Date: September 03 2017 11:45 AM Title: Sersei Claims her Prize
It's interesting to see Sersei's emotional response to hear that Cam was swallowed by Cerys. She almost seems to care that her only sibling has been killed. Especially since she was instrumental in Cam being in put this position. Sersei was the one who misled her brother about the pink wrist bands and always knew what would happen to Cam. Maybe she was upset that Cerys simply overstepped her bounds, not that Cam was murdered. Of course, she easily accepted that Oliver, a boy she actually liked, would probably be killed by Cerys, so I guess it’s no biggie. After all, it’s not like they are people…
Author's Response:
We shall see soon enough, but until then, let's check in on Stan
[Report This]Date: August 29 2017 10:41 AM Title: Sersei Claims her Prize
In the immortal words of the Dread Pirate Wesley: "The Battle of Wits has begun!"
Author's Response:
Oliver is facing about the same kind of physical odds as the dread pirate when he's immobilized...
[Report This]Date: August 28 2017 11:13 PM Title: Sersei Claims her Prize
I bet Sersei is so happy, maybe even trembling that she finally has Oliver. I mean, she has been waiting a long time for this moment. While Brooklyn and the other girls had their fun, all she could do was wait. She got so bored, she even checked in on Cam, just to remember what it's like. Then, she had the fear of losing Oliver to Edith and then out of nowhere she hears about Oliver and she almost denies it to be true. Sersei had waited, and now has her toy.
I don't think Oliver is the first person to question the Omega Pi ladies and their methods of capturing men. They dismiss his arguments as if it's the same old criticisms that they have been hearing for years. Oliver won't convince these women to change their methods. The tradition is too strong.
Are the wax models sex toys too? Or are they just souvenirs? Since they are the same size as the actuall person, they could also be used as a toy. You lose Oliver, now you can use his wax version. Oliver will definately be popular since he was the one to evade them and cause a frenzy in the house. All the girls know about Oliver, while most guys are only known to a few.
Oliver got a similar attitude to me when Sersei just smiled at him on her bed. She is goergeus. If you were to be used as a sex toy, this Omega Pi house is the place to be. It's amazing becuase Oliver is completely aware of what is going to happen to him for the next few days but he still had a moment where he could admire Sersei's body before she uses it against him.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Right now I know a certain Tom who wishes he was an Oliver right about now. Sersei has had to wait and think of all the things she wanted to do with her little prize. Now the wait is over....
[Report This]Date: August 28 2017 9:42 PM Title: Sersei Claims her Prize
Ya know, from a certain stand point these psychos are freakin hilarious. It’s like the Addams family played straight. Just when you can’t imagine them being more vile...they show you that you can’t imagine enough.
I find myself wondering how Edith know’s about Sersi’s visit to Grandma. Is Sersi going to eventually be bothered that Edith is checking up on her? Is grandma so cowed she just informs on herself?
The thing with the wax mold was creepy enough without the "this one will be very popular" comment. What? They collect and trade them? "I'll give you three Bears for an Oliver." "No way."
Weasel bait is in full greedy mode. She who wants has gotten what I really hoped she’d never get to enjoy....did I mention I hate her? I hope Oliver picked up some nasty skin condition from that damn jar of cream and Sersi itches for the rest of miserable existence. Maybe warts.
In spite of whatever happens next, Oliver has been awesome. And I for one, have faith he will continue to be. Up to know, he has been able to be somewhat uncompromising. But compromise and ruthlessness can go hand in hand. Now that he know’s there is no reason to hold back, what will our boy scout come up with?
I really need to see what happens next. This just gets more and more intense Duggernaut. Thanks.
pix
Author's Response:
Thought you might enjoy the continued defiance and the never give in attitude. He's knows he's up against it and refuses to buckle, the old bend but don't break mentality. Should be fun.
Date: August 28 2017 9:14 PM Title: Sersei Claims her Prize
As much as I love Oliver calling the monsters out and asking them the hard questions, I wish he’d push a little more to the real point. How many deaths is Edith responsible for? If I remember correctly, she was one of the founders of the Omegas. That makes every son taken blood on her hands. Of course, Oliver doesn’t know the details of her life, how old she really is, but I’d still like for him to call her out. How many sons have you taken, harvested and whose lives have ended at your hands? Murderers.
I’m glad to see Oliver thinking big picture. He has to make the best of a bad situation. Maybe cozying up to Sersei will extend his life a little. It will be interesting to see his plan take shape. Now for the update on Cam and his struggles and of course the recovering Stan as he regroups.
