Date: August 21 2016 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Welcome back, writer ;)
Very good story indeed. Because I'm not nearly as good as a critic as tomspeedy, I will not write a very long review. I will only say that it felt like some action was missing from the story and it was about to begin as it ended.
Thanks for writing!
Thanks for the input, and you're welcome. Actually, though, I planned it that way...
Thanks for reading, Meereten !
Date: August 20 2016 9:26 PM Title: Chapter 5
Midnight! Welcome back! I thought you were done with writing. Well, once a writer, always a writer.
I agree, I would love to see a part 5 for bob's experience. I loved that series so much!
Now back to this story. Is this a story? The best part was in the last few lines. A guy trapped in panties?!! Awesome! I just wish I can here Buddy's story on how he got there.
Why did Janie get so much action. I thought Jeanie was going to take the spotlight but she didn't do much, neither did Chloe or Samantha.
You could tell this tale was about Janie from the start. The way that she was horny meant that she was obviously the most eager to toy with Jack. I'm just wondering why the 17 yr old girl got all the fun. If she was a bit older, I would've enjoyed it a tad more, but that's just my preference.
How old are the other women? 20's? 18? 19? Do they have a hot mom who taught these girls their naughty ways? (I know I brought up the mother in law in Bob's experience, but I can't resist mentioning another mom that could appear.)
The first 2 chapter were a bit confusing as the plot seemed to jump from place to place. They were driving, saw chicks, car broke down, they were looking for signs? Then they went into this place next to a shop, fire trucks showed up, they cut into the line, Jeanie was there who sounded like she was over 60 years old. They get some shots. Next thing you know Buddy is gone from the story and Jack is in her purse somehow.
Everything before the house felt like a blur to me. However, everything in the house felt so clear and I loved how the sisters interacted with each other.
Chloe was my favorite. Any woman that reminds me of Catwoman gets a nod from me. I was hoping she did more than give a bath.
I also like the continuous action with Janie. It was nonstop fun and you can never tell what she was going to do. I wish more authors just had their giantesses did stuff to their tinies and went with it, rather than creating drama over who gets the tiny and stuff like that. Here, Janie played with him and did that for the rest of the story and I enjoyed that.
Overall, I think this felt more like a setup for another series rather than a stand alone story. Not much has happened, but the cliffhanger was just a 11/10 and I'm so excited if there is a sequel or something.
Speaking of sequels, I still prefer your bob's experience story over this and I would love that part 5 to that. I know you don't plan on it, but you got some good ideas in this short story that I would love to see in Bob's experience story.
Like your other stories, I will continue to follow this story and your next story that you decide to create in the future.
I can't wait for your next adventure!
Thank's Tom! I really appreciate the detailed review. I was wondering if the first page/chapter was a little bit too much, ...a bit too confusing; What I was trying to do, though, was the character development, story set-up, and the back-story, ...all at the same time. Enhancing the idea that our protagonists were drugged. Giving the reader a sense of how they were feeling too. I mean, they were drugged and shrunken down to six inches tall. The side-effects from something like that would most likely change a person's mental stability... and Drawing the reader into mix, as well, ...that was the idea, anyway...
Thank's again for taking the time to give me some feedback. ...and, as for Buddy's back-story, it might be coming out soon!
Date: August 20 2016 7:01 PM Title: Chapter 5
it's a great story, and it requires a continuation! Midnightwriter85, I have a question. You will writing "Bob's Ultimate Experience" ~ Part Five? I've been waiting for this..
I didn't consider writing a part 5 for B.U.E. Although, I did have some more ideas for Jeanie and her sisters! ;)