[Report This]Date: August 09 2016 7:00 PM Title: The Long Night
B)
I'm not against him dying. But for now, I'd prefer for him to be alive. I like how there are three types of tinies to explore: Scott, the aggressive, dominant and untamable; Nick, the realistic, crafty and mysterious; and Tom, the inexperienced, naive, submissive and romantic (the one I believe wouldn't mind spending the rest of his life tiny, if this meant being with Asha and the girls).
Unless you really don't feel like having him, I believe you may be losing fun opportunities to explore this type of personality with the girls if you dispose of him now.
Author's Response:
I was contemplating the demise as a story development vehicle to justify some future behaviors. I certainly appreciate you writing a review to share your thoughts. As I mentioned in a few other responses the seeds of where I want this to go are beginning to germinate. :)
Date: August 09 2016 8:54 AM Title: The Long Night
It is of my opinion that Tom should not die yet you have very few tinies in this story which means to me you need to be a bit more choosy when it comes to death also the chapter before when you had one of the girls talking about Tom that seems like a good foreshadowing point on something I find that it might be a little wasteful to just drop it like that but that's just me
Author's Response:
Thank you very much for taking the time to share your opinion it is certainly helping me find a direction. The next couple of chapters will see what becomes of our lovestruck tiny. :)
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 8:59 PM Title: The Long Night
I've never really been a fan of the unaware genre, doesn't really do much for me. I like knowing, conscious interaction between characters. But it'd be a waste for Tom to die at this juncture. He and Nick play off each other pretty well and are good foils to one another. Nick being brooding, clear headed, and a thinker. Tom being a heart on his sleeve sorta guy, impulsive, and not having the best of judgement. There's more avenues to be explored as far as the extent of Tom's infatuation with Asha and how far he'd be willing to go to please her
Author's Response:
Thanks for sharing your feelings. After reading the reviews here it has helped me to decide on a course of direction. You correctly point out how Nick and Tom are complimentary and work well in tandem. There are a host of possibilities yet to be explored...
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 7:51 PM Title: The Long Night
Now he knows where the harm is; between four boulder-sized mammaries and a hard-on!
RIP, Tom.
Author's Response:
"Thanks for the mammaries but it's time we said goodbye" that kind of thing?
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 7:20 PM Title: The Long Night
Definitely A in my opinion. I think the unaware concept should continue just a bit longer!
Author's Response:
Continuing unaware though perhaps not at Tom's ultimate expense? I'm starting to formulate an idea...
[Report This]Date: August 08 2016 5:18 PM Title: The Long Night
Funny. You and I both know that you are not torn over which direction you are going to take. This was just a way to get a good laugh, and you are right. While this choice is obvious for me, I find it funny that other direction is death.
Yeah, we need Tom. He is the counterpart of Nick. He makes Nick feel proud of himself and Tom resembles what Nick would have been if he wasn't so tough.
Ok, let's say Tom get's discovered. I'm just wondering how will he get discovered. Does he tickle someone in fear that he gets crushed? If I were Tom, I would run to a soft body part and chill there. That way, of the girls collide, Tom will be squeezed a bit, but no harm done.
Clever tactic with the collar bone. Sexy girls usually got a decent sized groove under there and I can easily picture Tom getting trapped in it.
Glad to see a good chunk of progress. It's funny that Tom is the one initiating it. It's like it was up to me to make things go forward and I took my chance to approach these girls.
Congrats Tom! He just kissed the girl that he has been worshiping for years. Not just that, but she is a giantess and now he is up close to her body. This scary situation might even excite him. I can't wait for him to see Asha's mom. I bet he will like her too.
Will Asha discover Tom or Tj? Will they both wake up? Will they think it's a dream or will they know that Tom is real and they play with him.
I love this cliffhanger, and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
The notion of the unaware crush was to create a sense of guilt among the girls so that they would be more inclined to keep Nick a secret to prevent knowledge of Tom's unfortunate demise. The feedback I'm receiving is generally more in line to Tom living so I'll have to get creative. I kind of knew what your leaning would be :)