So, finally mention of the wax impression and it’s use. While Oliver speculates what it’s use may be for and recollects his discovery in Vesper’s office of the dozens of molds with the names of young men. Vesper tells us that Oliver’s mold will be popular. So they are not only a remembrance of the “harvest” of the poor victim, they are a collectable for the sisters. Maybe to become a pendent for a necklace, ear rings or an ornament of sorts. Sick and twisted, especially after the death of the victim.
God, I love this stuff!!
Author's Response:
While this is still new to Oliver we know these women have been practicing these rituals for a long long time. He isbstruggling to find purpose and a path to freedom while staring death in the eye. Next chapter Stan.
Date: August 28 2017 4:29 PM Title: A Test of Wills
Samantha tried to run away with Charlie. What she completely against what the sisterhood was doing, or did she just make an exception for that one man?
Samantha went to swoons over the years. Did she really believe in what she was doing, or did the sisterhood scare her into submission?
The magic affected Oliver, perhaps making him to Omega Pi what Paul Atreides and Leto II were to the Bene Gesserit. However, there hasn't been any mentioned of latent supernormal abilities. So in what way could Oliver be different?
Author's Response:
You make a couple of very interesting assertions - yes he was in utero during a swoon, and you're right, we've not seen anything of power from him...
Love the Dune reference - kwisatz haderach, hmmm
Date: August 25 2017 9:27 PM Title: A Test of Wills
Let's hope that Edith doesn't take Oliver's response "stick it in your ass" literally. That perspective might not be exactly what he had in mind...
Author's Response:
Right! Perhaps not the wisest epithet to hurl at a giant sized woman
[Report This]Date: August 24 2017 6:30 AM Title: A Test of Wills
I have to say that I like that Oliver thought of Cam, but this raises a most important question.
Does Edith’s story about Samantha confirm Cery’s story?
Not really. Again, all that is required is for Cerys to be privy to all this drama. And it doesn’t seem all that hard for her to be able to find out.
What good is it making an example of someone if nobody knows the story?
Cery’s knows the tale and used this knowledge when she “storied” Oliver and Cam.
And Samantha’s little man comments as she say's good bye to Oliver and thoughts about how Oliver was never her’s....as she’s on her way to feed on some poor soul...sure don’t inspire me to invest a lot of faith or hope in her. Maybe at one point she was worth putting your hopes on, but no more.
If Edith is telling the truth.
She said they usually let the fathers go...but the older / younger sibling question puts that in doubt. Cam had no memories, but had some photos. That seems to put a lie to her version of things.
Maybe she said that so that Oliver would believe that they would let Stan go.
Look how they fell on Stan when they thought they had a shot at him. They even knew he was with Samantha. Yet they were all ready to do something.
No, Edith is lying through her fangs and every guy in orbit about one these vile things is fair game.
Dang, Duggernaut. I think you’ve made me a little untrusting. Thanks again for your awesome work.
pix
Author's Response:
Pix please... these things have been doing this for how long? They certainly wouldn't let a little thing lime the truth get in the way. As for Cam pictures they could very well be the ones that came with the frame something to console a young fatherless child destined for the feeding trough at the Omega house. Regardless of the truth, right now Oliver is in a heap of trouble...😯
Date: August 24 2017 6:23 AM Title: A Test of Wills
Prediction: Samantha went against the sisterhood for love, and Oliver was influenced by the magic.
Author's Response:
Very astute and very accurate
[Report This]Date: August 24 2017 1:33 AM Title: A Test of Wills
awesome! Keep up the good work! Really loving how this is unfolding. I anticipate this story the most, more than any other one that gets regular updates.
Author's Response:
We'll thank you Captain i hope i am able to keep delivering an entertaining story!
[Report This]Date: August 24 2017 1:11 AM Title: A Test of Wills
Back to back amazing chapters! This one wasn't as plot defining as the last one, but it was surely entertaining.
This was the first time I even considered Edith Froth to be sexy. I never imagined her hot, just powerful and these ladies needed a leader who had more brains than beauty. But I guess Mrs Frost has the charm still in her.
I mean, the way she described taking Charlie and using him was awesome and I love it when they detail the moments as they enjoyed it. That was sexually cruel to Oliver, especially how she compared his dad's love as to Oliver's love to Sersei.
