Date: May 30 2017 9:19 AM Title: A Fly in the Ointment
Poor Cam... You have to wonder if he's ever going to get something in his belly besides Brooklyn's secretions. Call it the Omega diet. Lose that stubborn belly fat and alot more...my favorite aspect of this tale is the way the author enables me to visualize and immerse myself in the descriptions. It just leaves me wanting more. Go Oliver... Save Cam...
Author's Response:
Thanks Shrinkmeister Cam's ordeal isn't quite finished yet though...
[Report This]Date: May 29 2017 9:05 PM Title: A Fly in the Ointment
I love that title. While I hate it when a fly gets stuck on soemthing sticky, especially like a beverage or soemthing, I could see how helpless they are trying to escape. It helped me get a good vision about Oliver in the cream.
Brooklyn took a big whif of Oliver and the cream. Imagine if Oliver was inside a lollipop and Brooklyn tried to get a taste. That's the next step.
What I like about unaware, is the chance that they could be caught at any moment. The problem with stories that are only unaware, is that since I know the tiny won't be caught, it ruins the suspense. However, this scene is frightenly awesome becuase any moment Oliver could be spotted.
Wow! Brooklyn left Cam on the bed alone for a moment! If I was Oliver, I would have snuck over to Cam, undress him and put his clothes on me, and then I would hide Cam under the pillow or soemthing with my clothes. Then, when Brooklyn comes back, I would lie on the bed, pretending to be Cam, and she probably would mistake me for Cam and put me inside her pants! If there was a tiny Tom, he would do that.
After that fiasco, I think Oliver should choose a new hiding place. Maybe by Brooklyn's bedside so he can get a nice view of the action. :)
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Right! How long can Oliver's luck hold? I bet right about now Oliver was wishing there was a tiny Tom in this story.
[Report This]Date: May 29 2017 5:49 PM Title: A Fly in the Ointment
To paraphrase a certain intimate apparel commercial from the 1970's:
"Cameron makes Brooklynn feel like she ain't wearing nothin' (under all)."
Author's Response:
How about, "You're soaking in it?"
[Report This]Date: May 29 2017 5:29 PM Title: A Fly in the Ointment
Holy crap!
My heart was in my throat when he couldn't open that dang lid!
It kind of amazes me how Oliver is reacting to the 'Megs like we did at first, disbelief, asking why....but it's only been a bit. He'll figure them out soon enough. At least as much as you can something that only looks like a human being.
It kind of amuses me that they call them “littles.” I wonder how many of them read the children’s series? Maybe go along girl did. That’s why she feels something. Don’t worry, it’ll pass.
There is a certain irony at work in the name too. Here are these creatures with tiny, shriveled souls calling Oliver “little.” He has proven himself to be more honorable, more intelligent, more resourceful, more courageous, more compassionate (not hard in this case) and just an all around bigger guy than any of them.
I really wonder if he’ll actually be able to rescue Cam. I would guess no. Still, Cam is close to the end of his rope. Maybe if Oliver can just offer him some hope, that might give him strength. It might help him to have a light at the Brooklyn Tunnel. If he has hope he might to make it to a rescue.
I think we're all going "Hang in there pal."
Another great bit of suspense Duggernaut. Love this!
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Author's Response:
Again we revisit the nature vs nurture aspect of the Omegas. We're they born this way or were they created and molded by their environment? Is there hope of redemption or is vanity so deeply.imprinted in the psyches? I agree about the irony though.