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Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 16 2017 4:50 AM Title: A Deacon of Hope

     Deacon does not come off as a potential big help in this bit, but c’mon....think about where he thinks Oliver is.  Nice, corner room at the ‘Meg house,  weasel bait has her head on his chest, they’re both sweaty and satisfied.  He doesn’t want to poke into that. 

     His Brooklyn-thing could be a huge achilles’ heel, depends on if he gets suspicious before he runs into her again. His fumbling with the poorly thought out code is so natural, but not a sign he’s going to mess it up.  Not really a code btw, it’s a sign/ counter sign type thing.

     I too am suspicious of the new girl...but that’s the nature of the story.  The name sets off alarms, but that weird “time/space defying, alpha predition” thing from the other story, doesn’t seem to be an aspect of this one.  Plus, c’mon, how would they know he’d go get breakfast there?  And it was Deacon who initiated contact.  Though, we have all theorized that he’s a target, because he’s been assigned “that room.”  But maybe,  that room gets assigned a non-target when the ‘Megs have done their “business” to cover up the evidence and muddy the waters.  Imagine you’re working a missing persons case, you’ve gotten to the vic’s place.  You run into a guy there who say’s “no, this is my room.”  It looks like whoever put you on this is confused or at least it looks like you have no crime scene. 
     Odds are they were intending to clear out Oliver’s stuff and get a new roomie for Deke’ asap.  But this lockdown business has their priorities elsewhere. 
    Though, if he comes back from his date and Oliver’s stuff is cleared out.  I would consider that pretty solid evidence that Cady is on the wrong side.  However, if she isn’t and he brings up the ‘Megs, she might give us a local perspective on them.  Remember the two girls that Oliver saw giving the unnamed ‘Megs some distance?  From when he was first exploring the campus?  She might be able to give us a hint as to how the locals see them.  Again, if she’s not one of “them.”

     God!  Who knew paranoia could be so much fun?  (I mean, that hasn’t played the RPG.) 

This is great Duggernaut.  Even very naturalistic, little scenes like this send our brains off in all kinds of directions and into all kinds of speculations.  It really shows what great world you’ve created and what an intriguing story you’ve given us.  Thanks bunches.

Peace

pix



Author's Response:

You are suspicious of any girl now because of how amorally ruthless they are in prusuit of their own self serving interests. Not sure what the future holds for Deacon, We shall see.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 11:15 PM Title: A Deacon of Hope

I feel for Deacon. I also met a girl who shows up at this once diner to eat all the time. I wait in the same spot for her, sometimes she shows up and soemtjiems she doesn't. When she does, I enjoy talking to her and I treasure those moments so much that I look forward to it every day. Good times.

As for the text with Oliver, I think Deacon will notice the lack of a code present and decide to show up at the Omega Pi house.

This girl definately will give Deacon a wristband. She seems to like him and is playful enough to be an Omega Pi girl.

I didn't know Deacon could play. Well, after meeting Brooklyn and now Candence, I guess he is already a player. (Get it?) :)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

But is he a player getting played?

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 7:05 PM Title: A Deacon of Hope

That was pretty slick for Deacon.  I don't recall Cadence being an Omega, but who knows. She did seem awfully friendly for a sister, but remember, they know who he is.  Could this move be a set up to pull Deacon in?  Forgoe the whole three pink bands thing and just take care of business and dispose of the suspicious roommate. Hopefully this is not the case. 



Author's Response:

Thats the thing. We just know who might be affiliated with a sorority of shrinkers! The lads are such a severe disadvantage which is one of the reasons they've managed to keep this up for so long.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 6:49 PM Title: A Deacon of Hope

OK! Serious, now: I don't see Deacon helping Oliver win this duel of wits. I mean, aside from being distracted by thoughts of Brooklynn, Oliver (being shrunken and naked) certainly doesn't have his own cellphone anywhere on him! And then, of course, there's Cady, who just might be another strategically placed sister of Omega Pi.

Author's Response:

The odds do seem somewhat stacked against the lads

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2017 6:45 PM Title: A Deacon of Hope

Next up?

Chapter 61: "Singing With Cadence"

[Oh, come on! This pun was a natural.]

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