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Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: June 09 2017 7:51 PM Title: Creamed

Great visual of Oliver slipping and sliding. While it's a good thing to be out of a giant sized jar of face cream, the challenge remains the most basic... Survival. Brooklynn will eventually return to her room and will notice the piece of chicken is gone. If she hasn't forgotten about Cam's meal, she will know Oliver is in the room and an all out search will commence.  Our hero needs to find a new hiding place and do it quickly.  I'm looking forward to seeing how Deacon interacts with Brooklynn and whether Cady accompanies him to his room. That would be interesting...



Author's Response:

Perpetual peril to survive for Ol;iver and you're right, how will Deacon react one on one with the uber hot Brooklynn. Oh wait, I'm uploading that chapter right now!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 09 2017 5:53 AM Title: Creamed

Oliver; going ninja?

I love it! :-D

Author's Response:

min-ninja hmm? How about budding bank robber - "Nobody move, this is a stick up!"

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 07 2017 7:35 PM Title: Creamed

I have to congratulate Oliver for his creativity. I wouldn't last a few hours in his situation. Either, I fuck up and get myself caught, or I get seduced by some girl and walk to her exposing myself.

Brooklyn getting sloppy, leaving a piece of chicken on the floor. That piece was for Cam, right? How fortunate that Oliver found it. I'm not worried about Cam because he is with Brooklyn and she wants him to keep his strength. Oliver has no support so he needs every ounce of food he can get.

Well, Brooklyn will be gone for some time. Oliver has time to test the tape and also maybe find future hiding places. Personally, I would hide by the bed. Free entertainment over there. The desk overs nothing but maybe alone time. I guess it's perfect for him Oliver can use that time to plan out his next move.

I'm really curious about the next chapter which I believe will be Brooklyn meeting Deacon again. I can't wait to see Deacon's eyes melt when she shows up in his room! Imagine Deacon looking from his bed to Brooklyn and then back to his bed. Of course Brooklyn has Cam, but I bet she wouldn't hesitate to use her charm to seduce Deacon.

However, I hope Deacon stays focused as well and plays coy when Brooklyn is trying to interrogate him. Deacon should have his guard up but I'm sure he would mind Brooklyn getting close to him.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

As sweet as Brooklynn is, never forget she in a fully fledged sister of Omega Pi while poor Deacon is deer caught in her headlights

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 07 2017 5:25 PM Title: Creamed

Considering how none of the girls can keep their hands off that damn jar, it's gonna be tough to detect that Oliver has been there...."Oh look, little spots...which one of you...?"

Human fly Oliver....when they start making action figures for this story, that's gonna have to be one.  I love the tape idea...plus the elasic band can make a swing seat sort of thing.

Great to see Oliver being resourceful.  This is so damn fun, Duggernaut.

Thanks.

pix



Author's Response:

The net is drawing tighter on our pint sized protagonist so he will have to 'dig deep' to find new and novel places to hide...

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