Date: October 03 2018 1:45 PM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special Edition Part 1
Wow you have put in a ton of additions to chapter 1. Honestly I haven't had a chance to read through it yet but it's definitely on my to do list. he he
Was wondering if you'd consider writing an epilogue of sorts which stands alone from the four stories about this Keepsake concoction while also tying them together? Possibly starting a year and a half after 'Housesitting with Bethany' where Bethany could have potentially gotten Linda a fantastic deal on a home with a giant property/yard area and no visible neighbors anywhere close unlike Linda's last primary residence. I think it would be neat if somehow Linda would have been heavily influenced by Bethany in that she has this entire community shrunken with their own tiny homes and other things to enhance their(the tinies) lives like: an area the size of table tennis on the floor with walls to keep them contained, also having the artificial grass and trees that Jesse was so fond of, but most of all some semblance of society like police officers to keep general order as well as the relative peace, doctor(s) to heal the sick/mend the wounded and a tiny train station for travel and normalcy but most importantly the people would have actual jobs aside from being Linda or Bethany's playthings. Jobs like construction crews, farmers etc. For me it could seriously be plausible to shrink down an Amish community(which includes animals) or possibly even Linda or Bethany could take out an ad in the newspaper saying they offer x amount of dollars for a social experiment study but be extremely vague about it. Maybe with Linda's lawyer connections she could make it seem like people were applying for some sort of Big Brother knock off show. I'd personally like to see some activities the tinies could do like play basketball on tiny courts or baseball would be neat shrunken down, volleyball and of course 'dancing' involving men and women for either giantesses amusement.
But most of all I'd like to see how the first three tinies relationships have changed since shrinking with not only the giantesses in this year and a halves time but with each other. Or maybe Samantha could potentially change that dynamic.(or her mom or Linda's friend who started this entire saga by texting Linda that her son was a stripper, maybe Linda would love to see her tiny?)
I'm sorry to just be throwing randomness at you like this. I really do appreciate you taking the time to not only write but replying to reviews. It really means a lot a I wish you got more reviews.
PS I never would have thought it was hard for you to write these stories. I wish I could give you some kind of inspiration and I hope to see you name pop up in the recently added section but if not that's fine. You've already given plenty to this community.
Yeah, a ton of additions to #1. I might do an epilogue, but first I would need to end Housesitting. HwB became difficult to write, I guess. Beth is a dangerous giantess and it's not very pleasant sometimes. Right now I'm considering undertaking a challenge, but unsure. I can imagine an entire story arc in about 10 minutes, but writing it out is not nearly as simple. I would have more here but I don't like doing short stories, I'm not good at them, they require discipline that I don't have. Glad to hear from you again! I had several different directions to take this at the end of HwB, now I don't know if I'll ever finish Housesitting. Let me think about your random idea tossings :) Something, somewhere has to fall into place at some point.
Date: September 25 2018 10:57 AM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special Edition Part 1
This is an absolute masterpiece! Every aspect of your story writing is perfect. Would you please check out my challenge? I appreciate that you may be busy with other ventures however, it may be something that inspires you. Keep up the amazing work!
Thank you for your kind words. I am a bit surprised anyone likes this because of how densely I have written it. Your challenge is intriguing. I am thinking about it, but I have to admit that writing really is hell. Let me continue to mull it over, there are some nice world building aspects to this. I have always really liked the shrinking virus style of story. If I were to do it, I highly doubt that the mother character would be "innocently" seeking a foot rub. he he. Well, let me think about it. I dread writing. lol
Date: September 10 2017 10:03 AM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special Edition Part 1
The little addition of Mike doing an already naked strip tease dance, lol. Yet again you fine a way to perfectly immerse me into this story/series. The only thing I would've liked to have seen is that when Linda commenting on Mike's well endowed shaft she'd have laughing compared it to her exes sub par appendage. But other than that this flowed absolutely seamlessly with your story.
Also I haven't had a chance to comment but I very much so enjoyed the dream type sequence from HWB because it involved Steve being in that tiny scaled down replica of his house with your awesome attention to the most minute details. I honestly can't wait to see what you add next for Bethany and co.
