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Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 01 2017 4:43 AM Title: The Man with the Plan

Why am I thinking “holy shit?”

     I really don’t want Stan to run.  But I really don’t want him caught by these harpies.  God, this is so unfair.  Stoopid ‘megs.

     I like Stan’s presence in the story.  He’s really adding a great perspective.  I really like that he and Deacon have chemistry.  That is a great touch, orphan and fill-in father hitting it off.  Of course, now that we know Stan is also an orphan, we see him being a great parent because...maybe because his own dad had to step it up without mom there, maybe.  If dad wasn't around, maybe he's trying to give Oliver what he never had.  That is amazing.
     It makes me wonder if the ‘Megs are going out of their way to target really great guys.  Clearly they aren’t that picky, look at Bear, but if they get the chance to destroy the decent guy or the douche bag...it looks like they aim high.  That explains why it seems like there are so many jerks in the world today. 

     Frost is spooky.  We know there’s a rumor that she doesn’t need the weeping stones, but remember the business with the arm bands?  Does she need his consent?  3 times even?

     She might be tempted to rush things.  Not get permission.  What happens then?  Try and see things as she might see them, Oliver escapes and then Stan shows up, Stan is another “one who got away.”  She might just see this as the universe saying “dig in.”

     However, usually someone like Stan wouldn’t live to see 19.  But, here’s Stan, mature and experience and manifesting a pretty clear danger sense.  What else might he have up his sleeve that even he doesn’t know about? 

    And tactically, he’s only stepped into the foyer.  That means he only has to take one or two steps back and he’s on the steps or leaning on the door frame again.  Make them do what they’re gonna do where there are possible witnesses.

     So while he’s in a great deal of possible danger, he’s not completely screwed.  And he’s not stupid.

     We get to say “Go Stan” and not just hope.

     Tense situation in a super cool chapter Duggernaut.  Thanks for sharing this.

pix

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2017 9:30 PM Title: The Man with the Plan

What a wonderful chapter of revelations.  Firstly, you have to love Stan's personality and way of cutting through the crap.  I liked the way he kept Deacon clear of trouble and did not reveal his experience with "Oliver" not properly responding to his tease. I loved his interaction with Monroe, refusing to take “no” for an answer.  Now, the interesting part.  Edith knew Stan's mother which would make his mother an Omega and Stan the son of an Omega not yet sacrificed to the sisters. Edith clearly put two and two together and in my opinion, will want to make up for lost time with Stan.  Stan will need to watch his back because the sisters will be coming for him. Now it's getting interesting!  More please...

Reviewer: foreignkanto Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2017 9:24 PM Title: The Man with the Plan

Ugh, I've been waiting so long for Oliver to be in the clutches of one of the girls, and yet another chapter pushing that back? YOu really are trying to save that event. It's crazy, 78 chapters in and our main character still hasn't had an aware giantess interaction. It must be some kind of record.

But seriously, great story man. Right now, Stan is playing his cards perfectly. He even has his contingency code word. Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 31 2017 9:16 PM Title: The Man with the Plan

Whoa! Mrs. Frost knew Stan's grandmother?! This conspiracy _does_ go back a long way.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 27 2017 2:13 PM Title: Blonde Ambition

Brooklyn, take me! If you want a new toy to keep in your panties, I would be honored to be your toy and let you have your way with me forever. You could restrain me for hours like you said with Oliver and tie me up anyway you want. That way, you can keep me inside you all the time.

Man, Brooklyn is horny. One moment when Cam is gone and she misses the feeling of a tiny guy pressed up against her.

Shouting like it's an emergency! Ha! I admit, that's funny. Losing a tiny is Omega Pi's type of drama.

Oliver may have lost some ground on these girls, but now he has a new ally with Cery's. This should be a fun game of cat and mice.

Stan, the man, will this be his last stand? Honestly, I wouldn't mind him shrinking and be given to Samantha. I just don't really fear for Stan. In fact, I might consider him lucky that he might get small in front of these girls.

Maybe Cery's will sneak Oliver into Stan's pocket. Or Cery's will just take Oliver to Stan while they are away from the Omega Pi house. It sounds simple to reunite the two.

The questions is how will Oliver grow back? I really want Oliver to grow back and then knock on the Omega Pi house and when they open it, he says something clever. "Miss Me?" with a grin. I would relish that moment.

I would love Cery's to be that game changer. Restore Oliver and let Oliver march to the house with confidence. Also, Cery's should make Oliver take an antishrinking pill before he goes there of course.

Brooklyn sees Oliver "where's Cam!" She demanded.

"He's safe" Oliver smiled. Brooklyn made a face and looked at Oliver's crotch.

Oliver chuckled. "You girls are naughty. I would never think of that sort of thing. When I say he's safe, he is truly safe. Not safe as ....in there." Oliver notioning to Brooklyn's tight shorts.

Brroklyn strided over to Oliver and grabbed his collar and whispered. "If I woke up when you stole Cam from me, I would have gladly taken you instead. You would be quite a catch for my hungry pussy. Your little adventure would have ended and mine would just begin."