Vesper. She still is mysterious to me. How old is she? She is a milf like Mrs. Frost right? I hope so. We don't even know much about Vesper. I thought she was maybe Sersei hot, not Brooklyn hot. If Mrs Frost is that high on Vesper, I'm almost desperate to see her play with Oliver. She can flirt about his new "job" for her. He can do other things than help out her shop.
Looking at those options that Edith gave, the smother one is most likely, also it's the most sexy. Question is, which body part will they smother Oliver with?
That backstory was deep. Surprisingly made sense. They just capture and shrink the dudes that fuck their Omega Pi sisters. Then, they shrink the boys that result from that pregnancy. With each sister getting a child, the father and the son are gifts for the women.
Seriously, where do I sign up to fuck a hot girl, then shrink to be fucked by a bunch of hot girls that are also giantess and some are also smoking milfs. Then they never let you leave (except Cerys, ahem). A shrunken life in this house is the dream.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
If only... given the effects of taking the boys life energy it is hard to guess ages. In my mind Vesper is indeed that milf age and very attractive. You are right in that we've sort of set Brooklynn as the pinnacle for hotness with others slightly less than. Edith may be very old but she definitely knows how to play. Physically cruel is one thing but psychologically screwing Oliver's mind took it to another level. I already know if there was an address for their house you would camp out on their front lawn. 🤗
Date: August 23 2017 11:41 PM Title: A Test of Wills
Damned Omega bitches... You gotta love Oliver's resolve against overwhelming odds as he stands firm against the sadistic monsters. He calls them out for what they truly are. Unfortunately, as the hag said, she could torture him in any of a number of ways... tearing him slowly apart... a clothes iron... acid... crushing body parts with a pair of pliers… not good. As others have said, I don't think she will do these things... even if Oliver resists. I love Oliver calling the bitches out. The sisters have become so numb to what they do that they see nothing wrong with any of their crimes because in their eyes, their victims are never really people, they are a sacrifice yet to be made, an offering to whatever pagan deity they blindly worship and the life energy the sisters need to perpetuate the deception.
Pix brings up a great point that I hadn’t previously considered. Those sisters with one child have a first born male and the mother stops there with no other offspring. Where the first born is female as in the case of Sersei or Harmony, the brothers are a couple of years younger than their sisters. Given the dislike Edith has for (normally sized) Men in the lives of the sisters, this must mean that the siblings have different fathers who may have met the same end as Charlie.
I want to second the point made by a prior review... This story works so well because we genuinely care about the protagonists. Cam, Oliver and Stan are good, likeable people that have become victims to the most loathsome, Satan like creatures imaginable. They take on a pleasing form to lure in their prey. Their victims unaware of the smoke and mirrors until it is too late. There must be some way of taking this sick operation down. It’s up to Oliver to stay strong to protect and give a chance to Stan. In turn, Stan, Deacon and company (Samantha?) must put a plan together. If Stan has a heart to heart with Samantha, she might spill the Omega beans (as crazy as the story would sound). I could see a determined and armed Stan make his way back into the Omega house to take down Edith. Not that I condone violence, but exceptions sometimes need to be made…
Author's Response:
After that surgically precise delivery of Oliver's father's fate our boy stayed true and yep called them out on their BS. The question can he stay strong while they have their way with him? Or will he escape again and seek revenge on Cerys? Oliver has proven himself a challenge to these efficient killing machines. A few questions answered but still so many others asked. 🤔
[Report This]Date: August 23 2017 8:14 PM Title: A Test of Wills
Yeah! Old Frosty could do all those things. But, then again, that would deny the girls of the sorority their turn at Oliver. And, for some reason, I don't think even the grand-dame of Omega Pi can autocratically change her mind without repercussion from whatever higher power they venerate!
Author's Response:
Perhaps. She just decreed a change in the order of the claim at a whim though you raise an I teresykmg point. If Edith is number 2, who does she answer to?
[Report This]Date: August 23 2017 7:02 PM Title: A Test of Wills
I've been following this story for a while now, and I just realized I haven't reviewed! I made an account just for you ;).
