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Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2017 10:43 AM Title: Luck Be a Lady Tonight

The bit about thinking of water after eating something salty.  That was great, subtly turning the pressure up on the survival front.

As far as resource gathering goes, Melody the slob might be his best friend right now.  Until someone else makes the same observation.   

Oh, editing note, at one point you call Bear a football “the little football wanted none of it”, which may be wrong, but seems so appropriate I had to laugh.  Freudian slip?

It’s kind of hard to feel sorry for guy like Bear.  In many ways he is like the ‘Megs.  Pushy and selfish.  So I don’t mind if Oliver doen’t go out of his way to help him.  Though it is clearly the right thing to do.   (As long as it makes sense tactically.)  But, it’s me, if i have to choose between saving Bear and the cows getting theirs: WEASELS!

This veneer of childishness has me thinking of Harmony.  How can she be so ignorant of all this? (I will NOT use the term innocent.)  She must be the type of girl who never asked “Where’s Daddy?”  Or maybe she still believes dad is still on a secret mission for the CIA in upper Mongolia.   We’ve only really seen inside “families” that have sons....it could be that as long as the wife throws girls you’re okay....but make a boy and >GAK<

Cool scene Duggernaut.  Thanks for the amazing.

Pix

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2017 9:00 PM Title: Luck Be a Lady Tonight

Something tells me this particular Melody is going to be more of a round.*


*Like "Row, Row, Row Your Boat." Only with a bigger, more streamlined vessel. ;-)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2017 8:23 PM Title: Luck Be a Lady Tonight

Wow! That is hot. Getting a free preview of porn without paying anything. In addition, he gets to watch a whole night of porn. For free!

The best part is that Oliver is learning that he is next. If that was me, this would be super exciting! Being helpless and at Sersei's mercy for hours and much more!

While this is undoubtedly erotic, I still would enjoy Oliver to somehow become normal size before he gets found and then confronts Sersei and asks her instantly "Were you planning on shoving me in your vagina?" I can't help but imagine Sersei blushing and trying to create a response. Lol!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

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