Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2017 4:17 PM Title: Suspicious Minds

Hold up. Golden state? Bakersfield? We in Cali?!! Hmm..... Maybe I should visit this university too. :)

I would love to visit Brooklyn as well and get a chance to at least look at her. Lol, I should copy Oliver's outfit and go to this house and maybe they will shrink me down thinking I was him.

Oh man! What if the Omega Pi girls know I'm reading about them and swoop by my house and capture me?!! That...actually sounds exciting. By adding these real names and cities, I feel like this story is real and this adds to it.

Stan got a code with his dad. Hmm. Now that I think of it, I don't have a code with my dad. I kind of want to make one now.

What if Stan drops by my house and I join him!! Of course, I don't know what he looks like, but that doesn't matter. We going to the Omega Pi house! Field trip to shrinking heaven!

This chapter opens another door to the story. Stan is in the picture and I love how relaxed he was with the situation and he gradually gets suspicious of the whole ordeal. Will Stan pretend to be Deacon's Dad so the girls will ignore him? Or will Stan go head to head with the Omega Pi girls? If thegirls know who he is, then they will call Samantha back to calm her husband down.

Imagine Stan walks in the Omega Pi house and Oliver spots him. Oliver would be confused as hell and might even fear for him becuase ofwhat these girls are capable of.

I like how Stan just doesn't seem to give a shit and is charging straight into this mess while Deacon is slowly but cautiously planning stuff out. Two different roles for two different guys.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Lol, why do i think you would be more than willing to mow the girls' lawn if it might you might get close to some of their action. Which now raises the question - Who is looking after their grounds? Hmm. interesting notion.

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2017 11:34 AM Title: Suspicious Minds

Stan to the rescue!  We hope.

I’m pretty good at sorting through mysteries, but I would have to say that I would never suspect Samantha.  Stan seems to be pretty good at observing patterns in his own life.  He might find Samantha’s drunken fit to be sufficiently out of character that he suspects something.  I really, really hope he does, but her betrayal is so massive, so inhuman, that it I would have a hard time looking at her.  Maybe if she doesn’t react in a believable manner to his concerns he’ll stop trusting her.  Maybe even find a way to pry further info out of her.  He might have to start gauging what she lies about, see if that gives him negative information that is useful. 
Of course, I’m personally hoping he gets to the part where he’s willing to let pigs chew on her to get information.  That’d be the proper response to her swinish character. 

Stan being so sexually candid with Oliver is really not that surprising, I have a friend whose step dad was full on crude.  Bought him porno when he was 10...heh...now he say’s he thinks he was just checking to see if he was gay.  I think Stan was trying to demystify sex, so Oliver wouldn’t be a sucker when he started seeing girls.  He didn’t quite manage that.  I’d say he was only a partial success,  but Oliver probably owes his status of fugitive over captive to this partial success.  Hopefully Stan’ll get a chance to make it up to him, where he fell short as a mentor. 

The first thing a successful adventurer/ detective needs to know is “get the hell away from Bakersfield.”

Really enjoying the build up Duggernaut.  Wheels are turning and it’s great.  Thanks for your contribution to the size community. 

pix

Author's Response:

Stan and Oliver have a dad/brother kind of relationship, but it's hard to say what 'little' things stan might have overlooked while oliver was growing up under Samantha's care. One thing we have learned is just how incredibly resourceful Oliver has proven to be.