First of all, I'd like to congratulate you for writing an absolute fucking masterpiece. This story is so goddamn good it gives me hope for the GTS fandom. The way you've managed to take an idea and give it a twist to make it feel original is well executed. You've started off on the right foot by making the characters ACTUALLY likable and ACTUALLY realistic. Props for that, too many stories have shit for plot, shit for characters. And the thing about that is, it prevents the reader from CARING about the character. You made me feel awful when Cam was eaten (please let him be alive somehow) because he is a likable, fun, realistic character. These characters feel real, and even though the situation you've put them in is purely fantasy, how they deal with it is realistic. Your main character, Oliver, started out a little bit bland but you fleshed him out easily with his guts, fighting skills, and also by showing his character through dialogue instead of text. It makes me want to see what he will do next and if he will survive. And god, you made these hot girls whom I was excited to see get in on some GTS action, EVIL as hell. It actually disgusted me when Brooklyn was fucking Cam, a feeling I haven't felt before from a GTS scene of that type.
All in all, you've set up an amazing base plot and lovable, and hatable, characters. I can't wait to see where you'll go with this story. Props for sticking with it this far and not leaving it unfinished, a story like this deserves an amazing ending. I would love to see an Attack on Titan like scene where Oliver uses his razor blade to fuck a chick up. It certainly wouldn't be out of character. In any case, thank you for giving me an amazing read!
Author's Response:
Thank you very much not only for taking the time to read this slowly unfolding drama but also for taking the time to make an account and share a review. I am humbled by your kind words of praise. I guess I write what I like and that means characters I can invest in either love or hate. Evolving characters under stressful situations makes me think what would I do if this shit was happening for real, some crack (Cam) and others excel. Yes these girls are smoking hot but oh so predatory and that's their lure to draw their quarry in. I think I'm going to have to stick with one until the end. Thanks again👍
[Report This]Date: August 23 2017 6:30 PM Title: A Test of Wills
Wow, did not see that coming.
So the dad’s usually live? Wait, do Cam and Sersi have the same father? Do Linus and Harmony?
Okay, I am totally with Oliver now, not that I wasn’t before. He delivers. This is the best stuff I’ve read. His defiance is freakin’ awesome! If the psycho harpies smash him in the next chapter, it’ll still be his victory.
And I'm kinda thinkin there aren't enough kinds of cancer to wish on Vesper.
You have really shown how awesome SM fiction can be Duggernaut. Thanks for raising the bar.
pix
Author's Response:
Maybe they live or maybe it's just a gaff to pull Oliver into revealing information. We know how that worked out for Cam... Oliver has definitely revealed he has a set of BALLS on him you didn't see early in the story. Thanks again for the praise!
Date: August 19 2017 2:58 PM Title: The Cost of Betrayal
Duggernaut,
In your last response, you stated that “I honestly haven't mapped the story out that far ahead”. That reply got me wondering. What inspires you, the author regarding the direction of the story? Is it solely your ideas and personal inspiration that strike you or have you, on occasion, been influenced by our critiques and suggestions? Have we influenced you in deciding the direction of and possibly even the ultimate outcome of the story?
Author's Response:
Hey Shrink it is sometimes a mixture of the two that transforms the narrative. Great reviewers lime yourself offer a different perspective than I sometimes equated or accounted for. There also times when reviewers are amazingly insightful and this opens the way to other poentialities I have not considered. Other times I know the end but not the between parts. So in a nutshell yes sometimes reviewers influence me. :)
[Report This]Date: August 19 2017 10:48 AM Title: The Cost of Betrayal
So, time for a serious literary examination of the story of our friend Cam. I liked Cam a lot. But lets look at his tale in terms of literary themes.
Cam’s story is one of consumption. He is a victim of first his own lust. He was consumed by his desire for Brooklyn. The trap set for him was powered by this weakness. From this stand point he served himself up, he made himself prey. It was joyous and it was natural,but the Megs made it sinister and horrific.
Once he was in their clutches, (symbolically) they fed on him. Consumed his essence, lessened him in rather obvious ways. But as they fed on him....they grew beautiful and powerful. They gained, he lost. A parasitic relationship.
Once literally in their clutches he decides to live. This costs him. He is silently humiliated and abused. So much is taken from him; dignity, perspective, hope. All eaten up to fuel the meg’s little games. I know we made jokes about “the Brooklyn diet,” but that was the case. He got more of her inside him than he wanted. And he was starving. There is nothing these creatures have to offer. Once you are in there proximity there is nothing for you. The have nothing to offer. They are hollow and empty, nourishing neither your body nor your soul.
Finally, Cerys feeds on him...he disappears....there is nothing left. If Oliver dies he will not even be a memory.
It not just demonstrates their evil...how they are parasites. It gives them an iconography. In the last millenia the term consumption was applied to any wasting disease. Any disease that consumed the body. In the 19th century the term settled on tuberculosis solely. The implication is that they are a virus...a disease of our reality.
