Date: September 11 2016 2:40 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
Thanks edexdexx, you get it. Asha won't be satisfied, even if Nick goes willingly now thanks to weird chemicals, in her mind she doesn't believe it. What Tom told her was really a blow to her ego. Someone called her out for what she really is or has been acting like. That will linger in her mind. Wonder if this is Asha's true character.
Author's Response:
The dynamic between Nick and Asha may be shifting under the light of unflinching truth and who knows for sure how this will manifest...well me maybe :)
[Report This]Date: September 10 2016 4:34 PM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
That was intense. While I admire Nick trying to resist Asha, why doesn't Asha use force to take Nick and use him. Does she follow some code of sexual honor?
What I like is how seductive Asha is trying to be and how resistant Nick is trying to be. In the end, I hope Asha wins, becuase we know that's when the fun starts.
What I'm excited for is next chapter with Tom. While Asha is the queen of this, I wonder what Carrissa and TJ have in store for Tom.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Asha is a confident young woman flexing her seductive muscles and trying to bend Nick. She could very well just do what she wants, but the victory as others have noted would be hollow.
Date: September 10 2016 11:04 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
Wanted to reply to the comments and than I see a new chapter. ;)
I expected this type of conversation. Nick reacted good with honesty, I hope he has a smart follow up and acts calmer. If his conviction is strong and if he has taste for good character women, than it doesn't matter if he gets forced or just do it willingly to get it over with. It is just sex. Just keep your mind sharp for the days to come. Look if there is a way to grow back or to get transfered to a more mature person/woman or that at least the important people know about it, so that you can't be killed off without consequences. Hope he is a smart character and can see through Asha's mental weaknesses.
The problem is that stuff what Hester was working on. It probably does more than shrinking alone.
Author's Response:
True enough. There are layers of complexity to this situation and its entertaining to try and navigate down this path without sacrificing character defining traits. Not yet sure what I'm going to do with Hester. Her stunted emotions may lead her down a dark path...
[Report This]Date: September 10 2016 10:43 AM Title: Step Sibling Rivalry/Bonding
You know, I was just talking with someone about science fiction (from the 1931 FRANKENSTEIN w/Colin Clive and Boris Karloff, to STAR TREK: TOS) being the medium for controversially serious messages. And, here you are, demonstrating just that!
Talk about uncanny coincidences.
Anyway, in this chapter, you've brilliantly used the arguement between Asha and Nick to outline the pros and cons of gts-fanfiction, in general. Even if that hadn't been your intention! In most shrunken man stories, the guy shrinks instantly and mysteriously. And, almost immediately, he's found either by a domineering nymphomaniacal stranger; or the object of his unrequited crush...who then becomes a domineering nymphomaniac. And, if they're both teenagers, the male almost always gives up way too quickly. With the side-effects (namely, the parents of the missing young man) never shown to any extent!
Yet, you wisely chose to ignore that stereotype by having Nick explain his reluctance in very clear detail. Including the strong implication what Nick's sudden and inexplicable absence would do to his father (whom he doesn't hold a grudge against)!
Whew! Didn't mean to get so long-winded. It's just that it's so rare to find such an in-depth chapter in one of these stories that there's no other word to describe it except...refreshing. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you i appreciate your astute observation in relation to generalized archetypes in this style of work and thought it would be interesting to adopt an alternative approach for this character. :)