Date: January 08 2017 6:29 PM Title: A Candle in the Wind
Duggernaut...I would really love to see the description of the shrinking from the perspective of the Omegas... The plans being made by the sisters and of course, the act itself as they all gather around Bear, proceed with the ritual and observe the change in size as he is reduced to toy size...
Author's Response:
Hmm, maybe a chpater solely from Sersei's perspective as Bear Briar is thus reduced and her thoughts about all of the things she might be able to do once she has Oliver. No promises, but we shall see :)
[Report This]Date: January 08 2017 10:39 AM Title: A Candle in the Wind
I think what makes Duggernaut stand out are the conversations and dialogue. I mean, the kid's thoughts were very realistic. You make this kid seem like a kid, and not some adult doing stupid things like spilling food or stuff. He complains about silly stuff like the band color which is exactly what a kid would say! Amazing.
Once again, Vesper stuns again as usual. Love how she keeps getting into her personal space.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I do enjoy witty dialogue between characters and try to make it quasi-authentic. LEts see what Oliver can uncover in Vesper's office...
Date: January 06 2017 5:45 AM Title: A Candle in the Wind
Hmmm more thoughts... Cam... No father... Oliver... No father... Aventus... No father.. is it possible that they also attended the same university, received pink wrist bands and became the play things of the Omegas? Were these men all the sons of Omega sisters? Lastly... Will Bear get to remain on the football team at 3 inches tall?
Author's Response:
Interesting observation. A lot easier to sacrifice a son without paternal interference some might say. Oliver did catch the fact Vesper knew his mother's first name. We also know Sersei's mother was an Omega. the question is will Oliver be able to assemble the pieces in time to prevent himself becoming Property of Omega Pi? :)
[Report This]Date: January 05 2017 11:42 PM Title: A Candle in the Wind
The build up of your stories are easily the best parts of them. Lovin this.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I think there is definitely a correlation to the build up portion of my stories as it is my favorite part to write. That and innuendo laden dialogue between someone who knows something and someone who has no clue.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2017 8:34 PM Title: A Candle in the Wind
It's probably the freshman girl who gave Bear his third bracelet. As it stands to reason that Melody, his girlfriend, gave him the first one! But, what really's starting to freak me out (suitably enough) is Vesper's not-too-subtle insistence that Oliver come along to witness it. Makes me wonder if Brooklynn is going to hand out Number Three, after all!
Author's Response:
Maybe...remember too Cam, Oliver, Bear, amnd a fourth uynnmaed but braceleted male were there for Cam's third bracelet.