Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2017 5:00 PM Title: Oliver's New Roomie

In the worst light, Oliver looks like a good friend. As long as it's not partly-cloudy or something. He's literally pulling his pud while forgetting important clues. Phone call from NotCal anybody?

But first a little about me. I learned to read with the Encyclopedia Brown Mysteries. Sherlock Holmes? Read'em, not fair play mysteries. Star Wars came along and broadened my tastes, but mysteries were my go-to read. Later I had to special order Sexual Homocide: Patterns and Motives by Bob Ressler because my damn book store didn't just carry the damn thing. First season of Monk..fair play, I could solve them before the credits ran. My copy of the FBI Crime Classification Manual is looking pretty rough theses days.

It's frustrating for me to see Oliver with a real mystery on his hands and just kind of, well, not realizing it. See Oliver doesn't think like me. And yes, again, it's frustrating.

But that's the power of truly excellent writing.

Duggernaut has created characters that draw you in. Even when you don't agree with their priorities. When Jamie Lee Curtis hides in the closet (even though you're screaming “NO”) you don't get up and leave the theater, you're with her. You care. That's where we are with Oliver. Even when we're saying “get your head out of your ass” we still care about him. We never write him off.

And it's all due to Duggernaut's genius. There's not a lot of authors (even pros) who can create something both frustrating and satisfying as story.

 

On the chapter, the fact that Oliver isn't using the fresh set of eyes has me of two minds. Part of me is thinking he should just say “Hey Deacon, friend of yours goes missing. Last seen in the company of people you're sure use roofies. You get a text from his number from someone not him. How worried are you?”

Deacon would probably say “Pretty worried.”

“Ah, but here's the rub. One of those people is his sister.” Oliver points out.

“Uh, Oliver. You don't roofie people you love.” Deacon says, not adding “dumbass.”

On the other hand, the kid might not be reliable. He might blab to every 'mega twat he sees about Oliver's suspicions. Just trying to get their attention.

So, we have a bit of an impasse with the new guy. Just the kind of situation that is making this story so compelling.

 

Thanks again for sharing your amazing work with us, Duggernaut.

 

Peace,

 

PixL8Ed

Author's Response:

Hey PixL8Ed, thanks for the glowing review. I'm a extremely pleased this tale has you shaking with frustration knowing the fate that awaits oliver and the string of clue he has blissfully overlooked. Is there enough to overcome his enflamed blood or does this little lamb allow himself to be led to the slaughter? Next chapter will shed some light on his frame of mind as the noose tightens.  :)

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20 2017 7:27 PM Title: Oliver's New Roomie

Heh! Oliver's wild guess is a lot closer to the truth than he thinks. As for Deacon? His being adopted makes me wonder if Omega Pi is getting a little more cold-blooded. Shrinking young men they think will _never_ be missed!

Author's Response:

It just might be that insidious, though adoptive records and screening are usually very thorough...but who knows who might be highly placed inside the department responsible for adoptions? If she's an Omega Pi, they just got a whole lot more sinister.