She looked at Oliver with her bright eyes locking his vision to her. "How would you like to live here?" she stepped back and stroked her panties with 2 fingers.

Oliver smiled. "I know something else that might." Oliver then touched his own pants.

Brooklyn scoffed. "One day Oliver.." she said as she walked back into the house.

"It's good to be back" Oliver exclaimed as he entered the house.
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I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 27 2017 1:35 PM Title: Blonde Ambition

Stan wasted no time to get to the Omega Pi house.  He knows men are disappearing an needs to be cautious be he is supremely concerned for Oliver's safety.  Will he rush in or will he go fishing to see how these excuses for human beings respond.  He knows there is danger and I think he's smart enough to be careful.  If they do invite him in, for God's sake don't accept a beverage, otherwise we'll be talking about "little Stan". Imagine if Samantha we're to pay a visit to the house and was introduced to the reduced version of her husband...

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 26 2017 10:22 PM Title: Blonde Ambition

Hmmmm! Hopefully, Stan will be mollified by whatever explanation the OP's improvise. Or, at the very least, if he does become suspicious, I hope he's not so impulsive as to accuse them right then and there! I know it's your story, and all. But, I still think the very next chapter would be too soon to shrink him. Assuming, of course, that you had any plans in that direction when you first depicted him deciding to pay Oliver a surprise visit.

That somewhat mandatory bit of seriousness over with, let me conclude this review by saying that if Stan were Cameron's stepfather, rather than Oliver's, then I could almost guarantee that the OP's are about to give him...

...the Cam-shaft.*


*Wah-wah-wah-WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 26 2017 7:27 PM Title: Blonde Ambition

Oliver's restraint is almost admirable...only because it is based on ignorance.  It's been pretty cool seeing Oliver get one over on them, but it looks like his streak of small victories is coming to an end.  They're getting wise to his depths and his tricks. 

I wonder what Brooklyn will think of Oliver now.  I like the moment of silence when they realized how vulnerable she was.  Very human. 

Since not a one of them is likable, I can't really praise their observation skills.  Allie's brain is functional, but not much use for anything worthwhile.  I hope Stan is up to the challenge she represents, though. 

Great timing Stan.  Do the good guys some good.

Nice work Duggernaut.  This is really getting tense.

pix

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 23 2017 12:18 PM Title: Grandma's House

Thanks for the kind words TS ;)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 23 2017 3:42 AM Title: Grandma's House

I completely forgot about Vesper. Brooklyn has been controlling this story in terms of who is luring me on. Then it's Sersei, followed by Vesper. I would love to see Vesper step her game up.

Just to clarify, some of the power drained from a normal person becomes trapped in the stone and when someone accesses this stone, they can use the power from the stone to locate any tiny guy.

So now we know why Edith Frost is so confident in finding Oliver. Due to the natural flow of the story, I don't see Oliver at all getting in the hands of Edith Frost so I felt that Sersei was going to get him eventually or Oliver gets normal. Now this stone will add another option with Vesper.

Now the choice is Sersei or Vesper. Who would I like to see have Oliver? I pick Vesper. I enjoy seeing Sersei struggle and get outwitted by Oliver. She felt so confident about getting Oliver that I couldn't help but enjoy her desperation for him.

Vesper on the other hand has this charm to her that intrigues me. She seduced him before at the shop and she has those tiny glass human dildos with her. Imagine the kinky stuff she comes up with. Definately Vesper.

Random stuff:
Duggernaut, you left us with quite the cliffhanger last time. Will Oliver reveal Cam's position. Will Cery's trick Oliver to tell the truth.

Also, can we just acknowledge that the beautiful, lustful, horny Brooklyn has lost her sex toy. She will know that Cam is gone and I'm sure she is smart enough to know that Cam couldn't have don't it alone. If she doesn't find or get Cam back soon, I think Deacon would be a great replacement. He even admires her. I wonder how he would react to a close up.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: July 23 2017 3:28 AM Title: First Time Away From Home

@shrinkmeister,

That's one amazing scene that I wished was in the actually plot. Also, I could definately imagine them saying these lines. It felt like I can insert your dialogue into this chapter.

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 11:59 PM Title: Grandma's House

During Sersei’s visit to Grandma Eleanor Crawford, the topic shifts away from locating Oliver to Grandma Crawford’s early days at the university.  Sersei begins, “so Grandma, tell me about your days at Omega Pi and what it was like”.  “Oh, my dear, things were a little different in those days fifty years ago. We weren’t as forward as you girls are now with your pink wrist bands and asking boys for dates”.  “Really Grandma, how sweet.  Tell me about Grandpa and how you met him”.  “Well honey, I saw your Grandfather on campus and he approached me one day.  He was such a handsome young man, I was really taken with him. He was both funny and smart.  A really caring person.   He had such great aspirations for his life after college.  We went on a few dates and soon enough, I just knew that he was the one.  He was a very passionate young man”.  “What happened next Grandma?”  “Well, the girls were having a get together at the sorority house, and I thought that this would be the perfect time to Introduce him to my Omega sisters.  Everyone just loved your Grandfather and I was so happy”.  “What a great story Grandma.  Is there more?”  “Well, just one other thing my dear.  That night we drugged your Grandfather, held the Reaping ritual and shrank him down.  You should have seen the look on his face when he woke up in that shoe box, absolutely priceless!  He lasted four days before he suffocated inside me. Those were wonderful times.”  “Thanks for sharing Grandma, what a great story.  I hope I meet my Mr. Right one day too.”