Cam was a great character, but his sad tale brings the horror into focus. Would you care as much if all this befell Bear? I know I wouldn’t. The contrast might be more dramatic, but who really engages with someone like him?
Sometimes great stories have sad endings, Cam’s is one of those it seems. But, it was so worth reading. So smart and so captivating.
Thank you Duggernaut and goodbye Cam. Great work. Great reading.
pix
Author's Response:
Thanks for the great review and take on how Cams role in this whole affair played out thus far. You're right would we care if the omega girls were selecting straight up sun bag add holes? No. Their villianry is insidious Venus man traps offering a sweet lure and rewarding temptation with misery. Very nice analysis. Thanks Pix
[Report This]Date: August 18 2017 4:56 PM Title: The Cost of Betrayal
Fantastic chapter! This was plot twisting! Very key to the story! We got Brooklyn mad at Cerys, Frost has Oliver, Stan is now a witness, Brooklyn gets time with Oliver, Harmony is going to arrive sooner than later, and of course, Oliver's escape comes to an end. He is captured.
Brooklyn is so happy that she now gets Oliver. She wanted him also with Cameron when they met at normal size. Now she gets her wish, especially since Brooklyn didn't even get a band on Oliver in the first place.
Man, if only Cerys concealed Oliver just enough so Brooklyn thought it was Cam. Well, I guess Brooklyn gets Oliver anyway so her fun will continue.
I'm pretty sure Cerys is going to throw up Cam soon. She just needed a convincing audience and boy, Oliver sure helped her convince the other ladies.
Word of the day from this chapter: Jubilation.
With Vesper flirting around and such, you would think she is a fine woman who would love some time with Oliver. Even her words are sexy which just makes me anxious for some time alone with her. They should not tell Sersei they found Oliver and let Vesper have him for a day or two.
Did Edith Frost really call Cerys a "stupid silly girl?" This name calling feels out of place in Frosts character. I can see Frost belittling the other girls but I don't agree with this choice of words.
We don't know much of Stan so it would be interesting to see Vesper and Frost pull strings at him. I hope Oliver doesn't connect Deacon to Stan. There needs to be some hope left.
Cerys is actually a genius. She is the Snape from Harry Potter in this story. We all want to hate her, but in the end she will make us cheer for her. She is going to save Cam while they all think he died. Then she will save Oliver. How? Notice how Frost gave the last day to Cerys. This is a sign that Duggernaut is going to make Oliver go through Sersei, Brooklyn, Allie, Harmony and finally when he thinks he will die with Cerys, we end the parade with an amazing escape with Cerys help. It's the ultimate finale! This whole "Cerys is a monster" is just a cover up. When tinies disappear in Cerys possession, it's not becuase she swallows them, it's becuase she releases them! She sets them free and the whole Omega squad thinks she ate them! It's the perfect decoy and every tiny she "eats" the better her disguise works. Also, now Oliver has this long list of woman ready to use him. When he believes all hope is lost and that he thinks he might die, he finds an escape, a solution and stays alive to tell the tale of what's it's like being "The Property or Omega Pi". Roll Credits.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Yur response was almost as long as the update! Great stuff. This chapter took us in a whole bunch of different directions and is still so very early in Oliver's capture/surrender. You raise an interesting analysis but...what if Cerys is the end of the line for Oliver? What is she isn't secretly helping the tinies? I honestly haven't mapped the story out that far ahead. Maybe the story ends with Cerys gulping him down as the sister turn their attention to say Deacon? So many ways to go. On the other hand...Cerys may be on the level and now all she can do is wait as the girls youve listed take their turns with him. What will he be lime after running that gauntlet? What happened to Stan? This was a chapter full of more questions than answers.
Date: August 18 2017 2:27 PM Title: The Cost of Betrayal
I'd say "Both!" As in; it's living up to its evil nature.
Author's Response:
Hmm nicely played
Date: August 17 2017 8:38 PM Title: The Cost of Betrayal
Duggernaut... As much as I love reading your wonderful work, I miss the feedback from you regarding our chapter reviews. Hope that you will have to time to add your comments again soon... take care...
Author's Response:
Hey Shrink you are absolutely right and I apologize for not responding sooner. Every review is a gift and while I have been incredibly busy there are no excuses to not reply to the people that have taken the time and effort to read and review. It is wonderfulnhave my writing supported so I will .ale the time to respond. Thanks again for the wake up call.