Reviews For Inconvenient Coincidence
Reviewer: matrix2590117 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2016 7:19 AM Title: No way out
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Date: August 18 2016 7:19 AM Title: No way out
Continue please
Author's Response:
I will, thanks for your comment !
Reviewer: zbh Signed [Report This]
Date: August 16 2016 10:02 AM Title: No way out
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Date: August 16 2016 10:02 AM Title: No way out
I love this story but there is one line you may wanna look at.
the sock’s crevice scent was far more awful than in any other spot, and he couldn’t retain himself: he puked.
“Yuck!!” exclaimed both Faith and Yuna in entertained disgust.
“You’re lucky I don’t make you lick it up as a punishment!
His mouth is sealed by the spell. If he puked he would have only puked in his mouth and have been forced to swallow it. There would be nothing to lick up. Aside from that great chapter and cannot wait for the next!
Author's Response:
You're very right, thanks for pointing it out !
Went a bit too fast on proof reading this one :)