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Reviewer: diesel Signed [Report This]
Date: May 03 2017 2:00 PM Title: 'Tom' - continued

Giving Amy pleasure is harder than I thought. She is voracious.
Fascinating. 2 little ones in cages. Dr. Maxine is in control. This should be great. Love when she talks scientific about reducing people. I can hardly wait to see where you go with this and who is involved.

Author's Response:

Yeah, there will be a few more people involved, and more and more things happening...

 Lol, I can't say anything more! (Ha!)  Thank's D!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2017 3:04 PM Title: 'Tom' - continued

This was probably one of the best chapters in this story. I loved how you focused on Billy and then shifted the focus to Tom at the end. It felt like some sort of foreshadowing.

Billy was tied up at first, and at the end of the chapter, Tom was taped up. Like Billy said, this might be a new personality of Mrs. Maxine that we haven't seen. I don't recall Maxine taping Billy down before so this might be exciting.

The verbal exchange with Amy was fantastic! The part where she opened her panties to look at him and taunt him was the best part of the chapter! When Billy said "Noooo!" I was cheering "Yessss!"

The one thing missing was a sexy catch phrase that Amy could have said before sealing him back in her panties. "I'm keeping you in my panties all day". "My pussy wants to marry you" "There is no escape for you little man" "I know deep down you truly enjoy this" "I want to fuck your little face tonight" "I can't resist Billy, this is my fantasy" "mmmhmm, you're better than my sex toys." "Most men dream about this." "I love a struggler" "I think I'm going to keep you as my sex toy forever, Billy".

So many great things this chapter. Another example is when Billy has that long reflection period where he thinks of himself as becoming Amy's sex slave. It made me jealous of Billy. I would love to take that destiny.

In addition, I like when you described Amy when she just had her orgasm and Billy describes what he sees. The part when Amy is gasping, her breasts heaving, mouth is oval shaped, awesome! I can easily picture that scene and it feels so real.

That outfit Amy wore reminds me of a sexy school girl outfit that you see teens wear on Halloween. Nice touch with the leggings to keep Billy pressed against her.

Hmm. I'm curious how Billy ended up back in Maxine's hands. Did Amy finally give him up? I guess Maxine had some sort of leverage. Maybe Maxine promised a replacement that Amy could keep forever. :D

Honestly when Billy woke up in the cage and Maxine said Mr. Speedman, I had this incredible thought. What if Maxine somehow switched the minds of Tom and Billy? I thought Billy woke up in Tom's body in the cage and soon Tom would wake up in Billy's body trapped with Amy. That would be a random, but cool plot twist.

Lol! Billy feels sorry for Tom?? After what Billy just endured? Billy arguably went through hell to him, but somehow he thinks Tom is going to suffer a worse fate. Wouldn't Billy think that whatever Tom gets would be less of a punishment than what Billy got?

Tom is unconcscious. I hope that whatever sexy thing that Maxine does with him, Tom will be awake and completely aware of what is going on.

Now that Amy doesn't have Billy, maybe she can get Tom. (I'm crossing my fingers.)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm glad that you thought it felt real. I reworked two sections of this chapter several times, and I still didn't feel completely satisfied with it. Although, after I decided to change the direction and bring Tom directly into the story, I had to rethink a few things.  I wanted to get Billy out, and at the same time bring Tom in, hopefully, it will all fall into place during the next chapter...   Diana returns.  And, Joyce is really getting friendly with her and her mother, the three of them will be together after Maxine realizes that Joyce knows...

Thanks, Tom!

Reviewer: Shaman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2017 11:20 AM Title: 'Tom' - continued

Awesome ending as always. Please don't ever end this story



Author's Response:

Thank's man!

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