PS did Linda take Mike and perfume with her to the funeral?
Thank you, Aaron! Yeah, so when I get a chance to write but cannot commit to new material I tweak what is already there. Good idea about Linda comparing Mike's naughty bits. Take him and the perfum to the funeral? I honestly don't know. It's something for me to think about. I've been rereading LTI and looking for openings to add stuff. So far not inspired but that could change at any time. Thank you very much for your comment, it lets me know my stuff is still being looked over by more than just myself!
Date: June 13 2017 11:26 AM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special edition Part 3
Whew, okay, finally read through that whole chapter. There's a lot in there worth covering. Overall I think I was most interested in the beginning and ending especially of this block. I always enjoy seeing giant characters digging into the privacy of the tormented tiny, just to add another layer of humiliation to the whole thing. Also interesting to me is the idea of Linda enacting these things on Jesse and Steve partly out of revenge on her son's behalf for their cheating, even while continuing to want her son punished for his own misdeeds. It gives Linda's character some moral gray area which I hope will continue to be explored later.
I admit I was a bit less into the middle third of the chapter, but more because it was tailored less to my specific macro tastes. I was puzzled over why Linda takes so long to directly address Jesse with speech, since she had so much to say to Mike earlier. Particularly where Jesse is first being silently manhandled, some of the detail and Jesse's pleas started to feel repeated. Again, that's ultimately not reeeally a complaint, since having more in these types of stories is always preferable to having less, at least as far as I'm concerned. The eventual move to Linda's crotch and the brief interaction between the two cheaters was a pleasant shift.
The section with Linda watching her son get some personal release was great, and I almost wished that bit was further fleshed out. It was a nice way of demonstrating how fast Mike has degraded as a person, that he'd do that with so little prompting.
I'll be moving on to the last chapter soon. There's lots to like here.
I'm right with you on all points. Yes, I should explain or addend Linda's silence to Jesse. Yup, the middle third wasn't my favorite either, though it was nice to write something that (in my mind at least perhaps not on the page) was almost absurdly Lovecraftian. The interaction between the cheaters slipped in there in my last revision. It had turned to reading like horror/catastrophy in my mind and I wondered how I could hammer that point home. Having them "meet" seemed especially terrible. Thank you for the compliment. Sometime, hopefully soon, I'll turn my attention to crafting something sparser and tighter. :)
Date: June 12 2017 12:27 PM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special Edition Part 2
Another good chapter. I'm glad the characters engaged in some different types of interactions here; the first chapter's action is enjoyable, but might've eventually gotten stale if it wasn't changed up, which you did here. The toe painting bit was darkly amusing. Also amusing was your take on another trope which Black/Ace Jack uses often too: the tiny son hidden while the mother talks to a girl who, unaware of the son's presence, mentions she finds him cute, but is ultimately downplayed by the mom, just to humiliate her listening son. It's one of those esoteric elements you mentioned, which I always enjoy seeing done well. One thing I find a little odd is that Linda keeps referring to him as her stepson, when I seem to remember he's her adopted son, not stepson. Not that it really matters, though I tend to prefer the adopted angle better. Anyway, that's all for now - I'll read the remaining two chapters soon, though it looks like I have quite a bit left by wordcount. In future stories, I probably would split those massive chapters up into smaller bits. Again, great stuff.
coolness. hey, I've just tweaked the third installment again in case you've got a stale version. The hidden son part was AceJack's which I reinterpreted. I am somewhat confident you'll know when Acejack's original story runs out and I am left to my own devices. To me at least it's pretty apparent. Ace's story actually ends right when the mother tells him she is going to paint her nails with him, but does not go into how she is going to do it, obviously. Yeah, stepson, adopted son. I had not noticed that before and you're absolutely right. This is why concept is different from finished product and should never be confused as I have done. BTW this was in smaller chapters at one time, something like 23 of them I think. I rewrote it after I hit one view per word and posted it in the huge chunks it is in now.