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 9:39 PM Title: Grandma's House

     That is a very good question @Shrinkmeister.  It does seem like a confirmation of Cerys’ pitch, but I’m guessing she’s using bits of conversation Oliver may or may not have heard and weaving her story around them....so he’s heard about slimy Samantha, but not about the missing stone. 
     Remember how good these creatures are at pretending to be humans....I’m sure at some point, when she was young and digusting, a bunch of her peers got together and put young Cerys in her place.   She stopped saying "I want to be a chef and bake you all in a pie." and stated saying "when I grow up I wanna be a nurse and help people."  So, naturally she has nightmares about someone doing that to the whole lot of them.   She can imaging that any ethically normal person would expect such an organization to rise up.  She imagines a bunch of her own turning on her.  She weaves that dread into her tale.
    I can also imagine her sucking up to Alley or Vesper at some point when the other is around and hearing about the missing stone. 
     Lets face it, it’s still a sorority house, something weird happens like Oliver gets away and gossip and speculation are going to run wild....”did you hear about Oliver’s mother?”  “Could it have something to do with the missing stone?”  She knows Oliver could overhear any of this.  Being something other than morally retarded he can’t imagine a resistance movement not arising.  He’s going to be a sucker again.  

pix

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 6:11 PM Title: Grandma's House

Is it possibe that Cerys' story to Oliver may have actually been true?  The missing weeping stone she described has been verified by Gramma "I wanna live forever" Crawford... Could Cerys really be an ally to Cam and Oliver?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 5:48 PM Title: Grandma's House

Hmmmm! If Oliver and Cam _were_ to give Cerys the benefit of the doubt, and they were down her cleavage at the same time Sersei started her dowsing, would the latter dare frisk the former?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 5:40 PM Title: To Yield or Not

Basically, yeah. ;-D

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 3:39 PM Title: Grandma's House

Pix... My thoughts exactly.  Where was... "Oh... How has your brother adjusted to his new life?". Cam has been completely written off as a person.  He is now only a possession of the sisters.  As Sersei stated to Harmony... a cigarette butt. Something else stands out.  The last name Crawford is maternal.  The father's last name was never taken which leads me to believe there was no marriage.  The father does his part to produce offspring and he quietly disappears.  Great chapter... Please Sir may I have more?

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 1:45 PM Title: Grandma's House

      Notice how they know the bloodlines of their victims?  That's kinda sick.  "I'm consuming so and so's son."  The term ick springs to mind.

     Gee, she must've forgotten to ask how Cam was doing...

     Great explanation of some of the power of the weeping stones.  It appeals to the trekkie in me.  It sounds like a warp siganture.... It also sounds like Sersei is going to be owing more flavors.  Hmmm...whatever could she use as currency???  If she winds up with no Oliver, will it cost her something painful...I hope so.

     I have to wonder, is Frosty's interest in the situation more about testing Sersei than about finding Samantha's son?  It seems unlikely that she's that interested in Oliver. 

This is fascinating Duggernaut.  Thanks for a cool chapter.

pix

 

 

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2017 9:39 AM Title: To Yield or Not

Pix,

It would be interesting to learn at what tender age did Sersei's mother explained the Omega "facts of life" to her.  That her brother and the men in their lives in general, are nothing more than tools to be used and enjoyed...



Author's Response:

A very insightful question, a what point did she learn her brother was nothing more than a vanity enhancer dressed in a meat suit...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2017 12:34 PM Title: First Time Away From Home

@pixl8ed,

The story was fine. I just found the timing of the story to be forced. Oliver and Cam are deciding if they should go out and risk themselves. However, right before that, while they are still deciding, Cam just says "funny story" and just casually tells Oliver about a memory he had with Sersei.

The story could have been told when they were safe in the plant before Cery's offered her deal. Story time at this momemnt seemed off. Part of me felt that Oliver was getting impatient with Cam as he told it and then felt sorry when Cam geared up. However, those tears didn't stop Oliver from going to the water and then bar.

Since Oliver seemed to have made up his mind before the story was told, I now think Cam was just trying to stall Oliver and keep him close for as long as possible. Perhaps, Cam faked the crying to get Oliver to stay with him?

Hmm. Like I said, the story was fine, but as I was waiting for Oliver's decision on what should he do, Cam just tells his story in the middle of it, which felt random to me.

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