what it must be like. Seeing this all happen. With her I get the feeling she already imagined what it would be like and that the same lines she says to Eli would make her just as mad and frustrated as she was in his place.

This is very interesting. There are many different roads to choose from, whatever you as writer decide it can be very interesting development to read.

 

Author's Response:

Insightful. Ally does seem the most level headed in some respects. As far as the path the story will take, I'm hoping it surprises me too.