3 & 4 are more interesting to me because I was left without Ace's skeleton to adhere to. They also relate and set up where I went with the other, later arcs. I am still unable to square the circle of smut v. story. This is difficult when you are a hopeful novelist IRL and happen to create some trash for your own entertainment tht you post online. I tend to work on this stuff when I have writer's block or have most of a day stolen from me.
I wish you much creativity.
Date: June 06 2017 10:55 AM Title: Tiny Dancer:Special Edition Part 1
All right, so I'm finally actually sitting down to read this story through rather than jumping around as I have in the past. As I've mentioned before, we seem to share a lot of similar tastes, so as you can imagine I was a big fan of the action and heavy descriptions. It's interesting seeing the clear inspiration for Loving Visit used as a jumping off point, since the set-up is there and similar, but your writing style is so opposite to the more spare, faster moving Black/Ace Jack's. I probably tend to prefer a style like yours that really languishes in the details. It's nice to see a story in this kind of subject matter so readily deal with the pathos of the characters' bizarre encounters. I'm really enjoying getting such a thorough look of the situation's macro psychology. When I was first reading, it seemed like Linda's dialogue was so constant, almost like a running commentary of the action, that I was momentarily thrown (generally, I'd argue most macro writers use too little dialogue rather than too much). Ultimately I think I just recognize it now as a very specific idiosyncrasy of the story's world and your style, so that's not necessarily a critique, just an observation - if nothing else, it makes your story unique. In case I havent made it clear enough, I really dug this first chapter and will continue reading, in chronological order this time. Linda is a great giantess and the subtleties of the size difference with her son is well explored, especially when it comes to foot and hand action. Keep it up!
Wow, thank you very much for your compliments and insights and for taking the time to post a review!
My detail level is off the charts, and while I know that is a fatal though rare weakness in writing, thankfully I don't take this stuff too seriously and allow myself
to wallow in it in this one instance. I would argue that my subject matter is... well... really esoteric. People seem to fixate on feet, on vore. etc. I think that's
great and I love reading a good footcentric tale. I am certain that being lucky enough to catch some "Land of the Giants" episodes as a child impressed upon me this
further macro interest in handheld, for lack of a better term. While most of the other subgenre of tastes in macro I could argue are symbolic/erotic statements,
especially statements of power and domination, the "handheld" aspect (to me) is natural. It's what we do, what sets us apart from other life on this planet, what gave
us fire, refrigeration, war, clothing and satellites. If someone finds a tiny, and they're an average person, what will they first do? Pick the tiny up and bring them
close for an examination and a talking to. That instinctive and basic scenario already reeks of a potent, total loss of the tiny's sanctity as a person, and their
status as an object. Everyones stories short circuits that and gallop off to put them underfoot, or in mouth or whatever. I love it, but something seemed woefully
absent to me.
That's a very interesting comment about Linda's dialogue. It delights me to hear other's people's perceptions and to ponder other's experience of something, especially something I've created. I'm not sure where Linda came from or what I was trying to accomplish. There is a definite clear and unique voice there. To me, she is a serious minded woman whose career required someone with a formidible focus. I realized that in the few non-macro pornos I saw (in my youth) and the few domanitrix I've known who explained what/how they work- (they were random friends believe it or not. People gotta pay for college credits and rent however they can I guess lol) there was a pattern of bawdy, sexually-charged questioning... "You like this?" "Are you a bad ___?" etc. I tried to tone that down, taking out the artifice of forced eros and have Linda often end a bit of dialogue with a rhetorical question. Somehow I found that to be a good descriptor of easy, confident domination for her. It also seemed nicely erotic.
I have radically overhauled this story so much now that I hope I have not ruined it. You'll let me know, right? Seriously, I come to this site to read your stuff. At
one point there was Black/Ace Jack and you were "that other guy who does really intriguing things I hope to see more of" Now B/A Jack has dropped off the face of the
earth (may he be under the dominion of giant women someplace nice). I dig your stuff and I am always wondering what your take on things is, where it comes from, why is it underplayed here, built up eloquently there. It isn't an exaggeration to say that this story arc is a response to Jay, Jack and your creations. My point has been to hit as hard as I can those few who might appreciate something like this. Burnout be damned. Peace.